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Check it out
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=krpsUGP6mF0
Greed
12-15-2015, 05:33 AM
Poor quality. Lacks the emotion that is implied.
Yeah, recorded it about an hour ago while everybody was sleepin so I tried bein quiet but I guess it's pretty clear huh lol
Nameflip
12-15-2015, 06:11 AM
Flows wack as fuck bro.
You're reading it. Not feeling it.
dead man
12-15-2015, 07:20 AM
fuck everybody above me.
this was profoundly sad imo. if one has ever lost somebody close to them and called their number just to hear their voicemail message then they may not really understand. it's a weird kind of grieving process. clinging on to the small things that make them seem alive. it's selfish and immature but for just one moment, it helps.
really, really liked this beat as well. but i also like the original song. your content was perfect for this.
yeah, your basic rapping skills aren't the best on this. your flow was rushed and a bit monotone, and i wasnt even particularly a fan of how you wrote some of your lines, but ill be damned if i didn't feel the content.
thanks.
Greed
12-15-2015, 12:52 PM
Dead man is nurturing.
We are here to tell you give your mom a proper tribute and do this the best you possibly can. No short cuts.
Diode
12-15-2015, 01:01 PM
why did i think ydk was black?
why did i think ydk was black?
Cuz my kids are
An thanks for the views guys I wanna do it better but this is wats done as of now
This was awful I had to turn off after 29 secs. Is that your mom though? Sorry to hear about that man. Props on doing this for her.
Fracture
12-15-2015, 03:33 PM
This was a great concept. And it was even set up nice
Your voice is fucked but there's some serious producing skills
BROKE LESNAR
12-15-2015, 04:01 PM
This was dope, man. You're a great guy for doing this and raising awareness. Really creative and well thought out. Loved your voice. Can't wait to watch the video later when I get home.
Ghost1
12-15-2015, 04:03 PM
Lmao
Adonis
12-15-2015, 04:25 PM
Check it out
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=krpsUGP6mF0
Can you do me a favor and drop a vote in AOWL please? I'll return favor if you mention me for some feed or something.
Edit: will give feed on this in a bit.
Adonis
12-15-2015, 06:46 PM
Heart felt. Inconsistent flow to say the least, adlibs might mask it, but still off. Shouting out someone's number sort of weird, sorry bout the loss. It's toughest for me to write about personal shit, but I can, so I commend you. Decent production, but lacking in many areas. Play back value. Good shit though, respect
Thanks for the vote
Objective
12-15-2015, 07:04 PM
This was dope, man. You're a great guy for doing this and raising awareness. Really creative and well thought out. Loved your voice. Can't wait to watch the video later when I get home.
Agreed. Love the heartfelt lyrics, this is real af to me. (Haven't lost a parent yet though but I can sympathize and can't imagine how I'll take it when it happens.) It's hard enough to rap lyrics like these no matter what level you're at so pulling it off is great. There could be some improvements here and there but it didn't detract from the lyrics and message you bring forth in it imho. You got my respect for doing this.
Frank
12-17-2015, 01:36 AM
Reminded me of this old school cat name Bubba Sparxxs. Check.him.out, emulate that man and apply your poetry. Looking forward to hearing what you can come up with
Reminded me of this old school cat name Bubba Sparxxs. Check.him.out, emulate that man and apply your poetry. Looking forward to hearing what you can come up with
Lol deliverance was the shit when it came out
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