Lunchables

[Quarter O]

Grown man biz so don't monkey with apes
you all lunchables, squares with sum cheese to take nigga
... How sad fag don't got a proud dad, round jabs,
you wouldn't pack a punch with brown bags
I dust off my psyche, polish my thoughts from saw dust
from the chainsaw - cranium trauma
sawed off dog my think tank matter makes sparks fly
impenetrable, can't get in my head thoughts barb wired
flying objects with my mind, magneto powers,
I'll move the crowd if they got metal on em
I get my X on, the days of futures past
"I'm just being honest" waiting the days of Future pass,
the youths our future at hand grasp
Mikai phifer, call yourself the future but can't rap,
yea I rap and had some what of a sheltered up bringing
but that's similar to Slim, at the Shelter up swinging.

[Strikta]

This was not good.

U have potential tho.

[Quarter O]

This was not good.

U have potential tho.

Can you give a lil detail why you felt this wasn't good? Just saying it ain't good doesn't really help.

[Strikta]

There is zero substance & alot of ur wording is awkward imo.

Easy to tell u rushed writing this.

[Quarter O]

There is zero substance & alot of ur wording is awkward imo.

Easy to tell u rushed writing this.

Good lookin on elaborating! Now I gotta ask what do you mean by awkward wording?? Can i get a example from my verse where u thought the wording was awkward if thats not too much to ask.

I searched sum of your stuff. Must say I value your opinion..you nice with yours!

[sral]

I liked it

[Quarter O]

Good lookin sral

[Exis]

Nah.