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Orc
01-15-2018, 02:14 PM
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FAILURE TO VOTE ON 3 BATTLES IS A DQ. NO MATTER WHO YOU ARE!!! YOU WILL BE DISQUALIFIED. VOTE ON 3 BATTLES OR YOU LOSE. SIMPLE!
Krucial Th1rt3en

Mr. J
01-17-2018, 07:54 PM
Did the Discussion scare off my opponent or what?

Krucial Th1rt3en
01-18-2018, 01:08 AM
let me get a extension till friday.
i got u

Krucial Th1rt3en
01-19-2018, 08:30 PM
Mr. J - The Clown Prince
__________________________________________________ _____________
wen i kill u, youll dissapear into the night scene,
youll come up missing without a trace, Prince getting whiped clean.
__________________________________________________ _____________
u get a gun, ill grab a knife, lets see who got the best aim,
if Mr. misses, my scalpal give em a sex change.
__________________________________________________ _____________
this guy probably cant scrap, and his whole pen game is subpar,
so if he say he greasey wit the hands, its bcuz he cant hang wit these bars.
__________________________________________________ _____________
30-38? damn, u shouldnt ever start no rap beefs,
u cant erase your terrible record, but u shouldve thrown out your rap sheets.
__________________________________________________ _____________
i hate trolls, so he better not ever let me see him around,
catch this Joker on a dark night witta Bat, beating this Clown.
__________________________________________________ _____________
this boy gone need a doctor to check his heart,
Death by Quartering,
J will be separated into 4 corners like the Jack in a deck of cards.
__________________________________________________ _____________
twitter fingers, wit any beef i aint fuckin around,
all that hashtagging will have me out front wit the pound.
__________________________________________________ _____________
fire rounds,
dome shot, paint his head red, watch this clown die...
naw, Heath Ledger, now he can Die A clown.
__________________________________________________ _____________ Mr. J

Mr. J
01-19-2018, 09:54 PM
Boy my style is that Yeah Pie, yours is looking like Bukkake.
I stuff peaches & cherries, while there are layers to you getting frosted fruitcake

pussy come get ya tubes laced or play the wall like a dental dam
ya whole future is spermicide from the occasional circle jerk sense of fam.

ya whole rhyme scheme is fucked & ya lines are wack as shit...we know.
truth is only time someone will call you commercial, is to show the benefits of cannabis on chemo.

this toy will bring that talk to an end, so stop thinking you acting real.
one peep and Ill knock off that top with Ms & crack you open like a Happy Meal.

now get outta here kid, or you can see what this style does.
you dont have the connection to land lines you always getting tuned out like dial up

I could grab the tool & spark & leave this sucker heated like a blacksmith
problem is you used to getting led on, ya whole career is basically being catfished

For Battling
01-20-2018, 12:26 AM
wen i kill u, youll dissapear into the night scene,
youll come up missing without a trace, Prince getting whiped clean.
___alright prince/prints not bad_______________________________________________ _____________
u get a gun, ill grab a knife, lets see who got the best aim,
if Mr. misses, my scalpal give em a sex change.
_scalpal is old wp but this is decent____________________________________________ _____ _____________
this guy probably cant scrap, and his whole pen game is subpar,
so if he say he greasey wit the hands, its bcuz he cant hang wit these bars.
_____lol I get it but nah_____________________________________________ _____________
30-38? damn, u shouldnt ever start no rap beefs,
u cant erase your terrible record, but u shouldve thrown out your rap sheets.
______thought this was dope tbh____________________________________________ _____________
i hate trolls, so he better not ever let me see him around,
catch this Joker on a dark night witta Bat, beating this Clown.
_____ehh nah_____________________________________________ _____________
this boy gone need a doctor to check his heart,
Death by Quartering,
J will be separated into 4 corners like the Jack in a deck of cards.
____i mean...every card has the number or letter in each corner right? Lol that’s takes away a lot of impact from the punch because it doesn’t make the J special at all______________________________________________ _____________
twitter fingers, wit any beef i aint fuckin around,
all that hashtagging will have me out front wit the pound.
______alright cool, could have been done better & less simpler but not bad____________________________________________ _____________
fire rounds,
dome shot, paint his head red, watch this clown die...
naw, Heath Ledger, now he can Die A clown.
same as above, cool concept but done in an extremely simplistic way, gotta make the bar more fulfilling

