Paradigm 0-0 vs IAmRhetoric 0-0 - PARADIGM WINS

[Sharp]

Netcees Battle League Season VIII


Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday, June 11th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours



Line Limit:

Minimum of 10, maximum of 16
If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first


For additional Rules refer to rule thread


First to 5, win by at least two votes
Good luck!
Paradigm IAmRhetoric

[IAmRhetoric]

14?

[Paradigm]

14 is cool

[El Muffin]

Rhetoric requests an ext

His Internet is out or sumthin

[Paradigm]

Rhetoric requests an ext

His Internet is out or sumthin

are you in contact with him or something I kind of want confirmation hes going to show up tomorrow

[IAmRhetoric]

I showed up... quick keyed at the library n posting this shit. I'm literally moving to New Jersey TODAY. let's goooooooooooooooo


Air Force One shit, bullet’s will kill the president.
It’ll be a World War.. too, when I tell you “Para,troopers surround your residence..”

If he claims he works a set, he’s done or deceased,
What an actor, because the only set he step on is the one for Grease..

I wouldn’t be surprised if he lived in a mobile home basement,
Because the only time this clown Para,shoots is when he’s overdosing on vacation..

Not to get too scientific, I still got the blasta’s on,
But one jab’ll have my opponent Paradigm Shift.. like he put 3-D glasses on..

I’ll bring him to a venue, let him rap n get sweaty, slow
Hit em with the hawk, n we’ll see P all over the crowd like an R Kelly show..

I consider myself honorable, but i’m hurried to leave ‘em depraved,
The only time you see Par-ley… is when he’s buried deep in the grave..

Named my new pistols UPS, unstoppable revolvers,
The bullets fly land, air, water.. slogan for em is “United Problem Solvers..”
Paradigm Sharp

[Paradigm]

Paradigm 0-0 vs IAmRhetoric 0-0
Winner=Para 70/30 cuz i kno wat hes capable of

[Sharp]
Paradigm: 60/40


Get Al Sharp'd In here, it's civil rights news actually
the way they left you unarmed I might get blamed for police brutality
Might've wrote his best now watch'em choke to death
this Dub locked down better than the defense of Dellavedova Steph
Styles been awk, beaten till those rhymes end, stop
& leave a Redder Ric Flair screaming with out the knifes edge chop (WOO!)
Dragonglass left behind, scars on both of his wrists
that HardHome lifes coming back to haunt you not John Snow on his ship
Guns im shootin put smog over ya city, make a quake sound
the barrels you hold dwarfs in comparison & are smuggled into Lake Town
NC Veteran, Longbar Legend so you know he's gonna die
Every punch leaves Rhet In A fucked up situation, worse than Beyonds Eye
Perform dark rituals in a black mask wit a massive cup
Your serious Issues with Magic need to be addressed... NOT the ones bought off Bags & Hush

too lazy to clean up my wording lol

[8===D~~~~(}:]

Air Force One shit, bullet

[8===D~~~~(}:]

Air Force One shit, bullet’s will kill the president.
It’ll be a World War.. too, when I tell you “Para,troopers surround your residence..”
maybe wording could have helped this idk, but right now its not good
If he claims he works a set, he’s done or deceased,
What an actor, because the only set he step on is the one for Grease..
saw another grease line this week but completely different. didnt like this
I wouldn’t be surprised if he lived in a mobile home basement,
Because the only time this clown Para,shoots is when he’s overdosing on vacation..
ill give u credit for the attempt becuz u could have made this nice, just wording hurt it a lot
Not to get too scientific, I still got the blasta’s on,
But one jab’ll have my opponent Paradigm Shift.. like he put 3-D glasses on..
ehh decent at best
I’ll bring him to a venue, let him rap n get sweaty, slow
Hit em with the hawk, n we’ll see P all over the crowd like an R Kelly show..
lmao idk why i laughed so hard at this
I consider myself honorable, but i’m hurried to leave ‘em depraved,
The only time you see Par-ley… is when he’s buried deep in the grave..
so corny that its hilarious
Named my new pistols UPS, unstoppable revolvers,
The bullets fly land, air, water.. slogan for em is “United Problem Solvers..”
nah


