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AndyHiro
10-13-2014, 11:03 PM
Your posts I do not care for.
Often wonder "D fuckz it der fer?!"
Hmmed and hawwed only to find.
Egregious flaws in your genetic design.
And supposed I were to read through your posts.
In search of wit in how you politic or boast.
It would seem quite grim indeed.
Oh woe is be, humanity.
And if you need more time to let this shit sink.
Get that I am not impressed at the speed that you think.
Your etiquettes butt and your opinions stink.
In fact I think you suck at pretty much everything.
So please lock it in and shut your damn trap.
And let these dumb kids be free to attempt rap.

And if your reading this obviously I'm not talking about you. Your splendid.

Clayray
10-14-2014, 11:21 PM
AndyHiro - AntiHero

N10tionalMalice
10-15-2014, 03:18 PM
Pretty good flow and concept...not a lot to pick at punchlines couldve been harder, but not a huge deal there...my fav parts were the opening two lines snd the closing two line, they both captured the concept and basically threw it at u, so thats great to see! Good drop and an easy read so I give 6.5/10...Im looking forward to reading some of ur deeper stuff, if I had to guess, Id say I'll be impressed by some fa sho...keep at it bro!

Window Taco
10-16-2014, 12:32 AM
The title lured me in because I am evil and I think your biggest strength here was execution of the concept. I think the flow started with the opening bar as killer but it dipped just a little bit in the second bar towards the middle. Not a huge deal by any means because you merely need to just delete a word or two here and there. The tone you held onto was cool and I enjoyed the piece. I would only suggest elaborating on pointless posts a bit more to add more depth to it and deleting a word or two for flow like I said earlier.

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Your posts I do not care for.
Often wonder "D fuckz it der fer?!"

CopyPat
10-16-2014, 03:47 PM
hahaha i liked this. ive seen some of ur stuff in the cypher and this was along that same vein. obviously felt like a keystyle but i like ur style. wanna see u drop a full open mic with a real written that you've spent some time on. stay up man