Schadenfreude vs Unfukwitable - UNF WINS

[Orc]

Netcees Battle League: The Legends Edition


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Schadenfreude Unfukwitable

[Unfukwitable]

12

[Schadenfreude]

S'getit.

[Unfukwitable]

Ext

[Unfukwitable]

Just me, a Bayonet w/ a Sharp blade wedged in the front,
his HEAD START eRase'n off after get'n the Edge from the Gun..
bullets in em turn his army to Armory & his sights gettin worse,
Shells living inside him He'll live a Turtles life in reverse
U Pissed Off...? well before u get a Psst Off, a Pump pound ya,
Hotheads get Under ya skin til ya Blood boils in Gun powder.
^Basically ima kill u no matter the vibe,
U gave Hush Puppie eye's he left u Battered and fried
It's A price on Schads head and Al couldn't get the bands,
Lemme work my Magic Karp.. I'm Splashing every time I get the chance!
Gunbar'd him to death... its a gritty sentence,
But I had to Cred it, Karma's here to settle scores w/ a 357

[Schadenfreude]

aka Noquear, look..

Few uppers w/ Red Bull s’got Me in an unstable rage,
‘nuff to cut him in half, leave furniture crashed next to ‘table legs.
Beaten nobodies, one good match to every 40 u’re in
even horrid in wins, can’t call u a pro, Choice was like aborting a kid.
Barely motivated, so whothefuck said this bum is fire,
I’ll have the .4 clear Noquear, even his own murder’s Un inspired.
Chick’s rated 1 short of 6, still you support the bitch..
fucked er’body, whole team’s smacked ‘5’..wasn’t for sportsmanship.
Insane how the Tomahawk’ll turn ya mid into pork rib,
like New Year’s, hospice’ll nurse the hangover longer than Orc did.
His homies’ll witness the homi, leave this punk bloody
hazardous tec having casual sex, throw pussy all over Fuk buddies.

..BODY.

[classickERBL]

Just me, a Bayonet w/ a Sharp blade wedged in the front,
his HEAD START eRase'n off after get'n the Edge from the Gun..
AHHH!!
bullets in em turn his army to Armory & his sights gettin worse,
Shells living inside him He'll live a Turtles life in reverse
FIREEEE !!!
U Pissed Off...? well before u get a Psst Off, a Pump pound ya,
Hotheads get Under ya skin til ya Blood boils in Gun powder.
MEAN !!
^Basically ima kill u no matter the vibe,
U gave Hush Puppie eye's he left u Battered and fried
It's A price on Schads head and Al couldn't get the bands,
Lemme work my Magic Karp.. I'm Splashing every time I get the chance!
Gunbar'd him to death... its a gritty sentence,
But I had to Cred it, Karma's here to settle scores w/ a 357
DOPE

aka Noquear, look..

Few uppers w/ Red Bull s’got Me in an unstable rage,
‘nuff to cut him in half, leave furniture crashed next to ‘table legs.
COOL
Beaten nobodies, one good match to every 40 u’re in
even horrid in wins, can’t call u a pro, Choice was like aborting a kid.
Barely motivated, so whothefuck said this bum is fire,
I’ll have the .4 clear Noquear, even his own murder’s Un inspired.
Chick’s rated 1 short of 6, still you support the bitch..
fucked er’body, whole team’s smacked ‘5’..wasn’t for sportsmanship.
FIRE
Insane how the Tomahawk’ll turn ya mid into pork rib,
like New Year’s, hospice’ll nurse the hangover longer than Orc did.
His homies’ll witness the homi, leave this punk bloody
hazardous tec having casual sex, throw pussy all over Fuk buddies.
DOPE

..BODY.

good battle , i got FUK winning , i like his aggressive style and gun bars
v - unfukwitable

[BROKE LESNAR]

Just me, a Bayonet w/ a Sharp blade wedged in the front,
his HEAD START eRase'n off after get'n the Edge from the Gun..

☆☆☆

bullets in em turn his army to Armory & his sights gettin worse,
Shells living inside him He'll live a Turtles life in reverse

☆☆☆☆☆ lmao

U Pissed Off...? well before u get a Psst Off, a Pump pound ya,
Hotheads get Under ya skin til ya Blood boils in Gun powder.

☆☆☆☆☆

^Basically ima kill u no matter the vibe,
U gave Hush Puppie eye's he left u Battered and fried

☆☆☆☆☆ dope

It's A price on Schads head and Al couldn't get the bands,
Lemme work my Magic Karp.. I'm Splashing every time I get the chance!

☆

Gunbar'd him to death... its a gritty sentence,
But I had to Cred it, Karma's here to settle scores w/ a 357

☆




aka Noquear, look..

Few uppers w/ Red Bull s’got Me in an unstable rage,
‘nuff to cut him in half, leave furniture crashed next to ‘table legs.

☆ using "table" from unfukwitable was desperate

Beaten nobodies, one good match to every 40 u’re in
even horrid in wins, can’t call u a pro, Choice was like aborting a kid.

☆the multis here didn't do much to disguise the ineffectiveness of the punch, use them to accentuate the punch, not overdress them to distract from quality

Barely motivated, so whothefuck said this bum is fire,
I’ll have the .4 clear Noquear, even his own murder’s Un inspired.

☆☆☆☆☆

Chick’s rated 1 short of 6, still you support the bitch..
fucked er’body, whole team’s smacked ‘5’..wasn’t for sportsmanship.

☆

Insane how the Tomahawk’ll turn ya mid into pork rib,
like New Year’s, hospice’ll nurse the hangover longer than Orc did.