You trying to jock muffs new style or what yo? lol

[8===D~~~~(}:]

vs


Get Al Sharp'd In here, it's civil rights news actually
the way they left you unarmed I might get blamed for police brutality
ehh decent at best, pretty played
Might've wrote his best now watch'em choke to death
this Dub locked down better than the defense of Dellavedova Steph
wording, decent attempt
Styles been awk, beaten till those rhymes end, stop
& leave a Redder Ric Flair screaming with out the knifes edge chop (WOO!)
nah lol
Dragonglass left behind, scars on both of his wrists
that HardHome lifes coming back to haunt you not John Snow on his ship
nah
Guns im shootin put smog over ya city, make a quake sound
the barrels you hold dwarfs in comparison & are smuggled into Lake Town
ehh
NC Veteran, Longbar Legend so you know he's gonna die
Every punch leaves Rhet In A fucked up situation, worse than Beyonds Eye
concept played and u could have worded it better for a better outcome
Perform dark rituals in a black mask wit a massive cup
Your serious Issues with Magic need to be addressed... NOT the ones bought off Bags & Hush
nah


I came in this battle expecting Para to get the easy win here, ive seen him drop really good in the past and i didnt think rhetoric could hang..what this all turned out to be was both battlers dropped some pretty bad material. Rethoric had some humor in his verse but everything was worded pretty awkward, you gotta find a way to tie everything in better yo. Para had a lot of played stuff and wording seemed to be an issue on most of his bars too. I'm actually gonna vote on who had the better concepts overall because nothing really stood out from either verse. So in that case im going with Rhetoric.

Vote: IanRethroic

[Sharp]

Air Force One shit, bullet’s will kill the president.
It’ll be a World War.. too, when I tell you “Para,troopers surround your residence..”
seen stuff like this before but ok wording except for 'world War... Too' why break it up with anything more than a comma?
If he claims he works a set, he’s done or deceased,
What an actor, because the only set he step on is the one for Grease..
nah
I wouldn’t be surprised if he lived in a mobile home basement,
Because the only time this clown Para,shoots is when he’s overdosing on vacation..
I get the shoots thing but but what does a parachute have to do with this bar? Not really a flip here
Not to get too scientific, I still got the blasta’s on,
But one jab’ll have my opponent Paradigm Shift.. like he put 3-D glasses on..
I don't think that's what a paradigm shift is tbh. I like it outside of the 3-d glasses part tho. Good idea but iffy for me
I’ll bring him to a venue, let him rap n get sweaty, slow
Hit em with the hawk, n we’ll see P all over the crowd like an R Kelly show..
funny but so old lol
I consider myself honorable, but i’m hurried to leave ‘em depraved,
The only time you see Par-ley… is when he’s buried deep in the grave..
Alright here's where we hit a fundamental issue I see battles have: flipping pieces of a name and not being consistent on pronunciation. (@sn00p for some ipa demonstration). While you did the right thing for a partial name flip and went for the syllable it had a different vowel sound, you're still flipping the "pair" part of his name - in a live battle you wouldn't change your opponents name to flip it right?
Named my new pistols UPS, unstoppable revolvers,
The bullets fly land, air, water.. slogan for em is “United Problem Solvers..”
I like the idea. Would hit better (imo) if it were more concise but still hits well regardless



Get Al Sharp'd In here, it's civil rights news actually
the way they left you unarmed I might get blamed for police brutality
Ok but no real flip tbh
Might've wrote his best now watch'em choke to death
this Dub locked down better than the defense of Dellavedova Steph
You're just referencing stuff lol... Coulda been cooler imo
Styles been awk, beaten till those rhymes end, stop
& leave a Redder Ric Flair screaming with out the knifes edge chop (WOO!)
solid
Dragonglass left behind, scars on both of his wrists
that HardHome lifes coming back to haunt you not John Snow on his ship
is that supposed to be "no John snow"? Either way this is a dope bar
Guns im shootin put smog over ya city, make a quake sound
the barrels you hold dwarfs in comparison & are smuggled into Lake Town
kinda weird on the wording but I like the idea a lot
NC Veteran, Longbar Legend so you know he's gonna die
Every punch leaves Rhet In A fucked up situation, worse than Beyonds Eye
I'm saying I never seen rhet in a before, meaning he could said "rhet in a fucked up situation like botched eye surgery" and it'd still work. I don't think the beyond part is worth mentioning
Perform dark rituals in a black mask wit a massive cup
Your serious Issues with Magic need to be addressed... NOT the ones bought off Bags & Hush
basic but funny



Alright IAmRhetoric sorry to nitpick but I figured I'd get in depth in the name of elevation and because there's been issues with the other vote so far

Basically
Cool battle I got paradigm with an extra bar that hit and hardhome as lotb

Stay up and VOTE gentlemen

[Sn00p]

