Jilti vs VividlyVague - Jilti wins

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jilti Vividlyvague

[e11even]

yo. jilti

[e11even]

I'm going 12 jilti

[jilti]

i got crazy lasers on some dragonball z shit
watch Vegeta beam to the chest and die like he did
ur fam trailer trash. a vehicle's home to them poor bums
every night they call and ask how u R.V., then fall asleep on the floor of one
see ima first-person shooter in real life so play dead
or that Rainbow Six action wont be you and 5 gay friends
take viv to the wilderness and snipe him like deer from afar
we'll see Vid shot in the woods, without a corny appearance from Lars
his moms a fat lazy slut, eatin bon-bons on the couch all day
she finds Comfort Inn Suites, same place men take her on dates
got the Vulcan automatic military use on ships
don shit. put that V between his i's like he tryna log in




12.

[Orc]

Jilti Quote:
Originally Posted by Vividlyvague http://www.netcees.org/ (http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?p=573174#post573174)
This was crazy close. Bar for bar, MVGT jilti for the haymakers. This is a revote. My bad, but I went back over the lines and I think jilti got this. I just didn't get his opener with doorstep reference.

A couple days ago in a suburb just outside of pittsburg, a family was having a backyard cookout when 2 men ambushed them, shooting and killing 5 family members on their porch as they were running back into the house




You lame. You spittin that Nate Diaz game like your text rocks niggas.
I see dead families on ya punches, but those don't land outside a text box nigga.
Punctuate that. What's your weight worth? I'll pump your chest plate back.
This black square'll check your queen when she's board like your chess game wack.
I shoot J's at I's for that L- you tryna tee off?
After I open ya chest, your fam gonna price the tux like, "how much does just the leaves cost?"
I bet Jil's an anal-retentive germaphobe, OCD bout his vitamins and minerals.
So scared of dirty fighting in his battles most his bars are subpar subliminals.
I been ducked so long here that the gun stays out like I'm 8 bit shootin
So I kill niggas while they rappin. That's the last time you'll see him inside Bags in the booth stewin.
Zip him up, cuz Jil can't shine like the father if he can't see this sun,
I'm blasting with heat, Casual-Ti will only get that L if he can't avoid being one.

[SHECK WES]

i got crazy lasers on some dragonball z shit
watch Vegeta beam to the chest and die like he did
nah m8
ur fam trailer trash. a vehicle's home to them poor bums
every night they call and ask how u R.V., then fall asleep on the floor of one
bit simple but not bad
see ima first-person shooter in real life so play dead
or that Rainbow Six action wont be you and 5 gay friends
made me laugh lol alright
take viv to the wilderness and snipe him like deer from afar
we'll see Vid shot in the woods, without a corny appearance from Lars
dopeeee, nice punch creative and Lars is a fag
his moms a fat lazy slut, eatin bon-bons on the couch all day
she finds Comfort Inn Suites, same place men take her on dates
alright
got the Vulcan automatic military use on ships
don shit. put that V between his i's like he tryna log in
had good potential but I think wording hurt it for me


Vs



You lame. You spittin that Nate Diaz game like your text rocks niggas.
I see dead families on ya punches, but those don't land outside a text box nigga.
decent personal, concept maybe a bit forced
Punctuate that. What's your weight worth? I'll pump your chest plate back.
This black square'll check your queen when she's board like your chess game wack
this had good potential but the wordplay was played and it was executed soft
I shoot J's at I's for that L- you tryna tee off?
After I open ya chest, your fam gonna price the tux like, "how much does just the leaves cost?"
what?
I bet Jil's an anal-retentive germaphobe, OCD bout his vitamins and minerals.
So scared of dirty fighting in his battles most his bars are subpar subliminals.
nah
I been ducked so long here that the gun stays out like I'm 8 bit shootin
So I kill niggas while they rappin. That's the last time you'll see him inside Bags in the booth stewin.
so stretched and it isn't good
Zip him up, cuz Jil can't shine like the father if he can't see this sun,
I'm blasting with heat, Casual-Ti will only get that L if he can't avoid being one.
another weird what bar for me lol


Idk, jilti had a cool verse nothing crazy but just what he needed to seal this easily. Aunt Viv had the decent personal in the opener but that's about it.

Vote jilti

[Pinot Grij]

Jilti - RV, Rainbow 6, and Comfort Inn Suites were all dope. That Comfort Inn Suites line was probably my favourite because it worked both ways really well. The RV line was just hilarious. Nice drop.

VV - very wordy on this attempt, bro. I know you're transitioning to the battling shit. I'd suggest trying to do some super short bars next time out. The wordiness can sometimes fuck with the effect.

Yo in that tuxedo line, leaves don't make sense. Like, is a leave a part of a tuxedo?

I bet Jil's an anal-retentive germaphobe, OCD bout his vitamins and minerals.
So scared of dirty fighting in his battles most his bars are subpar subliminals.
I think if you keep going with the battling, it's lines like this that you gotta cut out. The setup is kinda funny, but the punch is kinda indirect to the concept that you're setting up. And saying "subpar subliminals" isn't really harsh, like when I'm voting, I'm not gonna look at that line and be like, "Ooooooooh, got 'im!!" You know.


Vote -- jilti

[Junto]

ur fam trailer trash. a vehicle's home to them poor bums
every night they call and ask how u R.V., then fall asleep on the floor of one
nice
see ima first-person shooter in real life so play dead
or that Rainbow Six action wont be you and 5 gay friends
solid
take viv to the wilderness and snipe him like deer from afar
we'll see Vid shot in the woods, without a corny appearance from Lars
playin on 'vid' was a stretch... punch was a funny reference though
his moms a fat lazy slut, eatin bon-bons on the couch all day
she finds Comfort Inn Suites, same place men take her on dates
ha this is good

vs.

Punctuate that. What's your weight worth? I'll pump your chest plate back.
This black square'll check your queen when she's board like your chess game wack.
Zip him up, cuz Jil can't shine like the father if he can't see this sun,
I'm blasting with heat, Casual-Ti will only get that L if he can't avoid being one.
these 2 had potential from Vivid...

Jilti outbarred him here though.
some decent concepts but VV need some work on wording & execution
Comfort inn suites and RV were done nice, pretty good verse from Jil

V/ Jilti

[Suthaveli]

Jilti had-
Rainbow 6 bar

Viv had-
Nothing breh, sorry.

I think i would've like jilti lars bar too if i actually saw what he was talking about. Logically if i put 2 & 2 together i can envision what it is. But not going to quote it due to sheer ignorance. Vid had the chess concept going, & although played if he had executed it right, it could've been quoted. The weird thing is, by your way with words, you can actually tell you're a polished writer somehow else. I can only assume poet or something. If that's the case, just work on a way to hv your words actually attack your opponents. & steer away from whatves you think has been used. Cuz odds are, it has been. Lol, i should take my advice on the last one tho.

Jil gmv