Contender Match: Defiant 2-0 vs jilti 2-0 - JILTI WINS

[Sharp]

Netcees Battle League Season VIII


Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday, April 23th 2014 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours



Line Limit:

Minimum of 12, maximum of 18
If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first


For additional Rules refer to rule thread


First to 5, win by at least two votes
Good luck!

Defiant jilti

[Defiant]

Check

[jilti]

Going 30

[Sharp]

Check

Going 30

administrative decision

no one will read/vote on a 60 line battle

please don't drop more than 20 lines

[Defiant]

Il probably need an extension

[jilti]

personal trainer w/ iron swords & hatchets, put corpse in caskets
let Defined his family all shredded like they signed up for the total package
horrid battle record. kill & bury u in a mausoleum entryway wall
took 10 years to join the 20/20 club, now your going straight to the hall
ya hoe aint worth the 5 dollars she charged after poundin that ass
so threw her out my car w/ $3 and said the Fiat to include a gallon of gas
challenge he has is which male lover to fuck first & swallow seeds
hence the reason he has problems with Meniscus he's always on his knees
i'm at a strip club with women around doing obscene things
u'd rather a Guidance for u, while he's moving ur hand down his g-string
see we battled b4, shattered ur jaw so bad was afraid to log in
already Puncture bitch ass, this match is just the nail in the coffin
ur bff caught ten from a pgf.. thats firearm with target-tracking accuracy
my precision-Guided Tore Through Temple, like it was part of campus faculty
actually his dad's bi. Guess Jeans dont skip a generation as before
nasty whores. i got this win in the back pocket, ya got a man's hand in urs
nothing's off limits. everything i Airfare game so lets talk more..
cuz ur moms pussy has a mind of its own, her Pilots everyone on board



18 lines. Defiant

[Defiant]

Contender Match: Defiant 2-0 - jilti is trash, if i want to see 2007 wordplays id read old battles



Concepts 8 years old, come on who u tryna kid w/ bars fag
If life is a journey, yours is a time machine to the top 10 punches of a david lama mag
Il murder this fag, rip out his insides n grind his brains
N finally give him a spotlight battle, w/ 10 of those tryna find his remains
Old hush n orc battles Is how this gayboy rehearses
So when he goes out on a limb, its only w/ one of neighbors verses
Dudes a tramp, people only wana see u stand there at range
If home is where you lay your hat, yours is flat, on the street w/ a handful of change
ugly as fuck, we know the bitch who u going home tonight is
When I clown ya girl its just scratching the surface, like u do to her dermatitis
Never getting props, everyone here would pound ya view
Ya verses we dont just mark ruffalo, we hope the hulk can spend a round w/ you
This guys a faggot, if he even sees a girl this flop is walking
Bitches so much, dudes are known to popinjay regularly just to stop you talking
Ya girl would rather anything else, dont mean to be a prick her sir
Photo of u 2 is such a sight of sore eyes, shes letting muff take a pic w/ her
Coulda made this battle legendary but your pure luck in this thin
Have no problem breaking the box office for you, w/ 1 kick to the carboard u do your business in

[Split Eight]

wowwww hahahaha. be back for this

[Split Eight]

personal trainer w/ iron swords & hatchets, put corpse in caskets
let Defined his family all shredded like they signed up for the total package
>k
horrid battle record. kill & bury u in a mausoleum entryway wall
took 10 years to join the 20/20 club, now your going straight to the hall
>meh
ya hoe aint worth the 5 dollars she charged after poundin that ass
so threw her out my car w/ $3 and said the Fiat to include a gallon of gas
>very meh
challenge he has is which male lover to fuck first & swallow seeds
hence the reason he has problems with Meniscus he's always on his knees
>wordplay stretched but I liked the concept otherwise
i'm at a strip club with women around doing obscene things
u'd rather a Guidance for u, while he's moving ur hand down his g-string
>lmaoo
see we battled b4, shattered ur jaw so bad was afraid to log in
already Puncture bitch ass, this match is just the nail in the coffin
>good
ur bff caught ten from a pgf.. thats firearm with target-tracking accuracy
my precision-Guided Tore Through Temple, like it was part of campus faculty
>lame
actually his dad's bi. Guess Jeans dont skip a generation as before
nasty whores. i got this win in the back pocket, ya got a man's hand in urs
>ok but pretty similar to Guidance
nothing's off limits. everything i Airfare game so lets talk more..
cuz ur moms pussy has a mind of its own, her Pilots everyone on board
>dec