Vs


Boy my style is that Yeah Pie, yours is looking like Bukkake.
I stuff peaches & cherries, while there are layers to you getting frosted fruitcake
bukkake and frosted fruitcake rhyme? Gtfo
pussy come get ya tubes laced or play the wall like a dental dam
ya whole future is spermicide from the occasional circle jerk sense of fam.
nah
ya whole rhyme scheme is fucked & ya lines are wack as shit...we know.
truth is only time someone will call you commercial, is to show the benefits of cannabis on chemo.
nah
this toy will bring that talk to an end, so stop thinking you acting real.
one peep and Ill knock off that top with Ms & crack you open like a Happy Meal.
this was better but barely decent
now get outta here kid, or you can see what this style does.
you dont have the connection to land lines you always getting tuned out like dial up
better than the last, now we’re getting somewhere.
I could grab the tool & spark & leave this sucker heated like a blacksmith
problem is you used to getting led on, ya whole career is basically being cat-fished
cool

MR J is getting better still, he’s managed to form actual punches but the concept need to improve. Krucial please never use that structure in ur verse ever again lol. You had good concepts and a good number of your lines hit but you have to do a better job at making a punch “whole”

Vote Krucial

WRATH
01-20-2018, 06:24 AM
Mr. J - The Clown Prince
__________________________________________________ _____________
wen i kill u, youll dissapear into the night scene,
youll come up missing without a trace, Prince getting whiped clean.
______________________________________

Nah_________________________

u get a gun, ill grab a knife, lets see who got the best aim,
if Mr. misses, my scalpal give em a sex change.
_______________________________
Eh_______________________________

this guy probably cant scrap, and his whole pen game is subpar,
so if he say he greasey wit the hands, its bcuz he cant hang wit these bars.
_____________________________________

Nah__________________________
30-38? damn, u shouldnt ever start no rap beefs,
u cant erase your terrible record, but u shouldve thrown out your rap sheets.
______________________________
Right delivery punch isn't there _________________________________
i hate trolls, so he better not ever let me see him around,
catch this Joker on a dark night witta Bat, beating this Clown.
_____________________________
Ok_________________________________

this boy gone need a doctor to check his heart,
Death by Quartering,
J will be separated into 4 corners like the Jack in a deck of cards.
_________________________
Shows promise
______________________________________
twitter fingers, wit any beef i aint fuckin around,
all that hashtagging will have me out front wit the pound.
_________________________
Solid______________________________________

fire rounds,
dome shot, paint his head red, watch this clown die...
naw, Heath Ledger, now he can Die A clown.
____________________________
No connection ___________________________________ Mr. J




Boy my style is that Yeah Pie, yours is looking like Bukkake.
I stuff peaches & cherries, while there are layers to you getting frosted fruitcake

Eh

pussy come get ya tubes laced or play the wall like a dental dam
ya whole future is spermicide from the occasional circle jerk sense of fam.

Sense of fam finish ruined something great

ya whole rhyme scheme is fucked & ya lines are wack as shit...we know.
truth is only time someone will call you commercial, is to show the benefits of cannabis on chemo.

Whats the connection?

this toy will bring that talk to an end, so stop thinking you acting real.
one peep and Ill knock off that top with Ms & crack you open like a Happy Meal.

M's?

now get outta here kid, or you can see what this style does.
you dont have the connection to land lines you always getting tuned out like dial up

I like this

I could grab the tool & spark & leave this sucker heated like a blacksmith
problem is you used to getting led on, ya whole career is basically being catfished

Nice


For a cold start that wasn't the worst verse ive ever seen @krucial

V mr J

Schadenfreude
01-20-2018, 03:55 PM
wen i kill u, youll dissapear into the night scene,
youll come up missing without a trace, Prince getting whiped clean.
Decent
u get a gun, ill grab a knife, lets see who got the best aim,
if Mr. misses, my scalpal give em a sex change.
OK nameplay
this guy probably cant scrap, and his whole pen game is subpar,
so if he say he greasey wit the hands, its bcuz he cant hang wit these bars.
Nope, played concept
30-38? damn, u shouldnt ever start no rap beefs,
u cant erase your terrible record, but u shouldve thrown out your rap sheets.
record/rap sheets, I know, u know that's an old concept
i hate trolls, so he better not ever let me see him around,
catch this Joker on a dark night witta Bat, beating this Clown.
Played against him
this boy gone need a doctor to check his heart,
Death by Quartering,
J will be separated into 4 corners like the Jack in a deck of cards.
Nice lol
twitter fingers, wit any beef i aint fuckin around,
all that hashtagging will have me out front wit the pound.
I used a hastag bar a while back, so it's played to Me
fire rounds,
dome shot, paint his head red, watch this clown die...
naw, Heath Ledger, now he can Die A clown.
Naw, there were a million Heath Ledger concepts after he died

I like your style, the way you deliver/word bars is dope, but those old ass concepts, got damn..smh. There's been countless battles, so u have to consider that a lot of stuff has been said a million times, so ya have to aim to be as original as possible, or else the impact your punches'll be nullified. And don't use those pointless ass lines to separate yo bars..lol.


