dead man, TARNISH

[dead man]

so



habit dependent. majora's mask of resentment
its sad when solitude becomes your antidepressant
back at the breakfast table you were asking me questions
which i answered indirectly for the palpable tension
relish the wait, a hunter's etiquette. the silence erupts
7 seconds delayed. now we're feeling awkward as fuck
tar-stained smiles. tarmac roads on Clark street parking the truck
you put the tar in tarnished cause you're coughing it up
lost in the lust. like august at dusk, lights in the distance
its transportive. dope per dosage like a licensed physician
writer of sentences. writer of truth. writer of fiction
stretching artistic nuance with no type of extension
shine opalescent. cybergenetic hydrogen weapon
biosynthetic spikes delivered via viral infection
sniper attention. grad student indecisive as freshman
misguide me with your intellect, satire, disconnection
your eyes are electric like your skin is velour
silky and porous. a bit complex like adding 60 to 4
system disorder. prisoner, you're pretty as porn
road tripping Discordia for an idol to mourn
less insightful than bored. too desensitized to rebel
believing half of what i see and every lie that you tell
put your ear to the shell. now put your eye to the chamber
its not goodbye. its suicide. its, i'll see you later



DEADMAN

[Witty]

its sad when solitude becomes your antidepressant

I nearly cried at this line because it is too real.

When you are the only person you want to be with.

Fuck lol

I'm drunk as always, maybe more than usual, but this was dope as usual.

I like how you make words feel like they have been resting within me forever and the only way they get free is when you write them.

for real...you're my favourite.

[YDK]

Wat witty said

Real shit.

[Pent uP]

First four were bonkers,

A bit complex like adding 60 to 4 was slick

Eyes are electric and artistic nuances were dope...really the whole thing was solid. Verse hit home hard and never lost its luster

dope

[Plot]

this was sickness, the middle part wowed me

[Coup]

interesting read

[dead man]

Yeah? Say true?

[big baby]

witty gay irl

[Witty]

witty gay irl

If I was what would that mean?

Lol @ me for being gay?

Lol i get it.

[big baby]

defensive. offended.

[Witty]

defensive. offended.

Very much so.

[Wise Wiggles]

ridiculous. flow bonk. everything dope.

[PancakeBrah]

The flow was bonk.

[El Muffin]

"its sad when solitude becomes your antidepressant"

HITS HOME LIKE COLLISIONS W/ CATCHERS

[dead man]

real name no gimmicks

[NYCSPITZ]

10/10

this has been said before but it's a shame that we pieces of shit of theNC community are your only audience. If you spit this at open mics in NY you'd get mad librarian pussy. Record this shit my nigga...make it a habit just start with a cheap lil 10 dollar mic and doors will open where you'll meet somebody who likes you with a home studio

[Dove Dozer]

start making music. your writing is amazing

[Pharaohs Army]

great flow

[holocene]

Hello dead man. This verse stood out among the other open mic verses because of the melodic feel and careful word choice. The writing was cohesive but still organic. The last lined struck me as tacked on, though. It might have been because you signed your name (:

[KennyCerealBowl]

Genius,i wish,to write like u

[Bodey]

Couldn't choose a favorite line. I look up to developed writers like yourself, and Vulgar, and Wise Ways, and dullboy. I always hoped that someday I'd be on that level, that effortless flow, that underlying message as well as emotional impact. This piece had it all, and when I step back from my own shit, I realize how basic I really am, and how I wana go back to school and re-train my brain to get those creative juices flowing like old days. I liked this piece so much I read it twice. Much appreciated, very powerful stuff