18 lines. Defiant

Concepts 8 years old, come on who u tryna kid w/ bars fag
If life is a journey, yours is a time machine to the top 10 punches of a david lama mag
>lol
Il murder this fag, rip out his insides n grind his brains
N finally give him a spotlight battle, w/ 10 of those tryna find his remains
>nice
Old hush n orc battles Is how this gayboy rehearses
So when he goes out on a limb, its only w/ one of neighbors verses
>hahaha
Dudes a tramp, people only wana see u stand there at range
If home is where you lay your hat, yours is flat, on the street w/ a handful of change
>tough concept to make work well but ok
ugly as fuck, we know the bitch who u going home tonight is
When I clown ya girl its just scratching the surface, like u do to her dermatitis
>na
Never getting props, everyone here would pound ya view
Ya verses we dont just mark ruffalo, we hope the hulk can spend a round w/ you
>?
This guys a faggot, if he even sees a girl this flop is walking
Bitches so much, dudes are known to popinjay regularly just to stop you talking
>nope
Ya girl would rather anything else, dont mean to be a prick her sir
Photo of u 2 is such a sight of sore eyes, shes letting muff take a pic w/ her
>k
Coulda made this battle legendary but your pure luck in this thin
Have no problem breaking the box office for you, w/ 1 kick to the carboard u do your business in
>word

this is tough to call. If I had to do bar vs bar it'd be

defined
guidance
puncture
pilots

vs.

lama mag
spotlight
limb
box office

initial read I had Defiant with a few solid punches up front. 2nd I had jilti, thought Defiant's misses were worse. I think both verses are about even in terms of overall quality, I thought Def had a better start and Jilti had strong middle section. both had 2 punches that were pretty much the same. say they were neck & neck throughout

If I went overall impact as the deciding factor, I think Jilti took it in a very close one

[El Muffin]

Jilti had

Opener
guidance ..even tho I did that wp long ago..this is way better
puncture
Backpocjet lmfaoooo lotb

4 quotes

Temple was almost. Creative but just a bit unwieldy


Umm defiant had

Opener
spotlight
limb
hat

The next 6 were wtf

Muff line was eh too. N I usually like when I'm referenced

Closer was ok


4 quotes

Fuck defiaaant

I thought u were Goin to tk this convincingly but u fell.off bad towards end

Its close but lotb is tiebreaker
V/jilti

[Orc]

personal trainer w/ iron swords & hatchets, put corpse in caskets
let Defined his family all shredded like they signed up for the total package
[seems like it should be done already but i've never seen it. fresh wp nice connection]
horrid battle record. kill & bury u in a mausoleum entryway wall
took 10 years to join the 20/20 club, now your going straight to the hall
[this is okay. light tho]
ya hoe aint worth the 5 dollars she charged after poundin that ass
so threw her out my car w/ $3 and said the Fiat to include a gallon of gas
[i actually like this. smooth delivery. wp was okay. funny]
challenge he has is which male lover to fuck first & swallow seeds
hence the reason he has problems with Meniscus he's always on his knees
[forced to me. delivery is getting stale. same bar every time it seems]
i'm at a strip club with women around doing obscene things
u'd rather a Guidance for u, while he's moving ur hand down his g-string
[forced again imo. didn't like it anyway tbh]
see we battled b4, shattered ur jaw so bad was afraid to log in
already Puncture bitch ass, this match is just the nail in the coffin
[more than likely an old wp but it hit to me and can't recall it offhand]
ur bff caught ten from a pgf.. thats firearm with target-tracking accuracy
my precision-Guided Tore Through Temple, like it was part of campus faculty
[im going to forget this bar exists]
actually his dad's bi. Guess Jeans dont skip a generation as before
nasty whores. i got this win in the back pocket, ya got a man's hand in urs
[didnt like the concept]
nothing's off limits. everything i Airfare game so lets talk more..
cuz ur moms pussy has a mind of its own, her Pilots everyone on board
[weak connection to me. set up was a stretch]

ur doing too much of the same thing. switch it up a bit. ya delivery is smooth but the wp gets old fast. stale. some cool bars tho

