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Orc
01-07-2018, 11:47 AM
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ill nik-A
01-07-2018, 12:34 PM
16
Welcome!

Allen Knight
01-07-2018, 12:38 PM
In, 16 good.

ill nik-A
01-10-2018, 07:07 PM
16 sent to Orc Allen Knight

Allen Knight
01-11-2018, 05:17 AM
Gonna need ext, busy week.

ill nik-A
01-11-2018, 07:33 PM
No problem

Allen Knight
01-12-2018, 09:22 PM
It’s my wife’s bday weekend we gonna be lit homie


All week 1800.

fuck that bitch, im buckin a A-R at ya party w/ ya weak friends
blowin out candles ain't the only time u'll see her face light up this weekend
4-0 vs u & that hurts ur heart faggot, it's killin nik-a's rep
another Winnipeg ya confidence a notch lower than canada's winter temp
sprayin at ya torso or lower pussy, poppin a mattic raw
im Pekingese & legs off till it looks like ur shits got chewed by rabid dogs
ur ugly wifes leavin u to cheat, she suckin cocks in ya place
that dirty sluts a Grenade, she removed ya ring an went off in ur face
pistol held up to ya temple, ima gunsling w/ the chrome
this shits like Wwf Elimation Chamber im lettin a hammer ring in ya dome
i signed in & got it poppin, ura bland faggot tryna speak tuff
my Biofuel to the NBL, urs couldnt light enough fire to spark the league up
at the end of NC1 u got modded but ur virus ass lost ur rights
cuz the moment u joined u gave the Staph Infections that killed off the site
do a drive-by on ya family tree, shells hittin u pathetic bastards
bullets will Tapestry bobbin & weaving thru all there genetic patterns


sorry been real busy.

ill nik-A
01-12-2018, 09:52 PM
Fuck what this nerd say, got ur girl & anotha hoe givin me brains for my birthday
u think she doesn’t go both ways... cuz that’s ya thought process for all ya forced wordplay
Ya verse gay. I’m the new gun bar king, nigga, call me nik-guns, always aimin the glock
U either gonna face the steel or run... cuz it’s a Le’Veon Bell highlight reel when I wait on the block
wisdom claimin the top. laughin gas can’t pump up ya style, the shots numbin u clowns
Im also the king of making u bite the steel... ya dentist calls that a crown
Heat sums up my town, I’ma kill u no matter the weather nigga, my flow is real
I’m cold as steel... got zero chill, so I’m doing drive by’s on the snow mobile
u a little nigga so my tribute to this bitch geek, is to pull out the fifth, sleep
u never seen a Mexican surpass six feet, so when I kill ya it’ll be memorial... for ya family the shit’s deep
Kid, please. Im an OG with a new stance u ain’t fuckin with killer nik
I’m shooting from a different angle... u just recycle old concepts & change the wording a little bit
I ain’t on that civil tip. My money clean Uncle Sam is givin this nerd the max
I’m quick to kill u and get the W-2.... nigga, that’s turbo tax
u hurt, I laugh. No money for u, The gun’ll leave holes exposing this dude
I use similes since u like Broke... which means only Lesner will be voting for u

BROKE LESNAR
01-12-2018, 11:47 PM
fuck that bitch, im buckin a A-R at ya party w/ ya weak friends
blowin out candles ain't the only time u'll see her face light up this weekend

☆☆☆☆☆

4-0 vs u & that hurts ur heart faggot, it's killin nik-a's rep
another Winnipeg ya confidence a notch lower than canada's winter temp

☆☆☆☆☆

sprayin at ya torso or lower pussy, poppin a mattic raw
im Pekingese & legs off till it looks like ur shits got chewed by rabid dogs

☆☆☆☆☆ rofl the imagery of a rabid pekingnese chewing dudes ankles is jokes

ur ugly wifes leavin u to cheat, she suckin cocks in ya place
that dirty sluts a Grenade, she removed ya ring an went off in ur face

☆☆☆☆☆

pistol held up to ya temple, ima gunsling w/ the chrome
this shits like Wwf Elimation Chamber im lettin a hammer ring in ya dome

☆☆☆☆☆

i signed in & got it poppin, ura bland faggot tryna speak tuff
my Biofuel to the NBL, urs couldnt light enough fire to spark the league up

☆☆☆☆☆

at the end of NC1 u got modded but ur virus ass lost ur rights
cuz the moment u joined u gave the Staph Infections that killed off the site

☆☆☆☆☆

do a drive-by on ya family tree, shells hittin u pathetic bastards
bullets will Tapestry bobbin & weaving thru all there genetic patterns




sorry been real busy.