Boy my style is that Yeah Pie, yours is looking like Bukkake.
I stuff peaches & cherries, while there are layers to you getting frosted fruitcake
Fruit angle is a miss
pussy come get ya tubes laced or play the wall like a dental dam
ya whole future is spermicide from the occasional circle jerk sense of fam.
WHAT?
ya whole rhyme scheme is fucked & ya lines are wack as shit...we know.
truth is only time someone will call you commercial, is to show the benefits of cannabis on chemo.
Ok concept, but how does it relate to 13?
this toy will bring that talk to an end, so stop thinking you acting real.
one peep and Ill knock off that top with Ms & crack you open like a Happy Meal.
Decent
now get outta here kid, or you can see what this style does.
you dont have the connection to land lines you always getting tuned out like dial up
Oooooooollllddd asf
I could grab the tool & spark & leave this sucker heated like a blacksmith
problem is you used to getting led on, ya whole career is basically being catfished
This is actually decent

J you're still writing some weird stuff here & there..lol, but you're getting closer to the idea of punchline battling, still tho yo opponent had more to offer, KRUCIAL 13.

Flow
01-20-2018, 04:05 PM
Swear I just voted on this an then ended up on another battle wtf.

Anyway - Mr J your closer was LOTb 5 more of them you be taking many W.

However 13 won this one for more quotes. Although wasnt a fan of the constant clown avatar reference but your new so guess you didnt have much to work from.

VOTE 13

BROKE LESNAR
01-20-2018, 07:43 PM
Boy my style is that Yeah Pie, yours is looking like Bukkake.
I stuff peaches & cherries, while there are layers to you getting frosted fruitcake

☆ terrible

pussy come get ya tubes laced or play the wall like a dental dam
ya whole future is spermicide from the occasional circle jerk sense of fam.



ya whole rhyme scheme is fucked & ya lines are wack as shit...we know.
truth is only time someone will call you commercial, is to show the benefits of cannabis on chemo.



this toy will bring that talk to an end, so stop thinking you acting real.
one peep and Ill knock off that top with Ms & crack you open like a Happy Meal.



now get outta here kid, or you can see what this style does.
you dont have the connection to land lines you always getting tuned out like dial up



I could grab the tool & spark & leave this sucker heated like a blacksmith
problem is you used to getting led on, ya whole career is basically being catfished



Well, 13 was fortunate that Mr J sucks. This wasn't a good battle at all. Please stop with the double spacing and unnecessary lines. 13 is improving, though.

v-13

Habitat
01-21-2018, 08:29 AM
Krucial was trash all the way through I don't fuck with his style.

Vs

I could grab the tool & spark & leave this sucker heated like a blacksmith
problem is you used to getting led on, ya whole career is basically being catfished
This is actually decent

Pretty close. Lucky for mr jay krucial is trash

Destroyer
01-21-2018, 11:08 AM
Uhhh ok nothing hit on either side
MrJ, had you dropped the fruitcake from the line it would have actually been better
the other guy, drop the spacing and the lines, but the style is there. Just up the concepts
Joker bars been done to DEATH on dude, so come a little cleverer than hit u with a “bat” type shit if you want to use them.
Still, Js concepts are so hard to even pick out

I guess I got 13

Nick James
01-21-2018, 03:52 PM
Mr j. had the catfish line.. that was actually kinda dope. Prolly won the battle tbh.

Krucial u just gotta read some more battles man.. itll help you form a structure cuz at this point thats the first step. Ull get it bro just stick wit it..

V/ mr j

classickERBL
01-21-2018, 06:15 PM
I got krucial fav bars : Prince get wiped clean , death by quartering , hash tag
Didn’t like much from mr j
V-krucial

For Battling
01-21-2018, 11:05 PM
Krucial Thirteen Wins 6-3