Pinot Grij 0-1 Vs Awww Shit 0-1 - PINOT WINS

[Allen Knight]

NETCEES 1-2 PUNCHLINE LEAGUE SEASON 4

Due Friday 12 pacific

Rules: no feeding, swaying, bitting, Recycling.
& dont post in other ppls battles unless its to vote or u'll be booted.

NO EXT, AT ALL.

Pinot Grij

Awww Shit

[Pinot Grij]

In

[Awww Shit]

Check

[Awww Shit]

Ok.. Back to the basics

Guess I'll get with it, Popcorn and Nachos.. I Admit it Feed Me, plz
Cuz my Verse is Hot Porn but only 8 year Old Critics Can See P.G.'s

[Pinot Grij]

You’re a piece of shit, Shit – you deserve to die, no reason behind it
Don’t mean to Sully your image, I just hope you’re in a plane crash and he’s not the pilot

[Barcotic]

pg is such an obvious go-to np, lazy

plus it was worded whack imo

sully concept was soft but enough to take this

v/pinot

[Hearder Hearder]

Lol aww shit definitely top 5 posters on the site these days


But pinto had a much better punch and gets this one

Vote pinto

[Inno]

Pino with the flip got it.

Aww punch was coo but it fell short for me

[Saint]

Aww shit gave me a chuckle.

Vote Pinot, better concept, punch etc

[Destroyer]

Pg got this easy

[Orc]

PG was soft and worded in a way it was the least effective. Aww had an awkward and clunky set up which took away from his punch. Pinot was slightly better. This was another poor battle.

Vote PG

[R!canTheoryz]

PG better wording

[Awww Shit]

PG was soft and worded in a way it was the least effective. Aww had an awkward and clunky set up which took away from his punch. Pinot was slightly better. This was another poor battle.

Vote PG



As I appreciate the feedback, please explain the "awkward and clunky" concept to me about my bar. To me, it reads perfectly. There is a multi scheme to it.

I don't say that trying to take up for my bar but I rather that it in no way seems awkward or clunky... nor stretched.


I know that I came here a few weeks back with an asshole mentality but I will admit that I haven't been on a site in about 8 years

So... with that being said, I would appreciate if you mother fuckers would give me some type of constructive criticism when you have the opportunity while telling me what garbage you think I am.


Thanks.


Also, nice bar PG

[Ghost1]

Cuz only 8 yr old critics can see pg


Ur wording fucked u cuz any1 over the min age can see pg movies........I don't believe there is an age limit at all honestly....that's beside the point...

Then on top of that pg is not clever....it's simple...lazy even.

U managed sum really mundane multi syllabic rhyming tho....ur right about that....but it's really only done to accentuate what should be a strong crisp well worded harsh creative punch....

An also it was awkward due to the fact that ur more concerned w rhyming......like when would u ever tell some u wrote sum bars that were "hot porn" .......never. an if u do.....maybe this thing not fur u.


Pinot idk who who sully is but I get the jist of the punch


V pg

[sral]

Pinto easilyyyyyyy

not really a lot more than needs saying on this one

[Blanco Bishop]

V pi


Ashit was corny to me

[Cyrax]

i have pinot with the better bar here