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Orc
12-10-2017, 07:18 AM
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Profit Mr. J

Profit
12-12-2017, 07:57 AM
Going 10

Mr. J
12-12-2017, 08:02 PM
when dudes pass your name around you think you the daily topic
thing is they consider you currency in prison you just change a holding pocket.

run your mouth as much as you want, but lighten up you fray dolt
you losing isnt shocking, yo crazy ass thinking that you sane bolt.

tryna come up in the world but you looking like you lost your way.
what would make this funny is if you bathed in coke, so youd be a frosted flake.

better tell your guardians to safeguard your PC & put up a firewall
the only sickness you providing comes off of Craigslist & Grindr huh?

what makes you think you can show face against me? you a worker.
what makes you think you can face yourself when you in your burqa

Profit
12-13-2017, 01:13 AM
Yo
When I fuck ya girl don't look confused, the hookers due fa sum action in bed
I'm sayin, when I give her this D,J.. there's no reason to be scratching ya head
Dweebs retarded, but signin out could make u be the smartest
Ur Andrew Luck.. cos basically u've been finished befo the season started
I dead jokes, n u the head coach gettin replaced by interims
That's why sayin J dope is unheard of.... like the 8 line minimum
Ya crazy fa takin beatings, health is a priority so quit now
Cos dis locc ate to many punches, mine'll cause ya jaw to give out
Got it fucked up boy, I school u how to handle a tech
No question, when I raise this arm at Mr..... the answer is death

Barcotic
12-14-2017, 07:23 AM
mr j had

nothing, not feeling anything in that verse tbr. no hate, u just got a long way to go. think of better more creative concepts & form ur style based around ppl thatr dope u enjoy reading

prof had

give her this DJ
dislocate

v/Profit

Aero
12-14-2017, 09:00 AM
Mr J - the Craigslist Grindr bar was cool. Rest felt incomplete. Good job though.


Profit - scratching your head made me smirk, Luck line was kinda hard, 8 was ok, rest aight


Profit wins here convincingly.

WRATH
12-15-2017, 08:59 PM
You sane was on the right track but other then that nah

V profit

Chyeahhh!!!
12-15-2017, 11:17 PM
I like Mr J's style, here he held it down in his own way. Creativity pushed his punches for an enjoyable read IMO. First 2 lines were dope, kinda trailed off from there as far as effectiveness. I got him for the first 2 lines

Profit had some slick shit, had to go back and read a few tings and I dug. I got quotes from 1st, 4th and 5th lines

vote Profit for 1 more quote than J

Allen Knight
12-15-2017, 11:30 PM
better tell your guardians to safeguard your PC & put up a firewall
the only sickness you providing comes off of Craigslist & Grindr huh?

Vs

When I fuck ya girl don't look confused, the hookers due fa sum action in bed
I'm sayin, when I give her this D,J.. there's no reason to be scratching ya head
Dweebs retarded, but signin out could make u be the smartest
Ur Andrew Luck.. cos basically u've been finished befo the season started


V/Profit, ...i think mr j needs to workin on being harsher an concepts
keep battlin fam u'll get it down, profit had a solid verse acouple of cool bars, props to both.

For Battling
12-16-2017, 08:48 AM
when dudes pass your name around you think you the daily topic
thing is they consider you currency in prison you just change a holding pocket.
decent
run your mouth as much as you want, but lighten up you fray dolt
you losing isnt shocking, yo crazy ass thinking that you sane bolt.
decent
tryna come up in the world but you looking like you lost your way.
what would make this funny is if you bathed in coke, so youd be a frosted flake.
lol nah
better tell your guardians to safeguard your PC & put up a firewall
the only sickness you providing comes off of Craigslist & Grindr huh?
sus but decent bar
what makes you think you can show face against me? you a worker.
what makes you think you can face yourself when you in your burqa
idk but I actually really liked how you did this, the punch itself isn’t anything special but the execution was original

Vs


When I fuck ya girl don't look confused, the hookers due fa sum action in bed
I'm sayin, when I give her this D,J.. there's no reason to be scratching ya head
alright
Dweebs retarded, but signin out could make u be the smartest
Ur Andrew Luck.. cos basically u've been finished befo the season started
i liked this, nice
I dead jokes, n u the head coach gettin replaced by interims
That's why sayin J dope is unheard of.... like the 8 line minimum
wasnt feeling this
Ya crazy fa takin beatings, health is a priority so quit now
Cos dis locc ate to many punches, mine'll cause ya jaw to give out
decent
Got it fucked up boy, I school u how to handle a tech
No question, when I raise this arm at Mr..... the answer is death
ehh, had potential for a dope bar but you went a different route
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idk what this is all about


MR J is getting the hang of this, each week I’m seeing better concepts done with better execution. Props bro. Profit had some good lines here, Andrew luck was LOTB and your opener was cool too, good shit.

Vote Profit

Alvin Karpis
12-16-2017, 09:58 AM
J has some ideas but they need better wording
Profit had DJ and Locc

Concepts/Wording were better for Profit so he gets the W

Lenox
12-17-2017, 09:22 AM
Mr J: what was any of this? Lol. Seemed rushed regardless.

Vs

Profit: lol nice dj name flip. Andrew luck,


Overall: this woulda been closer if J actually tried to put together a verse

V/ profit

ill nik-A
12-17-2017, 09:26 AM
Profit first two were solid. Pretty good

J man, between the poem style formatting and lack of creativity made I.t hard to get through

Profit wins