vs


Concepts 8 years old, come on who u tryna kid w/ bars fag
If life is a journey, yours is a time machine to the top 10 punches of a david lama mag
[rhyming was off. kills the impact right away]
Il murder this fag, rip out his insides n grind his brains
N finally give him a spotlight battle, w/ 10 of those tryna find his remains
[this is definitely played]
Old hush n orc battles Is how this gayboy rehearses
So when he goes out on a limb, its only w/ one of neighbors verses
[ok. relevant hit. light tho]
Dudes a tramp, people only wana see u stand there at range
If home is where you lay your hat, yours is flat, on the street w/ a handful of change
[ok again. another light one]
ugly as fuck, we know the bitch who u going home tonight is
When I clown ya girl its just scratching the surface, like u do to her dermatitis
[this is better. fresher/creative. altho a cliche]
Never getting props, everyone here would pound ya view
Ya verses we dont just mark ruffalo, we hope the hulk can spend a round w/ you
[rough or low? i see it.. just a stretch]
This guys a faggot, if he even sees a girl this flop is walking
Bitches so much, dudes are known to popinjay regularly just to stop you talking
[didnt dig this one]
Ya girl would rather anything else, dont mean to be a prick her sir
Photo of u 2 is such a sight of sore eyes, shes letting muff take a pic w/ her
[wtf was that set up. punch fell short]
Coulda made this battle legendary but your pure luck in this thin
Have no problem breaking the box office for you, w/ 1 kick to the carboard u do your business
[old here]

the rhyming one syllable needs to stop. ur battling 10 years surely u can rhyme more than one syllable. it rly hurts the effectiveness of ur punches. some okay relevant hits but no real standouts


v. jilti

[Sharp]

personal trainer w/ iron swords & hatchets, put corpse in caskets
let Defined his family all shredded like they signed up for the total package
ok
horrid battle record. kill & bury u in a mausoleum entryway wall
took 10 years to join the 20/20 club, now your going straight to the hall
baseball reference? lil bit of a stretch for this bar tbh
ya hoe aint worth the 5 dollars she charged after poundin that ass
so threw her out my car w/ $3 and said the Fiat to include a gallon of gas
ok lol
challenge he has is which male lover to fuck first & swallow seeds
hence the reason he has problems with Meniscus he's always on his knees
I know I seen something like this
i'm at a strip club with women around doing obscene things
u'd rather a Guidance for u, while he's moving ur hand down his g-string
ok
see we battled b4, shattered ur jaw so bad was afraid to log in
already Puncture bitch ass, this match is just the nail in the coffin
not feeling this one
ur bff caught ten from a pgf.. thats firearm with target-tracking accuracy
my precision-Guided Tore Through Temple, like it was part of campus faculty
cool idea but didn't hit too much for me... a little awkward in delivery
actually his dad's bi. Guess Jeans dont skip a generation as before
nasty whores. i got this win in the back pocket, ya got a man's hand in urs
cool idea, dont think I've seen before
nothing's off limits. everything i Airfare game so lets talk more..
cuz ur moms pussy has a mind of its own, her Pilots everyone on board
meh





Concepts 8 years old, come on who u tryna kid w/ bars fag
If life is a journey, yours is a time machine to the top 10 punches of a david lama mag
lol dope
Il murder this fag, rip out his insides n grind his brains
N finally give him a spotlight battle, w/ 10 of those tryna find his remains
ok
Old hush n orc battles Is how this gayboy rehearses
So when he goes out on a limb, its only w/ one of neighbors verses
cool
Dudes a tramp, people only wana see u stand there at range
If home is where you lay your hat, yours is flat, on the street w/ a handful of change
ok
ugly as fuck, we know the bitch who u going home tonight is
When I clown ya girl its just scratching the surface, like u do to her dermatitis
ok
Never getting props, everyone here would pound ya view
Ya verses we dont just mark ruffalo, we hope the hulk can spend a round w/ you
I straight up don't get the flip tbh... idk what ruffalo is supposed to mean
This guys a faggot, if he even sees a girl this flop is walking
Bitches so much, dudes are known to popinjay regularly just to stop you talking
okay, kinda awkard
Ya girl would rather anything else, dont mean to be a prick her sir
Photo of u 2 is such a sight of sore eyes, shes letting muff take a pic w/ her
coulda been done so much harder too
Coulda made this battle legendary but your pure luck in this thin
Have no problem breaking the box office for you, w/ 1 kick to the carboard u do your business in
alright closer



I got jilti on consistency. Defiant had some nice hits and while jilti's style got a lil stale after 18 lines it was still enough. I wanna seem him get more personal though. If Defiant kept making it personal he coulda taken it but goes for jilti for me. Good battle for 18 lines each though. Both were pretty good

v/jilti