Week 10 Contenders: Frank vs. Vulgar - (Frank wins)

[Vulgar]

LGPA Season 1: Week 10

Frank YDK

Check ins: Tuesday (Midnight Eastern time)
Poems Due: Friday (Midnight Eastern time)
Votes due: Sunday (Midnight Eastern time)


Topic:

Week 10 Topic (http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?p=527077#post527077)


Good luck.

[Frank]

Opened the map, spun the phone around

Came up with Trinidad

This is my official check in

[Vulgar]

This is my official check in

Belgium......

[Frank]

Noor Hassanali - but to me you're simply, Dad.
We dedicate our complexion to the mixing of the light skinned mom and dark skinnded dad.
We put candles on the cake in front of you. Blow each one of them - all sixty, dad
Make a wish - cause there is 60,000 on a list in front of you for a kidney, dad
All the kids tease us at school, why is our hair so frizzy, dad
You lose all control over the question - why you always get into a tizzy, dad
10 years old, running to your lap, taking a sip with tipsy dad
Glenfiddich 1937, 55 year old Macallan, Glenfarclas' we know our whiskeys, dad
We knew the careless, self centered, egotistical, stingy dad
Our heroic, chivalrous, charmingly silly dad
Blow out those candles, or are you too busy, dad?
Piggy back rides across the room, this little piggy had...
Gather the family for one last photo in front of the chimey dad
Chef hat, festive man - 'you just gotta try this chili' dad
We miss our dad - we had to write this quickly, dad
You see, you taught us not to be wimpy, dad
But right now we're teary eyed fore' the breath from your wish was windy dad
You were always shitty, dad. But we want you to know you weren't a shitty dad
Flip flops - tank top - country boy - city dad
Rags to riches, Dad
70's hippy dad - 2015 Indie dad
We're singing Happy Birthday now... your grand child dances in my wife
She is doing your shimmy, dad
Dad, feel the kicking - dad got a kick out of that - don't say you didn't, dad...
He kisses me, 10 years old on the cheek, his cheek grizzly, his whisker bristly
Dad, you're dying
We wonder who is in the will for Dad.
Close your eyes dimly, dad.
The window a crack,
Wait, one of your wishes, dad.
They have found a donor for you but the operation will be risky, dad.
So, where is my kidney coming from?
Guayaguayare...

Trinidad

[Vulgar]

Luxembourg horseman
your tassels are known to the umpteenth age
your harness is spoken of in halls, corridors
and through the charitable mouth of Foreman Grills

Globalization is a race
They're betting on the one that's lagging behind
not just in the polls but in the prospects
for glory and future and science graduations
Luxembourg horseman, what mighty hooves you have
with coin slot machines on public bathrooms
and generous train station vagrants who will take you
for a tour of the city of Brussels at half past wake
at no charge; as long as the hearts of the travelers are right

The state of things reflected in the crystallized marble spheres
Engineered beach balls of granite and rotund brass
flung to the outer European states and round back
over French rubble and German desires

Dutch pilgrimage under Swiss chocolate moons
Children gathered on a landmark's lower stairs
eating cold ice cream like it's not already icy enough out

Luxembourg horseman
I bid you safe passage - avoid Waterloo like the plague

[sral]

Damn, tough to vote on having read Frank's already and with Vulgar's the fresher in mind. Had to re-read.

Vulgar had a lot of titbits I liked that stood out as I read, especially "Swiss chocolate moons" and "coin slot machines on public restrooms".

Both conjured up instant snippets of brilliance that I felt deserved quoting. I liked that you also didn't always rhyme, you let the turns of phrase take prominence and that's something perhaps I could work on.

It was a refreshing read, I'm not sure I got it completely other than being about the EU I felt? Maybe it went over my head in parts but I like what I like.

LOL

Frank: I wasn't a HUGE fan of the constant -dad rhymes. I was almost relieved when you broke it up midway through for a sentence and thought you would defer away from it, then you reverted straight back to it and it took a little away from my enjoyment if I'm completely honest as I just feel that ish is a little lazy on the writers part (No offence, I hate it when I hear DNA keep using "out of here" and "nigga" in his shit too lol) but THEN you had that flip right at the end. It made it all worth it, for me. Not so much a twist ending as a satisfying one that almost brought it full circle and had me like "Oh, that's why he did it!". Suddenly it was like a two-steps-ahead chess move thought out for checkmate.

It's essentially what won me over. I can't lie. This one was close to me which is prob why votes are scarce, no one wants to be the first to vote on battles these days.

I'm going with Frank this week.

[Inno]

This was a cool battle but i feel like vulgar was at his bestvthis week
With just the right diction and references he loves to put in his work
Outsranding writing from both of you. Frank your language is something else
But i just feel like u caught vulgar clicking on all cylinders

Vote vulgar

[Inno]

@stritka Rakontur Destroyer @anyone

One more vote so we can move on to next week

[NYCSPITZ]

Mvgt frank. I enjoyed His finishing flair and creative elegance. Vulgar was dope. I loved the depth, but only wished his squid ink would've floated more gently toward the ocean floor, awakening an ennervated sting ray from his cumbersome slumber.

[Vulgar]

lol thanks for voting.

Frank wins!