Fuck what this nerd say, got ur girl & anotha hoe givin me brains for my birthday
u think she doesn’t go both ways... cuz that’s ya thought process for all ya forced wordplay

☆☆☆☆☆ ouch

Ya verse gay. I’m the new gun bar king, nigga, call me nik-guns, always aimin the glock
U either gonna face the steel or run... cuz it’s a Le’Veon Bell highlight reel when I wait on the block

☆☆☆☆☆ nice

wisdom claimin the top. laughin gas can’t pump up ya style, the shots numbin u clowns
Im also the king of making u bite the steel... ya dentist calls that a crown

☆☆☆☆☆

Heat sums up my town, I’ma kill u no matter the weather nigga, my flow is real
I’m cold as steel... got zero chill, so I’m doing drive by’s on the snow mobile

☆ indirect swag & flow

u a little nigga so my tribute to this bitch geek, is to pull out the fifth, sleep
u never seen a Mexican surpass six feet, so when I kill ya it’ll be memorial... for ya family the shit’s deep

☆☆☆☆☆

Kid, please. Im an OG with a new stance u ain’t fuckin with killer nik
I’m shooting from a different angle... u just recycle old concepts & change the wording a little bit

☆☆☆☆☆

I ain’t on that civil tip. My money clean Uncle Sam is givin this nerd the max
I’m quick to kill u and get the W-2.... nigga, that’s turbo tax

☆☆☆

u hurt, I laugh. No money for u, The gun’ll leave holes exposing this dude
I use similes since u like Broke... which means only Lesner will be voting for u

☆☆☆☆☆


Fire battle. AK was only a bar short from a flawless, while Nik had 2 slips but 2 dope personals to go with his verse. Nik, there's a valid argument for why I abhor similes and "that's" bars, and it's because of how it dumbs down a writer's creative process. For example, your W-2 bar.

I ain’t on that civil tip. My money clean Uncle Sam is givin this nerd the max
I’m quick to kill u and get the W-2.... nigga, that’s turbo tax

You put the work in for the setup to build the punch, but in doing so you made the setup wordy and left the closer to falter due to simplicity. You easily could have shortened your setup and still included enough build in subtlety to execute your concept. Instead of really illustrating your creativity in the closer, you did it in the setup and made the closer, which is supposed to drive home the concept, a bit underwhelming.

I gave you 3 ☆'s because I liked the concept itself and actually enjoyed the work you did put it in, I just couldn't give you 5 ☆'s because of the aforementioned breakdown. If you're going to do "that's", which I'm really not opposed to, you need to be more creative in executing

AK, dope verse. You did a simile in your verse but if you notice I gave you 5 ☆'s and that's because I actually do like those kind of similes. You caught my attention early on with "the shits like wwe elimination chamber", then you effectively delivered the punch. I enjoy similes that aren't just abruptly placed in a bar, and this one wasn't.

Also, the way you do gunbars without needing similes is admirable, too. You and Unfukwitable are probably the best at it.

v-AK

Habitat
01-13-2018, 09:42 AM
fuck that bitch, im buckin a A-R at ya party w/ ya weak friends
blowin out candles ain't the only time u'll see her face light up this weekend
ok
4-0 vs u & that hurts ur heart faggot, it's killin nik-a's rep
another Winnipeg ya confidence a notch lower than canada's winter temp
cool
sprayin at ya torso or lower pussy, poppin a mattic raw
im Pekingese & legs off till it looks like ur shits got chewed by rabid dogs
lol nice
ur ugly wifes leavin u to cheat, she suckin cocks in ya place
that dirty sluts a Grenade, she removed ya ring an went off in ur face
didn't like this
pistol held up to ya temple, ima gunsling w/ the chrome
this shits like Wwf Elimation Chamber im lettin a hammer ring in ya dome
nice
i signed in & got it poppin, ura bland faggot tryna speak tuff
my Biofuel to the NBL, urs couldnt light enough fire to spark the league up
nice
at the end of NC1 u got modded but ur virus ass lost ur rights
cuz the moment u joined u gave the Staph Infections that killed off the site
cool personal
do a drive-by on ya family tree, shells hittin u pathetic bastards
bullets will Tapestry bobbin & weaving thru all there genetic patterns
not a fan

