CONTENDERSHIP MATCH: Razah vs Timeless [RAZAH WINS 5-0]

[sral]

AOWL Season V, Week 9


SUMMARY OF RULES:

Verses are due
Monday at 11:59 p.m. Western / or Tuesday 2:59 Am Eastern / 7:59AM UK
There are NO extensions.

Verses MUST be a minimum 10 lines or a maximum of 48 lines (or 650 words).

Votes are due Thursday at 11:59 p.m. Western / or Friday 2:59 Am Eastern / 7:59AM UK. Failure to vote will result in automatic sign out for the next week.

All competitors must vote on THREE battles and post links/ references in the voting thread.

Read the full rules here!

TOPIC:

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Good luck!


Razah timeless

[timeless]

Hope you bought a new blade

[Razah]

I don't get it.

16-24 if ya can keep it short and sweet.

[timeless]

Ever since a young buck I wanted to stampede across the nation.
Travel coast to coast, maybe see the Keys, Boston or Graceland.
My problems were faced when I spotted myself in the mirror.
Tried to turn and run but living in Hell couldn't be clearer.
With limited generosity, we can only give so much until we take it back.
Follow the same route everyday until we finally traced the map.
Drowning in mediocrity, we look for a way to turn it around.
Trial and error through the peril, dead but my nerves have been found.
Learn from the sounds of cries and agony in the night.
Living worse in the now than back when apathy was a fight.
Soon we grew thin, evolved into an inhumane existence.
Plenty stars were falling but what's there to gain from wishing?
The maze was shifting, too many loose ends on a tied knot.
No matter what, you'll die hitting Send on your time clock.
The elixir's non-existant, what's also missing is bliss.
Too busy capsizing each other's thoughts wishing we're rich.

[Razah]

Looking up to the clouds, I would dream of the sky
Millions of years went by, in the blink of an eye
I just happened to walk, before I could fly
Ambition & thought- Had a fire scorching inside
My brain fed the flame, I could rule without a throne
But I had to build one- With tools made out of stone
The world made me resistant, I was made for the anguish
All the sounds that I uttered, I created a language
Never was life tainted, a masterpiece that I painted
Home was getting too crowded- At this age, it's time I migrated
A few blinks later- I laughed if you thought evolution was lost
From society to technology, I smile at the revolutions I saw
-- I don't smile as much, what happened to passion
Things are getting redundant, the world is so stagnant
It's like a diamond I molded, but it ran out of facets
Thought too much of myself, it's me, that I'm actually trapped in

There's no alpha, no omega, everybody's a beta
Back then, we looked up the clouds, now, it'll manage your data
You don't need to be sorry, it's you yourself you disrespect
When you replaced your intellect with the internet
There's no need to survive, no reason to fight
Won't be happy 'til the world freezes over & every season's alike
We don't share the same fire, it's the thunder you lack
You've grown content - You don't share the same hunger I have

Dead end.

[Spoken]

This was a nice short verse battle here. Timeless as usual u always have this natural act for telling such detailed stories in such little time. Made it str8 to the climax and detailed with intricate rhymes my dudw. Nice touch and flow was effortless. Razah I dont kno who u are but this spoken word scheme ya had was nice. I dug it nicely with its easy bobbing and weaving antics.

Content itself... I have to base my votw on as the two style almost stand perpendiculiar.... I got razah just going more intellectual and fitting the the verse complete....

[2tripple0]

Is funny the same thing happened to me..so I tried to think and it was on point and the person responding was spoken and I thought well I voted for h I'm in his battle and wanted m we to read w a shame that it didn't work out because of a lack of a spine or backside whereas they both depended and retraced 4th story with feedback..so I kept replying to show you how simple your metaphysical being in order for ugliness to resume and narr at ion so 7th rather reply with his vote


Vote razah

[timeless]

I don't speak 7

[2tripple0]

It's okay I give up you don't get it this an apology for anyone who doesn't u nd er stand I barely know any of you

[Nigma]

yay a short battle!

timeless, loved some of your references and their relation to the picture. started off with the mirror one, then you have several bits suggesting trying to turn around and that made me and my stoned things imagine that guy at the end turning back and trying to walk against the grain of his other less evolved lifeforms. in saying that, i feel you could have incorporated the title more, youre predestined angle of it seemed to lack thought imo.

razah. really impressive verse. super cool angle, going through the different eras and bringing it up to the modern era, the stare at the clouds/icloud reference was really cool. then ended it off with how things are now failing. really good concept usage from that picture. thought you nailed this verse

pretty easy decision for me after the read, timeless had a solid verse but razah had a much better angle at the topic which helped him correlate each line with his conceptual progression.

+1 razah

[Mr. J]

timeless, It's nice seeing you make another showing around these parts
your road is an up & down one when it comes to your performances
you quickly shed any doubt that your anything less than an impressive writer
you showcase some interesting ideas from the start of your verse.
the vocab use you apply really makes the read feel less bumpy this time around
towards the end I was impressed that you ended it in the mere moments you started
I'm not disappointed though, you kept me reading...nice work...


Razah, I'm really impressed by you as well, the ability to rapidly pen a verse such as yours is praiseworthy
the flow of your verse makes this a fun read due to you staying consistent in your thought
finding a breaking point and also an ending to your piece in just a compact piece is very idk the word
I've enjoyed this read though...


v/I've gotta say that I really liked this battle because of how short the verses were
both came with an interesting take on their subject matter...
timeless came with a smooth flow, his topic was worded nicely & had impressive ideas
I really thought his verse was cool, but after reading Razah's verse I feel Razah took it
he came with a stronger flow & his build up had a more impacting ending.
dope battle fella's...

v/Razah

[Flow]

There's no alpha, no omega, everybody's a beta
Back then, we looked up the clouds, now, it'll manage your data

Loved that line. Really nice.

Nice short battle which i always prefer. Id rather be left wanting more as opposed to the other way round.

Id say both matched in terms of nearly everything except the content. I feel one stood a foot in front in terms of really capturing his topic while also keeping me as a reader wanting more but still feeling satisfied when i didnt get more which is a really delicate balance i feel.

Vote Raz

[sral]

Razah wins 5-0!