Air Force One shit, bullet’s will kill the president.
It’ll be a World War.. too, when I tell you “Para,troopers surround your residence..”
^the .. before too threw me off tbh. the connections are there tho. decent
If he claims he works a set, he’s done or deceased,
What an actor, because the only set he step on is the one for Grease..
^not a bad idea. but then u said set twice, and the wp itself is kinda played.
I wouldn’t be surprised if he lived in a mobile home basement,
Because the only time this clown Para,shoots is when he’s overdosing on vacation..
^unlike ur opener, this is missing a connection. parachutes is there kinda just for the wp
Not to get too scientific, I still got the blasta’s on,
But one jab’ll have my opponent Paradigm Shift.. like he put 3-D glasses on..
^cool. the paradigm shift part was nice. connection cud'a been stronger than 3d glasses, but this was still cool
I’ll bring him to a venue, let him rap n get sweaty, slow
Hit em with the hawk, n we’ll see P all over the crowd like an R Kelly show..
^p/pee is rly old & also kinda lazy
I consider myself honorable, but i’m hurried to leave ‘em depraved,
The only time you see Par-ley… is when he’s buried deep in the grave..
^if we wanna nitpick this doesnt work like bore np's on neighbor, but idk. this wasn't bad
Named my new pistols UPS, unstoppable revolvers,
The bullets fly land, air, water.. slogan for em is “United Problem Solvers..”
^not bad

vs.

Get Al Sharp'd In here, it's civil rights news actually
the way they left you unarmed I might get blamed for police brutality
^ehh. concept was def there, but the flip was lazy, w/ the wp in the setup & everything
Might've wrote his best now watch'em choke to death
this Dub locked down better than the defense of Dellavedova Steph
^oookay. kinda statementish
Styles been awk, beaten till those rhymes end, stop
& leave a Redder Ric Flair screaming with out the knifes edge chop (WOO!)
^not bad
Dragonglass left behind, scars on both of his wrists
that HardHome lifes coming back to haunt you not John Snow on his ship
^word. cool
Guns im shootin put smog over ya city, make a quake sound
the barrels you hold dwarfs in comparison & are smuggled into Lake Town
^this was dope tbh
NC Veteran, Longbar Legend so you know he's gonna die
Every punch leaves Rhet In A fucked up situation, worse than Beyonds Eye
^yup, solid
Perform dark rituals in a black mask wit a massive cup
Your serious Issues with Magic need to be addressed... NOT the ones bought off Bags & Hush
^this was a lazy connection lmao. but decent line

rhet has all the ideas. if he can work them into stronger punches by flipping them better, i can see him elevating fast. like paradigm shift was dope wp. if u had had a slightly better connection, that woulda been lotb. para got lazy, but he still had some dope concepts. the got & hobbit lines were pretty fire tbh. & that won him the battle. he just had the hardest quotes. but like i said, rhet doesn't need to adjust much to become rly good. so props to both.
v/para

[murda sho]

IAR

Not to get too scientific, I still got the blasta’s on,
But one jab’ll have my opponent Paradigm Shift.. like he put 3-D glasses on..

I’ll bring him to a venue, let him rap n get sweaty, slow
Hit em with the hawk, n we’ll see P all over the crowd like an R Kelly show..


Paradigm

Styles been awk, beaten till those rhymes end, stop
& leave a Redder Ric Flair screaming with out the knifes edge chop (WOO!)

NC Veteran, Longbar Legend so you know he's gonna die
Every punch leaves Rhet In A fucked up situation, worse than Beyonds Eye

this was a close battle surprisingly... I know Paradigm from HollaFront he definitely been doing this a while but this wasn't one of his best verses, IAR's verse wasn't trash though that R Kelly line was delivered well but the word play on the Ric Flair line was niiice, y'all both had one that hit and a slight jab but I liked Paradigms more so v/ Para

[~RustyGunZ~]

Lake town and retina

Vs

Eh nothing really the wording was shit and the concepts had bad connections.

Vote Para

[Allen Knight]

UPPPIN FOR ACOUPLE MORE VOTES

[Bust]

Rhet

Opener kinda
I lije 3d glasses thought it was smooth


Vs..


Para

Opener
Tic flair dope
Retina dope

I got 3-2 in quotes but feel like para had two really dope lines which controlled this match imp.. Ric flair was hot.. I am, u pretty nice just gotta avoid the played shit as much as u can plus a lol better execution, I get lazy too n rush shit but I'll be good bro, nice read yall

Vote para

[jilti]

Parashoots, paradigm shift, p all over crowd

Vs

Redder ric flair, hardhome, lake town, rhet in a

Good battle by both participants
4-3
V/para