time stops for no man

[YDK]

Sitting here hungry, i've been drinking and Moody
Thinking back when I had the Lincoln and cruising
Around the town listening to blues travelers; damn
That car was like the brotherhood of the traveling pants
all of my people drove her, atleast the ones with a chance
And if they ain't have a license they still paid for the gas.
It was like a right to take the whip for a ride
Hit I-275 smoking, coming back from Cincinnati high.
The only radio that worked was a 2 speaker boom box
Battery powered with a tape deck that held the Roots; locked.
You either drove and played music or you sat in the back
cuz the radio had permanent shotty;
everybody else rolled the sacks.
It had a rebuilt title, and still idled a little low,
If we stayed parked for too long, the headlights dimmed to a glow.
Punch the gas and Rev the engine; she roared back to life every time,
Till one night we hit a tree, and couldn't stop her from dying.
She was the whole blocks car, half the people in it I never knew
Which makes it odd I cared more that the engine was through
Than I did for the kid that died that night with her too
Because he was just a bystander in the the death of my youth.
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[Exis]

Alot of things you write the average joe can relate to...it's good in that aspect, brings a refreshin' feel to the OM when most of us pen up stuff that's more often thought up so much to the extent that the realism when readin' it is non existent.I have to be in the mood to read your stuff tbh but when I am and do it's normally an enjoyable read...this is no exception, for what it is shit was cool man.

Stay upwards.

[Vulgar]

Pretty atmospheric and I commend you for that. On first read, it had a satisfying air about it, you weren't overambitious or setting it up for anything epic or exaggerated. Keeping it casual is an underrated skill, something I find myself being hit-or-miss with a lot. I like that you expanded on the history of the car and its psychological residue. In terms of criticism, it wasn't a strong topical verse. Development and thoroughness seem to be something you can work on.

Keep it up.

[YDK]

Thanks guys, I was just bored an just kinda threw it together in about 15 mins to write something since I haven't in awhile lol appreciate the feed

[Mr. J]

This was a smooth piece makes me reminisce as well
though I didn't bump the Roots til' later years I always had Outkast
either way you paint a picture quite well & don't drag the verse out
which makes for a smooth sailing type of piece which draws one in
I enjoy how the imagery splices together with the pic as well
either way the vibe was on point, and the flow was smooth
nice drop breh

[YDK]

Thanks bruv