☆

His homies’ll witness the homi, leave this punk bloody
hazardous tec having casual sex, throw pussy all over Fuk buddies.

☆ lmao @ hazardous tec having casual sex wtf yo

..BODY.

Fuk takes it rather easily. He didn't have to drop flawless to win, but he did have some fire. Schad, look bro. Everybody lets you slide because of your multi usage. They're pretty decent, but you allow yourself to get caught up in sacrificing the punch for them. Try using them exclusively at the end of each line instead of cramming them into the bar. Doing this will allow for greater creativity and emphasis on the punch.

setup/multi
closer/multi

not

setup/multi
multi/closer/multi

You actually did what I'm suggesting you do in your last several bars, but you come across as uncomfortable when doing that. Stay with THAT style, build on it, perfect it, own it.

v-Fuk

[For Battling]

Just me, a Bayonet w/ a Sharp blade wedged in the front,
his HEAD START eRase'n off after get'n the Edge from the Gun..
wordy, made it hard to read, decent line
bullets in em turn his army to Armory & his sights gettin worse,
Shells living inside him He'll live a Turtles life in reverse
ooo I liked this
U Pissed Off...? well before u get a Psst Off, a Pump pound ya,
Hotheads get Under ya skin til ya Blood boils in Gun powder.
wasnt feelin it
^Basically ima kill u no matter the vibe,
U gave Hush Puppie eye's he left u Battered and fried
nice
It's A price on Schads head and Al couldn't get the bands,
Lemme work my Magic Karp.. I'm Splashing every time I get the chance!
played
Gunbar'd him to death... its a gritty sentence,
But I had to Cred it, Karma's here to settle scores w/ a 357
had potential but only turned out decent

Vs


Few uppers w/ Red Bull s’got Me in an unstable rage,
‘nuff to cut him in half, leave furniture crashed next to ‘table legs.
nah this doesn’t work
Beaten nobodies, one good match to every 40 u’re in
even horrid in wins, can’t call u a pro, Choice was like aborting a kid.
fuckin dope
Barely motivated, so whothefuck said this bum is fire,
I’ll have the .4 clear Noquear, even his own murder’s Un inspired.
hmm ok
Chick’s rated 1 short of 6, still you support the bitch..
fucked er’body, whole team’s smacked ‘5’..wasn’t for sportsmanship.
lol alright
Insane how the Tomahawk’ll turn ya mid into pork rib,
like New Year’s, hospice’ll nurse the hangover longer than Orc did.
decent at best
His homies’ll witness the homi, leave this punk bloody
hazardous tec having casual sex, throw pussy all over Fuk buddies
LOLLL...this is such a reach & you know this

Unfuk: 2 good, 2 decent
Scad: 3 good, 1 decent

Damn this is close, scab had LOTB with pro choice, that shit was fire. This will definitely be a back and forth battle

Vote scab

[Alvin Karpis]

Names mentioned but for once i agree with broke

Schads - multis are not needed as much, you got that j fresh style but lack the swag
Un got the consistency, misses were less bad

No real standouts but Un got it

[Profit]

Just me, a Bayonet w/ a Sharp blade wedged in the front,
his HEAD START eRase'n off after get'n the Edge from the Gun..

Ok

bullets in em turn his army to Armory & his sights gettin worse,
Shells living inside him He'll live a Turtles life in reverse

Nice

U Pissed Off...? well before u get a Psst Off, a Pump pound ya,
Hotheads get Under ya skin til ya Blood boils in Gun powder.

Nice

^Basically ima kill u no matter the vibe,
U gave Hush Puppie eye's he left u Battered and fried

Dope

It's A price on Schads head and Al couldn't get the bands,
Lemme work my Magic Karp.. I'm Splashing every time I get the chance!

Nice

Gunbar'd him to death... its a gritty sentence,
But I had to Cred it, Karma's here to settle scores w/ a 357

I fuck with this




Few uppers w/ Red Bull s’got Me in an unstable rage,
‘nuff to cut him in half, leave furniture crashed next to ‘table legs.

Toooo forced


Beaten nobodies, one good match to every 40 u’re in
even horrid in wins, can’t call u a pro, Choice was like aborting a kid.

Cool

Barely motivated, so whothefuck said this bum is fire,
I’ll have the .4 clear Noquear, even his own murder’s Un inspired.

Fire!

Chick’s rated 1 short of 6, still you support the bitch..
fucked er’body, whole team’s smacked ‘5’..wasn’t for sportsmanship.

Dope

Insane how the Tomahawk’ll turn ya mid into pork rib,
like New Year’s, hospice’ll nurse the hangover longer than Orc did.

Cool

His homies’ll witness the homi, leave this punk bloody
hazardous tec having casual sex, throw pussy all over Fuk buddies.

Ehhh


I liked this match, thought both had some pretty dope shit. Felt schade had two misses that cost um here as to 1 from Un. Woulda been tuff if u lanes 1 of those cos u had sum hot shit but I got UN winning this..
________

[Habitat]

unfuk

liked turtle life in reverse
hot heads / blood boil was dope i thought
hush puppie was dope too
magic carp was cool

vs

shad

pro choice was ok

wasn't really feeling anything else man.

I got unfuk here

v/unfuk

[Pinot Grij]

Unfuk -- turtles line is funny af. Hush puppies is deece. Closer is really cool too.

Schad -- table legs is a good attempt to get around played out personals, not sure it hit the hardest though but appreciate the originality. Fuk buddies is good. There was a lot of serious reaches in the middle... you admitted lacking inspiration in this one and it kinda showed -- the smack 5 was a good punch line, but the set up was reaching. Anyways, know this is far from your best showing.

Vote -- Unfukwitable