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Cred
01-03-2017, 07:29 PM
NBL Season 10
Week 7

Due SUNDAY 1/8/17

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Allen Knight
01-03-2017, 07:39 PM
In, 16.

Jayson Fresh
01-04-2017, 05:16 PM
16 sent to cred.

Allen Knight
01-08-2017, 11:03 PM
u curry eatin patel last name havin indian pussy..


ya moms blows me till i bust on her face, that dame suckin
i hit that Cougar w/ a shot to the head like i was big game hunting
ur gettin murked in front of ur D/R, im'a stop u ock
there wont be a Fanta see u ever bubble in this shit after i pop ur top
i'll shoot ya fat slut w/ no remorse, shells'll spread violent
idc if she's Wide Receiver death certificate after her chest 8-1 like Dez Bryant
ur indian w/ a huge bitch & stupid religion, u wack fuck
isn't it sacrilegious to be eatin Cow? but u stay goin down on the fat slut
squad'll run up on u w/ guns drawn, hollows slammin this queer
my team'll light up this fuckin bitch from every angle... thats a vanity mirror
wen ya sis see's me its to the bed, she gotta sick body
she dont play Oritz me its straight to smashin till she calls me Big Papi
ur ol girl will get fucked brutal, u'd cringe honest
i'll take Jayson X & cut her so hard they'll make a whole trilogy spin off it
but now u came out the closet, ya family say u buggin
ur BF's names Mannie, Fresh & yah'll snapchat storys are a gay Production

Cred
01-09-2017, 08:03 AM
Jayson's Verse







If u bring the fight to my doorstep..

expect fresh & ya girl in bed, head on my chest
if a girls head on YOUR chest. She in uniform counting heartbeats giving two breaths.
I aim dude with same precision ya girl maims wood
Funny Ima clear out ya stomach with da same knife used on her in planned parenthood
& if wins add calories nigga you'd be one skinny bitch too
careers going downward, dog try on these yoga pants my sister says they fit u.
..mattafact.. Allens whole family stinksss. ya mom the dirty type
She entered a wet t-shirt contest ..& turned the entire stage to a mudfight.
its bloodshed when ya neck pops & spouts red champagne..
make one move the blade'll turn your toga outfit to a candy cane.
Kinnng of mafckin punchlines. U bleeding lots, I release these shots
No mercy when fresh keep punching ya face till ya seeing eye-dog seeing spots.
..ya styles whack. Formulaic as faak. We can tell ya creativity hit the wall..
YOUR worldplays r so forced they act laxatives to drug mules in airport stalls
U rat.. a mob informant.. & we ona fishing boat goin full throttle
Roll em up & dump into the ocean, that's message in a bottle.

Hush
01-09-2017, 12:30 PM
u curry eatin patel last name havin indian pussy..


ya moms blows me till i bust on her face, that dame suckin
i hit that Cougar w/ a shot to the head like i was big game hunting
--fire
ur gettin murked in front of ur D/R, im'a stop u ock
there wont be a Fanta see u ever bubble in this shit after i pop ur top
--nah u tried to do too much here lol
i'll shoot ya fat slut w/ no remorse, shells'll spread violent
idc if she's Wide Receiver death certificate after her chest 8-1 like Dez Bryant
---um ok. Over worded tho
ur indian w/ a huge bitch & stupid religion, u wack fuck
isn't it sacrilegious to be eatin Cow? but u stay goin down on the fat slut
--ok
squad'll run up on u w/ guns drawn, hollows slammin this queer
my team'll light up this fuckin bitch from every angle... thats a vanity mirror
--fire. Lazy rhymes tho
wen ya sis see's me its to the bed, she gotta sick body
she dont play Oritz me its straight to smashin till she calls me Big Papi
--lol ok dope
ur ol girl will get fucked brutal, u'd cringe honest
i'll take Jayson X & cut her so hard they'll make a whole trilogy spin off it
---eh
but now u came out the closet, ya family say u buggin
ur BF's names Mannie, Fresh & yah'll snapchat storys are a gay Production
---huh what ?



Jayson's Verse







If u bring the fight to my doorstep..

expect fresh & ya girl in bed, head on my chest
if a girls head on YOUR chest. She in uniform counting heartbeats giving two breaths.
--ok . Not so much impact but clever
I aim dude with same precision ya girl maims wood
Funny Ima clear out ya stomach with da same knife used on her in planned parenthood
--no
& if wins add calories nigga you'd be one skinny bitch too
careers going downward, dog try on these yoga pants my sister says they fit u.
--no wtf .i remember u being dope . Rust maybe
..mattafact.. Allens whole family stinksss. ya mom the dirty type
She entered a wet t-shirt contest ..& turned the entire stage to a Mudfight
--these are like corny yo momma jokes from the lunchroom.chill
its bloodshed when ya neck pops & spouts red champagne..
make one move the blade'll turn your toga outfit to a candy cane.
--ok clever
Kinnng of mafckin punchlines. U bleeding lots, I release these shots
No mercy when fresh keep punching ya face till ya seeing eye-dog seeing spots.
--lmao ok cool. Haymaker vs @shadenfruede
..ya styles whack. Formulaic as faak. We can tell ya creativity hit the wall..
YOUR worldplays r so forced they act laxatives to drug mules in airport stalls
--no
U rat.. a mob informant.. & we ona fishing boat goin full throttle
Roll em up & dump into the ocean, that's message in a bottle.
--no


