WEEK 7: MMLP vs. Silver - (MMLP wins)

[Vulgar]

LGPA Season 1: Week 7

MMLP ribbit Silver


Check ins: Tuesday (Midnight Eastern time)
Poems Due: Friday (Midnight Eastern time)
Votes due: Sunday (Midnight Eastern time)


Topic:

Specific narrator week: Write from the perspective of a machinist.

Good luck.

[MMLP]

Petr cech!

[2tripple0]

here as well

[MMLP]

Provided with a set of instructions
Then placed in a pod
Mechanical and good with functions
I was made for the job

A thanks or acknowledgment
Was hardly received
It dented my confidence
Disheartening me

Usually left to my own devices
As my circuits blew
We never operated in silence
And it turned my screws

Often the machines themselves would blast
Me and Skywalker would wing it
Many systems around us suffered a crash
And I felt myself unhinging

As I battled for good
But to win for the force
That was enough
It was the biggest reward

[Dope girl]

since I'm tagged in this I will drop soon

[Dope girl]

An employer who travelled here
Who travelled here from Florida
From Florida 20 days ago
20 days ago
& believed I can get a job
So I apply for computer
& blessed to have job

[sral]

LOL

I don't usually vote on MMLP battles for obvious reasons but I'm literally howling at Silver's verse here.

Amazing.

Vote - MMLP, barely.

[Objective]

Vote MMLP for a decent poem that followed the topic a lot better than Silver's.

[Inno]

Mmlp

Dope piece tbh. Liked the starwars theme you carried. Enjoyed the cadence
It was simple but it flowed freely with out any bumps. I would of loved to see you
Expand more on the second and third stanza. I thouggt those parts had so much
Depth and could really made for an interesting twist to your piece. Just knit picking
Lol. Good showing bro

[Woke]

V/ MMLP

sounded like a star wars verse, which is kind of weird. Silver came short and didn't say much. Marshall had more of what I consider a completed work while silver sort of started and ended faster then a virgin getting poon for the first time.

[Vulgar]

I hope Silver got the job as a computer machinist. It was a brilliant way to interpret the topic. Go Silver!

MMLP, this was an amusing take on the topic. Good instincts for slight changes of tone. At the end, you used a convincing tone of acceptance, personalizing the 'voice' of the aiding droid. I liked it, but I wish you and sraL would try to be more free with your structure in this league, just cause.

Vote - MMLP