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Sharp
06-02-2015, 01:33 AM
Netcees Battle League Season VIII


Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday, June 4th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours



Line Limit:

Minimum of 10, maximum of 16
If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first


For additional Rules refer to rule thread


First to 5, win by at least two votes
Good luck!
Zelphish _____

8===D~~~~(}:
06-02-2015, 01:36 AM
State your name cause idk who you are..lol

Check probably just 10 or match

Greed
06-02-2015, 08:48 PM
Dude an actor i gotta bet as far as bout it he the opposite
Aint no factor id put it on the set only time he'd shoot, is on the set
Quit playing like you locked that down, she clearly want out you fool so let her
This dude associates with sexy females and still turned out to be a bitch, bruce jenner
I stay high off that dank dro, fuck bitches and fold mics
Of course u would be invited to bangbros, nigga you've done that ur whole life
Whats wrong with your lips ho, i think the rest you should try n salvage
U the only ncg no one would blame for taking the kylie jenner challenge
This that game of thrones flow, how you gonna get the crown being awful and boring
Only time i see Z's in succession someone in a comic book snoring

8===D~~~~(}:
06-04-2015, 01:31 PM
Greedy...


ur crew is a bunch of broke niggas. thats sum shit u needa renovate
cuz i can either lay a fixin' on u.. or u can get ur whole section 8
& ur chicks a mess, she drools n shakes her tail all over..u like it schmuck
so u must love the fat 1's dog.. cuz evry bitch u've had was husky as fuck
fuck all ur acts, shows u put on, and all the roles that u lead in
they'll be callin u Aunt Viv.. the way i take out a Greedy bitch mid season
im givn Greedy str8 liqs, he gets girls but delivers the wrong pitch
wen it comes to quality puss ive got da Bombay, u got some well..vodka type bitch
werent u noob of the year or sumthn? we're in a dif class so u can nvr rob me
if he evr try n step into my kingdom he'll die, n ill phylum wit the rest of the bodies


quick 10

Sharp
06-05-2015, 02:13 PM
Dude an actor i gotta bet as far as bout it he the opposite
Aint no factor id put it on the set only time he'd shoot, is on the set
meh
Quit playing like you locked that down, she clearly want out you fool so let her
This dude associates with sexy females and still turned out to be a bitch, bruce jenner
nice
I stay high off that dank dro, fuck bitches and fold mics
Of course u would be invited to bangbros, nigga you've done that ur whole life
predictable but works
Whats wrong with your lips ho, i think the rest you should try n salvage
U the only ncg no one would blame for taking the kylie jenner challenge
ok
This that game of thrones flow, how you gonna get the crown being awful and boring
Only time i see Z's in succession someone in a comic book snoring
feel like this coulda been a lot harder




Greedy...
this is Greed aka Pryde. Greedy is someone else on RB... right?

ur crew is a bunch of broke niggas. thats sum shit u needa renovate
cuz i can either lay a fixin' on u.. or u can get ur whole section 8
ok but 8/ate is done a lot
& ur chicks a mess, she drools n shakes her tail all over..u like it schmuck
so u must love the fat 1's dog.. cuz evry bitch u've had was husky as fuck
bitch/dog is done a lot but ok with husky
fuck all ur acts, shows u put on, and all the roles that u lead in
they'll be callin u Aunt Viv.. the way i take out a Greedy bitch mid season
I wanna like the idea but it's not Greedy
im givn Greedy str8 liqs, he gets girls but delivers the wrong pitch
wen it comes to quality puss ive got da Bombay, u got some well..vodka type bitch
nah
werent u noob of the year or sumthn? we're in a dif class so u can nvr rob me
if he evr try n step into my kingdom he'll die, n ill phylum wit the rest of the bodies
ok


I think greed has it on consistency. doesn't help that zelph thought he was another guy... unless _____ is also Greedy on RB? I'll redo my vote if that's the case

Cred
06-05-2015, 05:35 PM
Bruce Jenner, bangbros

vs

Section 8, aunt viv

Even in quotes but judging by em I was diggin zelphs a bit more. Dat aunt viv joint was funny. N that Bombay line cuda been dope if worded right. Yeah so my vote..