I feel like English jaysons second language
Wording hurt him here


V Allen

Schadenfreude
01-09-2017, 04:21 PM
ya moms blows me till i bust on her face, that dame suckin
i hit that Cougar w/ a shot to the head like i was big game hunting
Lol..good opener
ur gettin murked in front of ur D/R, im'a stop u ock
there wont be a Fanta see u ever bubble in this shit after i pop ur top
Naaah, played concept & crudered wording
i'll shoot ya fat slut w/ no remorse, shells'll spread violent
idc if she's Wide Receiver death certificate after her chest 8-1 like Dez Bryant
Decent, somewhat predictable tho
ur indian w/ a huge bitch & stupid religion, u wack fuck
isn't it sacrilegious to be eatin Cow? but u stay goin down on the fat slut
LMAO..this is crazy
squad'll run up on u w/ guns drawn, hollows slammin this queer
my team'll light up this fuckin bitch from every angle... thats a vanity mirror
Decent
wen ya sis see's me its to the bed, she gotta sick body
she dont play Oritz me its straight to smashin till she calls me Big Papi
Lol..dope
ur ol girl will get fucked brutal, u'd cringe honest
i'll take Jayson X & cut her so hard they'll make a whole trilogy spin off it
Good
but now u came out the closet, ya family say u buggin
ur BF's names Mannie, Fresh & yah'll snapchat storys are a gay Production
Nope, same problem as Fanta pop

VERSUS

Jayson's Verse
If u bring the fight to my doorstep..expect fresh & ya girl in bed, head on my chest
if a girls head on YOUR chest. She in uniform counting heartbeats giving two breaths.
Better execution & this WOULD HAVE been dope.
I aim dude with same precision ya girl maims wood
Funny Ima clear out ya stomach with da same knife used on her in planned parenthood
Can't rock w/ this one
& if wins add calories nigga you'd be one skinny bitch too
careers going downward, dog try on these yoga pants my sister says they fit u.
What? Weak
..mattafact.. Allens whole family stinksss. ya mom the dirty type
She entered a wet t-shirt contest ..& turned the entire stage to a mudfight.
Good joke
its bloodshed when ya neck pops & spouts red champagne..
make one move the blade'll turn your toga outfit to a candy cane.
Lol..nice imagery
Kinnng of mafckin punchlines. U bleeding lots, I release these shots
No mercy when fresh keep punching ya face till ya seeing eye-dog seeing spots.
Pretty good
..ya styles whack. Formulaic as faak. We can tell ya creativity hit the wall..
YOUR worldplays r so forced they act laxatives to drug mules in airport stalls
This isn't good..lol
U rat.. a mob informant.. & we ona fishing boat goin full throttle
Roll em up & dump into the ocean, that's message in a bottle.
Decent closer, nothing crazy

ALLEN KNIGHT got this one. Idk Fresh, maybe u were trying too many jokes or just wasn't inspired, because your concepts were lacking this week.

Suthaveli
01-09-2017, 06:34 PM
ya moms blows me till i bust on her face, that dame suckin
i hit that Cougar w/ a shot to the head like i was big game hunting
squad'll run up on u w/ guns drawn, hollows slammin this queer
my team'll light up this fuckin bitch from every angle... thats a vanity mirror
wen ya sis see's me its to the bed, she gotta sick body
she dont play Oritz me its straight to smashin till she calls me Big Papi

Vs

expect fresh & ya girl in bed, head on my chest
if a girls head on YOUR chest. She in uniform counting heartbeats giving two breaths.
its bloodshed when ya neck pops & spouts red champagne..
make one move the blade'll turn your toga outfit to a candy cane.
Allen Knight gmv.

Fresh rhymed much better this week it just seem like he suffered from wording issues. I lke that he takes chances w.how he chooses to flip his stuff. Very creative & I'm definitely about that life, some of the lines here it didn't fall through as well as it did last week.

Allen isn't coming as force as he has been w..every bar being a nameplay/ wordplay. He had some cool. Stuff in his verse.

Blanco Bishop
01-09-2017, 09:17 PM
Allen got this. Very dope verse. Concise and to the point with creativity. Fresh was OK but nothing jaw dropping.
Opener n fanta had me Rollin.
Fresh had some concepts but wasn't digging the wording.

