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Inno
12-14-2015, 06:46 PM
LGPA Season 2: Week II


Adonis Vulgar

Check ins: MondayMidnight Eastern time)
Poems Due: Wednesday (Midnight Eastern time)
Votes due: Sunday (Midnight Eastern time)


Topic:

Imagery is the focus of this week. Put together a story chalked full of imagery. Give us a live picture. You may choose your own muse. But rememeber. Imagery will be the focus of your diction.



Goodluck

Vulgar
12-14-2015, 07:34 PM
Innards. In-way. Incognito. Inliness.

Adonis
12-15-2015, 04:20 PM
My topic shall be vulgar

Vulgar
12-17-2015, 12:28 AM
Requesting an extension, please.

Adonis
12-17-2015, 09:55 AM
Vulgar tonight or Friday? I was on hospital for wifes surgery so I don't have do much as an idea yet

Adonis
12-17-2015, 05:00 PM
Anyways. Can I have till Friday? Was gonna write today after work but I won free tickets for some kids holiday special at universal studios so I'm now doing that with my daughter's

Vulgar
12-17-2015, 07:01 PM
Friday is fine. Sure. Adonis Haven't read your poem yet, just wanted to let you know I edited out three separate words like 'and' and 'from' in a little gloss over I did.

Vulgar
12-18-2015, 05:59 PM
Life LLC


Mother seraphim motioned with Lactaid eyes
to the incoming stigmata storm - husk husk husk
went the beat of drums fit for a beast's awakening
Clouds multiply, surrounding an angelic superhighway
Wrists glean, irises swell, colons creak
odors wreak but the thing that speaks to the whole
is how passing into the next world
still generates a bit of heat, like a cricket's leg

The cold entropy of unknown voids - isolated wingspan
of an unproclaimed sweeping omega
allows warmth into a pocket of earth
Comas from which you fell
become jolted spring girth, measured in fathoms
lover's embraces - poverty hugs

Puff of smoke from an orangatan
indecisive divisive destitute decompression chamber
Human 101 Seminar: Why Your Holiness Goes to the Well
Pushed from the edge - created from his image
Reflected in the water, a mankind monkey
so capable of destroying
so adept at crafting a winged being from the spines & spindles
of a ruined necropolis set to a backdrop of crude helium
Sunrise seems peachy
inhabitants engage in sweet nothingness

I strike milk from the breast deposits of destiny
You drink, even if prophetic words spill from your mouth
leaving you without them

Hunger mars the best of us
the devil's trifectas suffer from it too
their trials of death;
Deer smashed by headlights, or gored by pike
Shell shocked stare from an empty mind
The grayness evident, like a horse's flowing hair
cascading over the shoulders of the willing

Adonis
12-18-2015, 08:08 PM
She bats her lids and licks her lips in succession
Ruby red reflection telegraphing intentions
A short skirt perched above long heels
A slit up her waist leaves curves unconcealed
Orchid outlines are chasing up a thigh
Vibrant hues splashed breathing out life
A tangled web exhumes her insides
A heart on sleeve method –
brings about a hard on beneath Jean presence
“Hi, can I buy you a drink?”
“Sweetie, only if it's stiff.
Oh... And a Cosmo too”
Direct and to the point, just how I prefer
No beating round the bush less it's hiding a moist pearl
In which case I'd dive into her garden
Plowing; tiling; reaping what she sowed
“Ah, so this is where you live,
A fine place for Eve,
You be Adam, come and hide the rib”
“Not so quick,
First a nightcap, whiskey or wine?”
“Dealers choice, though, they both sound sublime”

She bats her lids as she comes too
Tries to rub her eye's but her wrists won't move
She looks down on her body, it's completely revealed
Her eye's pop as she realizes she's tied to a table
Mirrors for a ceiling begin spinning her head
The searing pain of what's next is hard to watch
But if a demon were captured would a pastor not smite?
If a seductress with the sole goal of catching that dick,
well, lost the bits she purchased for it
She would be forced to not be an affectionless bitch

“Like what you see?
Come now, don't weep, admire my work
Now your beauty matches your soul
A mess and perverse.”

Inno
12-21-2015, 05:26 PM
Wow great match tbh. Man you both dropped some heat in this battle. Vilgar you took full of advantage of this werks theme. I was hoping you would becuase your style blends in real good with that. You used your superior vocab to convey imagery, thought you would lol. Great job man foreal. This was chalked full of goodies.

Adonis.

I think what helped you was the change of pace or first person view. The change of perspective teally was dope man. It allowed for your piece to feel like it had layers. While still putting out consistant imagery and direction. Well done bro.


Tbh it go either way nut i think ama go with vulgar and his trcky vocab. His imagery was a nit more out there and dug it. Good match fellas


Vulgar wins