vs

Fuck what this nerd say, got ur girl & anotha hoe givin me brains for my birthday
u think she doesn’t go both ways... cuz that’s ya thought process for all ya forced wordplay
lol nice
Ya verse gay. I’m the new gun bar king, nigga, call me nik-guns, always aimin the glock
U either gonna face the steel or run... cuz it’s a Le’Veon Bell highlight reel when I wait on the block
diggin this
wisdom claimin the top. laughin gas can’t pump up ya style, the shots numbin u clowns
Im also the king of making u bite the steel... ya dentist calls that a crown
nice
Heat sums up my town, I’ma kill u no matter the weather nigga, my flow is real
I’m cold as steel... got zero chill, so I’m doing drive by’s on the snow mobile
not dfeelin this one
u a little nigga so my tribute to this bitch geek, is to pull out the fifth, sleep
u never seen a Mexican surpass six feet, so when I kill ya it’ll be memorial... for ya family the shit’s deep
to long winded for me
Kid, please. Im an OG with a new stance u ain’t fuckin with killer nik
I’m shooting from a different angle... u just recycle old concepts & change the wording a little bit
nice
I ain’t on that civil tip. My money clean Uncle Sam is givin this nerd the max
I’m quick to kill u and get the W-2.... nigga, that’s turbo tax
not a fan
u hurt, I laugh. No money for u, The gun’ll leave holes exposing this dude
I use similes since u like Broke... which means only Lesner will be voting for u
not feelin this

Was close but I got AK edging this one out.

v/ AK

Maximus
01-13-2018, 03:34 PM
Fuck what this nerd say, got ur girl & anotha hoe givin me brains for my birthday
u think she doesn’t go both ways... cuz that’s ya thought process for all ya forced wordplay
AIGHT
Ya verse gay. I’m the new gun bar king, nigga, call me nik-guns, always aimin the glock
U either gonna face the steel or run... cuz it’s a Le’Veon Bell highlight reel when I wait on the block
COOL
wisdom claimin the top. laughin gas can’t pump up ya style, the shots numbin u clowns
Im also the king of making u bite the steel... ya dentist calls that a crown
SOLID
Heat sums up my town, I’ma kill u no matter the weather nigga, my flow is real
I’m cold as steel... got zero chill, so I’m doing drive by’s on the snow mobile
OK
u a little nigga so my tribute to this bitch geek, is to pull out the fifth, sleep
u never seen a Mexican surpass six feet, so when I kill ya it’ll be memorial... for ya family the shit’s deep
NAH, I AINT FEELING
Kid, please. Im an OG with a new stance u ain’t fuckin with killer nik
I’m shooting from a different angle... u just recycle old concepts & change the wording a little bit
IVE SEEN SOMETHING LIKE THIS BEFORE
I ain’t on that civil tip. My money clean Uncle Sam is givin this nerd the max
I’m quick to kill u and get the W-2.... nigga, that’s turbo tax
AIGHT
u hurt, I laugh. No money for u, The gun’ll leave holes exposing this dude
I use similes since u like Broke... which means only Lesner will be voting for u
KINDA INDIRECT FOR ME


VS

fuck that bitch, im buckin a A-R at ya party w/ ya weak friends
blowin out candles ain't the only time u'll see her face light up this weekend
AIGHT PERSONAL
4-0 vs u & that hurts ur heart faggot, it's killin nik-a's rep
another Winnipeg ya confidence a notch lower than canada's winter temp
THIS DIDNT QUITE WORK FOR ME
sprayin at ya torso or lower pussy, poppin a mattic raw
im Pekingese & legs off till it looks like ur shits got chewed by rabid dogs
HA, RAW
ur ugly wifes leavin u to cheat, she suckin cocks in ya place
that dirty sluts a Grenade, she removed ya ring an went off in ur face
LOVED THIS
pistol held up to ya temple, ima gunsling w/ the chrome
this shits like Wwf Elimation Chamber im lettin a hammer ring in ya dome
COOL AGAIN
i signed in & got it poppin, ura bland faggot tryna speak tuff
my Biofuel to the NBL, urs couldnt light enough fire to spark the league up
WHAT!?LOL COOL
at the end of NC1 u got modded but ur virus ass lost ur rights
cuz the moment u joined u gave the Staph Infections that killed off the site
UHM, OK
do a drive-by on ya family tree, shells hittin u pathetic bastards
bullets will Tapestry bobbin & weaving thru all there genetic patterns
OK


sorry been real busy.

fire match, both brought some heat but i thought AK was more consistent and his punches hit harder.
v/ak