V allen

Razah
01-10-2017, 02:32 PM
ya moms blows me till i bust on her face, that dame suckin
i hit that Cougar w/ a shot to the head like i was big game hunting

ur indian w/ a huge bitch & stupid religion, u wack fuck
isn't it sacrilegious to be eatin Cow? but u stay goin down on the fat slut

squad'll run up on u w/ guns drawn, hollows slammin this queer
my team'll light up this fuckin bitch from every angle... thats a vanity mirror
wen ya sis see's me its to the bed, she gotta sick body
she dont play Oritz me its straight to smashin till she calls me Big Papi
ur ol girl will get fucked brutal, u'd cringe honest
i'll take Jayson X & cut her so hard they'll make a whole trilogy spin off it

Liked those, real solid verse to me, but the closer wasn't doing it for me.


expect fresh & ya girl in bed, head on my chest
if a girls head on YOUR chest. She in uniform counting heartbeats giving two breaths.
I aim dude with same precision ya girl maims wood
Funny Ima clear out ya stomach with da same knife used on her in planned parenthood

..mattafact.. Allens whole family stinksss. ya mom the dirty type
She entered a wet t-shirt contest ..& turned the entire stage to a mudfight. .

So mean towards his girl. :( Anyways, cool verse. That mudfight had me laughing, very uhm, full of imagery.

vAllenKnight

Ghost1
01-10-2017, 02:57 PM
u curry eatin patel last name havin indian pussy..lol stfu fagit u look like a god damn Iranian riff raff


ya moms blows me till i bust on her face, that dame suckin
i hit that Cougar w/ a shot to the head like i was big game hunting

simple, ok

ur gettin murked in front of ur D/R, im'a stop u ock
there wont be a Fanta see u ever bubble in this shit after i pop ur top

meh I just seen letterman do this same wack shit w Snapple

i'll shoot ya fat slut w/ no remorse, shells'll spread violent
idc if she's Wide Receiver death certificate after her chest 8-1 like Dez Bryant

lot going on here, this is pretty crazy that u got the wording as smooth as u did. nice.

ur indian w/ a huge bitch & stupid religion, u wack fuck
isn't it sacrilegious to be eatin Cow? but u stay goin down on the fat slut

lol eh funny but concepts familiar

squad'll run up on u w/ guns drawn, hollows slammin this queer
my team'll light up this fuckin bitch from every angle... thats a vanity mirror

fuck w this

wen ya sis see's me its to the bed, she gotta sick body
she dont play Oritz me its straight to smashin till she calls me Big Papi

lmao word

ur ol girl will get fucked brutal, u'd cringe honest
i'll take Jayson X & cut her so hard they'll make a whole trilogy spin off it

ok

but now u came out the closet, ya family say u buggin
ur BF's names Mannie, Fresh & yah'll snapchat storys are a gay Production

idk what the fuck u trynna do w this






Jayson's Verse







If u bring the fight to my doorstep..

expect fresh & ya girl in bed, head on my chest
if a girls head on YOUR chest. She in uniform counting heartbeats giving two breaths.

eh..concept not really harsh...u pulled it off but didn't really do no damage here to me

I aim dude with same precision ya girl maims wood
Funny Ima clear out ya stomach with da same knife used on her in planned parenthood

lol ya girl maims wood. trynna remember last time some1 said shit like this to me..........uh punch line was ok ish....might've hit if it was a legit personal.......which it prolly is cuz allens girl a fucking whoring piece of shit....so word nice punch here.

& if wins add calories nigga you'd be one skinny bitch too
careers going downward, dog try on these yoga pants my sister says they fit u.

donward dog/yoga....got it.....punch not harsh again really...

..mattafact.. Allens whole family stinksss. ya mom the dirty type
She entered a wet t-shirt contest ..& turned the entire stage to a mudfight.

lol this is interesting....the creativity of it....not really funny to me..but concept cool

its bloodshed when ya neck pops & spouts red champagne..
make one move the blade'll turn your toga outfit to a candy cane.

wtf why he wearing a toga all the sudden or even ever lmao legit why

Kinnng of mafckin punchlines. U bleeding lots, I release these shots
No mercy when fresh keep punching ya face till ya seeing eye-dog seeing spots.

LMAO fuck w this

..ya styles whack. Formulaic as faak. We can tell ya creativity hit the wall..
YOUR worldplays r so forced they act laxatives to drug mules in airport stalls

eh

U rat.. a mob informant.. & we ona fishing boat goin full throttle
Roll em up & dump into the ocean, that's message in a bottle.


msg in a bottle flips old



got allen here, cool to say jay around, pretty much how I remember him too......a few really cool concepts with some iffy wording and a few duds. the seeing eye dog shit was great lol....but a lot of your shit was just mediocre/boring to me.

v ak