The Root

[Alice White]

I grew in this..
numerous true relicts
of futuristic moon-lit visions
my superstitious true religion
we're unisonous, in "collar" since rubik's, Cubes division
Elliot, Doom-a-witting, better yet, my pulse's shrinking
by every beat, 92 - tuning systems
just poured a smidgen, it ain't lucrative still I-see it boomeranging
first signs of lucid living when I heard Ludcaris sing
for the first time muting his shit..
Grae got me cocooning in it, yet
the youth'll listen to ambiguous rhythms
chalking out into muse-less lyrics, a students living
gradual euphoria - from nudes to nipples!
ugh, now my prudence kicks in!
minutes, but I'm too persistent
*sniffles* rudimental fictions -
- Stuart Little, whipping a group of kittens, grinning
been seeking juvenescence on through mural visions
I grew in this - a rooting image.


this was a quick key I did in the cypher, any feedback is appreciated ;)

[Mr. J]

I thought this was written quite well, the previous piece you took interest in was also a cypher piece.
Rarely do I find the time to sit & think properly the sporadic rhyming I feel...forms nicely.
I see that you are a fan of Jean Grae which may have influenced the style you brought together
the flow was smooth throughout and I really enjoyed the swift read as I was finishing up
its a refreshing vibe seeing your love for the genre, nice work here..keep writing

[Alice White]

thank you! Hah, it really seemed like that, but it was quite good for a key as I told you.
And yeah, I definitely enjoy Jean Grae's work, so there might be a slight influence there.

[Witty]

This was very good, you are a good writer...I enjoyed all of it, particularly the rubix cube part...interesting ideas, intelligent writing, and enjoyable flow. Good work.

[Alice White]

Thank you, I really appreciate it!
This was rather a practice for a consistent rhyme scheme, glad you liked it.