.. You can't tell me shit!! I'm self centered like photo cropping selfie pics!!,

[Scrollz]

I'm fully loaded on that foolio shit
act a ass like Murphy on that movie role bit //
I'll quit rap while Ahead I walk the valley of the shadow of deaf
and get twisted like coolios wig //
head trip, my dangerous mind gets sober when I smoke n drink,
a oxymoron it's probly boredOm //
that would make me try oxys with black sabbath geeks,
a real school boy, Q.. dodged catholic priests,//
you never felt fear, I grabbed little females rears,
hated group projects, white people smelt weird//
but anyway my point is I'm slightly off
...swerving front of the boys be the lines he cross //
I'd stay in my own lane if they straightened
please stay in your own lane help just save it//
.. You can't tell me shit!!
I'm self centered like photo cropping selfie pics!!, //
...open bars with naive chicks
who knows all the words to every single 90s hits, //
and they highly lit, I'll most likely hit
too drunk to do the right thing this ain't no spike lee flick//
.. But he got game like Ray Allen clown
to take shots in numbers, when he be downtown//
in the heat the moment, kid don't got shit to lose ya
- only picture me lose getting fit on the Biggest Loser.//

[dull boy]

Leeeeet's dooo the tiiiiime warrrrp, agaiiiiiiiiiiiiiin

[Witty]

Leeeeet's dooo the tiiiiime warrrrp, agaiiiiiiiiiiiiiin

lol

This was ok tho, apart from all the decorations you put on it.

Christmas is over bro.

[Scrollz]

are you insult of me?? lol I don't know..or you saying im "gifted"..

[PancakeBrah]

He was insulting you. But Witty insults are like friendly punches on the shoulder from a long lost pal whilst drinking at the bar, so don't be mad.

Anyways, this was similar to your other Open Mic that I read that a lot of it was gibberish that I can't be bothered to parse out. I will say that this piece was the superior of the two. A bit more cohesive. Or maybe I enjoyed it more because your current writing weaknesses are less exposed in a shorter piece. Again, a lot of the wordplays and connections were weak. But the flow and rhymes were average, so that's a starting point.

Thanks.