Week 12 Contenders: Destroyer vs. Vulgar - (Destroyer wins)

[Vulgar]

LGPA Season 1: Week 12

Destroyer

Check ins: Thursday (Midnight Eastern time)
Poems Due: Friday (Midnight Eastern time)
Votes due: Sunday (Midnight Eastern time)


Topic:

See topic thread.


Good luck.

[Vulgar]

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[Vulgar]

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An aqua interloping aquifer is a wonderful thing
in parched land, where plateaus never plateau
and continents are seldom content
with the firewood they have to burn in season's cove

Spectrum colors budding cloves
magnetic embrace in fusioned springs
A psychadelic loonie bin
where spice heretics conduct their unruly rings...

I once knew a rope bridge with a fallback plan
she played musical chairs with her rain-induced planks
Links in the road seemed to warp like a trombone
neck deep in water unfit to breathe in

Secret languages of the desert storm forest
decoded, infatigable - adjoined by the chemical fibers
the ones that lended us directions when the fauna
went wry and poison ivy offered us trick vaccines

I won't pay a toll to a troll under a bridge
nor will I pass unchanged like a lummox through the plains
This is my Rashomon homage to the Predator theme
Notes of bear present in throat, too grizzly to understand
Prints on both sides of chest
the calligraphy of a hermit turned man
the flak vested black crescent moon commando
Lemonade stands on the hunt for Rambo

[Destroyer]

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We stopped the car
to watch as the sun fell again
and this time it was too hard
to even try and pretend
that which we always believed
that it would rise again
And out of the car stereo
Dylan's voice rang through the air
'It's not dark yet... but it's getting there'

& I thought back to the earlier days
when warnings came
'eat less meat,' they had said
'it increases methane
and leads to chest pains.'
but we all just blamed X-rays
and purchased sex slaves
there's more slaves now today you know
than ever before in history
that's pretty much just shit to me
& it seems to be no mystery
that people just bring misery
everywhere they go

it's probably why I feel guilty
for being sad to see it end
at least I hold you in my arms
so we can both pretend
that this wasn't what we wanted
now the final wish is mine
let it wash away to begin again
better than it was this time

[Inno]

Dope battle voting tonight

[Inno]

Vote destroyer

I felt like je touched me tho. Forreal that was a dope little diddy you wrote
About the world and how it will end up. Not heeding to wsrnings and letting
The inevitable occur. Dope take on the picture. Tho i dont see where sex slaves
Fit. Other than that, lovex your work.

Vuglar

I didnt like that troll line. I dotm know why it just sticks put for me like sore thumb
This was dull tbh man. Compared to last weeks entry i feel like this fell just. Bit
Short for as far as what i expect from you. Donr get me wrong this was dope but it
Just didnt wow me like your writing usually does meh i guess its med this week.

Vote des. I fell like his story reached me a little more than vulgars. Dops battle tho.

[sral]

The plateaus never plateau line was dope to me.

Psychedelic looney bin was a deft touch too. Great wording.

That third stanza was fucking ILL! I loved that shit. It felt a little disjointed from the rest surround it, in my opinion, and I honestly wasn't as big a fan of the final one. More so the first. Felt you experimented a lot this week though which always deserves props!

Destroyer: I felt like this one would have gone over well even in the AOWL to be honest, a cool little story, maybe a little brief, but the initial premise is there and it's enjoyable. One of the best I've seen from you in this league so far bro.

I'm going with Destroyer here, I just felt his verse more overall where as with Vulgars there were peaks and troughs and it ended on a bum note after the earlier sections I thought had a lot of merit to them.

[Frank]

Vulgar

An aqua interloping aquifer is a wonderful thing
in parched land, where plateaus never plateau
and continents are seldom content
powerful play on words. dope
with the firewood they have to burn in season's cove

Spectrum colors budding cloves
magnetic embrace in fusioned springs
A psychadelic loonie bin
where spice heretics conduct their unruly rings...
faster pace and more rapid rhythm than previous poems

I once knew a rope bridge with a fallback plan
lol
she played musical chairs with her rain-induced planks
Links in the road seemed to warp like a trombone
neck deep in water unfit to breathe in
imagined being up to my head in a trombone of water and got very freaked out by the thought of it for some strange reason
Secret languages of the desert storm forest
desert/forest was a paradox
decoded, infatigable - adjoined by the chemical fibers
the ones that lended us directions when the fauna
went wry and poison ivy offered us trick vaccines

I won't pay a toll to a troll under a bridge
nor will I pass unchanged like a lummox through the plains
This is my Rashomon homage to the Predator theme
Are you Jewish? stand out line
Notes of bear present in throat, too grizzly to understand
Prints on both sides of chest
the calligraphy of a hermit turned man
the flak vested black crescent moon commando
Lemonade stands on the hunt for Rambo
last two lines were smooth


vs

Destroyer
We stopped the car
to watch as the sun fell again
and this time it was too hard
to even try and pretend
that which we always believed
that it would rise again
And out of the car stereo
Dylan's voice rang through the air
'It's not dark yet... but it's getting there'
I liked that Bob Dylan line

& I thought back to the earlier days
when warnings came
'eat less meat,' they had said
'it increases methane
and leads to chest pains.'
i didnt know that
but we all just blamed X-rays
and purchased sex slaves
there's more slaves now today you know
than ever before in history
that's pretty much just shit to me
more like a vent poem
& it seems to be no mystery
that people just bring misery
everywhere they go
last line was pretty simple but it painted a picture

it's probably why I feel guilty
for being sad to see it end
at least I hold you in my arms
so we can both pretend
that this wasn't what we wanted
now the final wish is mine
let it wash away to begin again
better than it was this time


MVGT Vulgar