WRATH
01-13-2018, 04:14 PM
fuck that bitch, im buckin a A-R at ya party w/ ya weak friends
blowin out candles ain't the only time u'll see her face light up this weekend

Okay

4-0 vs u & that hurts ur heart faggot, it's killin nik-a's rep
another Winnipeg ya confidence a notch lower than canada's winter temp

Good

sprayin at ya torso or lower pussy, poppin a mattic raw
im Pekingese & legs off till it looks like ur shits got chewed by rabid dogs

Okay

ur ugly wifes leavin u to cheat, she suckin cocks in ya place
that dirty sluts a Grenade, she removed ya ring an went off in ur face

Lmaooooo

pistol held up to ya temple, ima gunsling w/ the chrome
this shits like Wwf Elimation Chamber im lettin a hammer ring in ya dome

Okay

i signed in & got it poppin, ura bland faggot tryna speak tuff
my Biofuel to the NBL, urs couldnt light enough fire to spark the league up

Solid

at the end of NC1 u got modded but ur virus ass lost ur rights
cuz the moment u joined u gave the Staph Infections that killed off the site

Lol

do a drive-by on ya family tree, shells hittin u pathetic bastards
bullets will Tapestry bobbin & weaving thru all there genetic patterns

Tap as tree? Sort of a reach

sorry been real busy.



Fuck what this nerd say, got ur girl & anotha hoe givin me brains for my birthdayfat wife
u think she doesn’t go both ways... cuz that’s ya thought process for all ya forced wordplay

Something is off about this. He would think his lines go both ways Right? That's why he tries it? I'll give it to you for the strength of the concept.

Ya verse gay. I’m the new gun bar king, nigga, call me nik-guns, always aimin the glock
U either gonna face the steel or run... cuz it’s a Le’Veon Bell highlight reel when I wait on the block

Nah

wisdom claimin the top. laughin gas can’t pump up ya style, the shots numbin u clowns
Im also the king of making u bite the steel... ya dentist calls that a crown

Nah dumb

Heat sums up my town, I’ma kill u no matter the weather nigga, my flow is real
I’m cold as steel... got zero chill, so I’m doing drive by’s on the snow mobile

Filler

u a little nigga so my tribute to this bitch geek, is to pull out the fifth, sleep
u never seen a Mexican surpass six feet, so when I kill ya it’ll be memorial... for ya family the shit’s deep

Cool concept not executed

Kid, please. Im an OG with a new stance u ain’t fuckin with killer nik
I’m shooting from a different angle... u just recycle old concepts & change the wording a little bit

Loooool

I ain’t on that civil tip. My money clean Uncle Sam is givin this nerd the max
I’m quick to kill u and get the W-2.... nigga, that’s turbo tax

Nice

u hurt, I laugh. No money for u, The gun’ll leave holes exposing this dude
I use similes since u like Broke... which means only Lesner will be voting for u

Cool closer


V - ak

Less misses

classickERBL
01-13-2018, 04:35 PM
this site is all the way backwards , ya literally vote for who losing LMAO , ill got this clearly , all AK had was the last 2 lines which were dope."blowin candle bar" - ehhh , "canada winter temp - simple and ehh , grenade bar was aight ,
Ill was barkin on em , way better rhyme patter , "both ways" bar dope , zero chill drive by on the snow mobile was haard how the fuck ya call it filler?
"turbo tax" fire , closing bars - dope
ill clearly !!! yall just hate gun bars SMH

For Battling
01-14-2018, 03:03 PM
fuck that bitch, im buckin a A-R at ya party w/ ya weak friends
blowin out candles ain't the only time u'll see her face light up this weekend
alright
4-0 vs u & that hurts ur heart faggot, it's killin nik-a's rep
another Winnipeg ya confidence a notch lower than canada's winter temp
pretty cool
sprayin at ya torso or lower pussy, poppin a mattic raw
im Pekingese & legs off till it looks like ur shits got chewed by rabid dogs
bit of a stretch for me
ur ugly wifes leavin u to cheat, she suckin cocks in ya place
that dirty sluts a Grenade, she removed ya ring an went off in ur face
dope
pistol held up to ya temple, ima gunsling w/ the chrome
this shits like Wwf Elimation Chamber im lettin a hammer ring in ya dome
alright cool
i signed in & got it poppin, ura bland faggot tryna speak tuff
my Biofuel to the NBL, urs couldnt light enough fire to spark the league up
nah not feelin
at the end of NC1 u got modded but ur virus ass lost ur rights
cuz the moment u joined u gave the Staph Infections that killed off the site
lol cool
do a drive-by on ya family tree, shells hittin u pathetic bastards
bullets will Tapestry bobbin & weaving thru all there genetic patterns
ehh