V zelphish

fraze
06-05-2015, 06:15 PM
Dude an actor i gotta bet as far as bout it he the opposite
Aint no factor id put it on the set only time he'd shoot, is on the set
bad wording on a simple concept
Quit playing like you locked that down, she clearly want out you fool so let her
This dude associates with sexy females and still turned out to be a bitch, bruce jenner
too simple, not really effective as worded
I stay high off that dank dro, fuck bitches and fold mics
Of course u would be invited to bangbros, nigga you've done that ur whole life
light jab on played wp
Whats wrong with your lips ho, i think the rest you should try n salvage
U the only ncg no one would blame for taking the kylie jenner challenge
please. no
This that game of thrones flow, how you gonna get the crown being awful and boring
Only time i see Z's in succession someone in a comic book snoring
decent flip but setup was pointless and wording needs help



ur crew is a bunch of broke niggas. thats sum shit u needa renovate
cuz i can either lay a fixin' on u.. or u can get ur whole section 8
'lay a fixin' doesn't hit hard to me and 8/ate is played
& ur chicks a mess, she drools n shakes her tail all over..u like it schmuck
so u must love the fat 1's dog.. cuz evry bitch u've had was husky as fuck
like the concept but not worded well
fuck all ur acts, shows u put on, and all the roles that u lead in
they'll be callin u Aunt Viv.. the way i take out a Greedy bitch mid season
cool concept, bad wording
im givn Greedy str8 liqs, he gets girls but delivers the wrong pitch
wen it comes to quality puss ive got da Bombay, u got some well..vodka type bitch
liked the concept but the delivery was meh
werent u noob of the year or sumthn? we're in a dif class so u can nvr rob me
if he evr try n step into my kingdom he'll die, n ill phylum wit the rest of the bodies
more tie-ins would have made this hit harder, but still decent


Both verses were underwhelming to me, and could use better wording. '______' didn't have the greatest concepts either so that definitely hurts. Most of your bars were misses because of too simple concepts or wording that derailed the punch. 'bangbros' and 'Z's' were less bad but still not really quotable. Zelph had much better concepts, and his wording seemed more rushed than horrible, so maybe it's just a time/effort thing. Aunt Viv and Bombay could have been dope worded diff, and the closer was aight.

Vote Zelphish - overall better verses with better concepts and fewer misses.

ill nik-A
06-05-2015, 07:08 PM
Greed, Kylie Jenner challenge hit just could've been killer if worded better, bang bros was worded terribly but the idea was there

Zelph, the section 8 was cringe worthy, vodka line was worded bad could've been good, liked aunt viv regardless cuz it works, Huskey was ehhh ok I guess

This is a toss up, I think Zelph edged it
Both need to tighten up the wording

Glossy Finish Dick Lips
06-06-2015, 07:44 AM
I stay high off that dank dro, fuck bitches and fold mics
Of course u would be invited to bangbros, nigga you've done that ur whole life

vs

& ur chicks a mess, she drools n shakes her tail all over..u like it schmuck
so u must love the fat 1's dog.. cuz evry bitch u've had was husky as fuck
-Could have been executed a little harsher, tho. Mild as is but liked it.
werent u noob of the year or sumthn? we're in a dif class so u can nvr rob me
if he evr try n step into my kingdom he'll die, n ill phylum wit the rest of the bodies

Zelph got it..

Junto
06-06-2015, 02:12 PM
Greed -
On the set wording was really bad.
Bruce Jenner... decent twist but the reference is gettin old fast.
Thought I seen the bangbros concept in that thread... either way too simple for my taste
Kylie Jenner was eh, cool concept but wasn't feelin the "you the only ncg" execution.
Idk why you set up Z's like that but prolly your best line to me here. Decent

Vs.

Zelphish -
Section 8 was ehhh... 'lay a fixin on you' not a phrase I'm familiar wit
Husky was about the same. Not a real complex concept & pretty simple associations
That Aunt Viv joint was solid, LOTB to me
Wasn't feelin Bombay / vodka
Phylum was cool

Some decent concepts on each side... execution needs work...
Tish Fac had aunt viv & phylum though, I thought those were enough to win

V/ Zelphish

El Muffin
06-06-2015, 06:18 PM
Greed
Opener. Was eh. Redundant. Coukd have done it differently
bruce Jenner This rendition is ok
bang bros NIce.
last 4 were eh to me tho

Zelphish
opener ehh. Lay a fixin. What is that
husky ehh ok
aunt Viv was cool I guess
Bombay eh
phylum was dope af and lotb

Close. Zelph got it w/ his closer

Otherwise it's a toss uP

V/zelph