Vs


Fuck what this nerd say, got ur girl & anotha hoe givin me brains for my birthday
u think she doesn’t go both ways... cuz that’s ya thought process for all ya forced wordplay
i think wording messed this up a bit, not a bad personal tho
Ya verse gay. I’m the new gun bar king, nigga, call me nik-guns, always aimin the glock
U either gonna face the steel or run... cuz it’s a Le’Veon Bell highlight reel when I wait on the block
alright
wisdom claimin the top. laughin gas can’t pump up ya style, the shots numbin u clowns
Im also the king of making u bite the steel... ya dentist calls that a crown
ok
Heat sums up my town, I’ma kill u no matter the weather nigga, my flow is real
I’m cold as steel... got zero chill, so I’m doing drive by’s on the snow mobile
wasnt feelin this
u a little nigga so my tribute to this bitch geek, is to pull out the fifth, sleep
u never seen a Mexican surpass six feet, so when I kill ya it’ll be memorial... for ya family the shit’s deep
bit stretched but still dope
Kid, please. Im an OG with a new stance u ain’t fuckin with killer nik
I’m shooting from a different angle... u just recycle old concepts & change the wording a little bit
good personal
I ain’t on that civil tip. My money clean Uncle Sam is givin this nerd the max
I’m quick to kill u and get the W-2.... nigga, that’s turbo tax
felt this was lacking a little, cool concept but yeah lacking a bit. Decent overall
u hurt, I laugh. No money for u, The gun’ll leave holes exposing this dude
I use similes since u like Broke... which means only Lesner will be voting for u
alright

Allen came pretty consistent and had some pretty solid wp’s and concepts. A couple misses but nothing terrible. Nik I feel came up a bit short here, last week he dropped top notch, here I feel as though a lot of his bars were stretched due to trying to incorporate too many things in the bar maybe? Not sure but it took away from impact. Very good battle here but I have AK getting it.

Vote Allen Knight

Diablo
01-15-2018, 07:34 AM
LOOOOOOOL @ fuck that bitch right after the quote, that's amazing hahaha

opener was kind of light to me, I get its personal but didn't feel it really hit like your usual shit does

Winnipeg was nicely worded but I'm willing to bet the wordplays been done before even if not how you've used it

Pekingese is a funny one to me, I get that its a dog breed but it sure aint a rabit one LOL I could happily kick one in its face to stop it barking haha maybe its an accent thing but it doesn't work too well for me even though I get it, seemed a bit farfetched this time round with picking knees/Pekinese. Grenade was dope. Simple and effective. Elimination Chamber was okay, Biofuel similar but not really enough sting to them to really grab my attention like you had previously. Staph Infections a cool and fresh wordplay (to me at least), closer wasn't too special.

ill Nik-A: Nice personal opening jab about the wordplay, Le'Veon Bell was okay, had more a swag n flow feel to it so maybe thats why it didn't come off as well midbattle here. I wasn't feeling the dentist/crown tbh, snow mobile is a dope as fuck line hahaha again though, I feel like it would be better suited to a Swag N Flow match than used midbattle here. Maybe that's what you're tryna do though, wake people up to the fact if a lines dope its dope, doesn't always have to be directed at the opponent your names matched with? I kinda feel you on that front but its gonna take a change to the mindset of battlers for there to be any significant shift away from how we all know things are dope. it could open up everything to more dope bars though for sure and maybe that's what the game needs. fresh blood, fresh ideas. I liked the 6 feet line, reminded me of your plead the fifth from last week bar tbh but cool nonetheless. shoot from diff angle was okay, needed rewording to hit with more sting to it I felt, could have been better. W2 was a nice idea but again the wording didn't do it justice I don't think. Closer was straight but a little too direct.

I guess I've got Knight winning here, nik-A obviously tried something new out stylistically and while some of it worked others kinda didn't. I respect the envelope pushing in terms of SnF type bars but this wasn't the time and place for it I don't think and that cost him here as the votes have suggested.

Flow
01-15-2018, 09:25 AM
No more votes needed at this point but this was a great showing by both and I hope Barons analysis is correct because i found Ills approach refreshing also.

Great read guys

BROKE LESNAR
01-15-2018, 10:07 AM
AK wins 6-1