Sour Joog vs Letterman - JOOG WINS

[Orc]

Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday Jan 4th and will be open until Sunday.
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours



Line Limit:

Minimum of 8, maximum of 16
If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first.


Check ins are encouraged but not mandatory. Also, swaying/biting/recycling is a DQ

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[Letterman]

Lol you’re not the real Joog/Sour Cig. Who are you?

[Enbombz]

No, I am sour joog.

[Enbombz]

You cookin flames? nah that stuff you say just dug ya grave
Since you wanna dialysis.. I'll be cleaning up that blood for days
This ain't rb you ain't shit here, nothing changed it still remains a fact
Remember 'gainst Gillette, the man put the blade to ya face like a shaving add
Gun in ya face, u aint even worthy to face the don
This Boy at the bottom of the barrel..same place Orc scraped him from
Dude ain't got the appetite for this, he act up i'm cutting this clown
I take him trying to bulimia's a joke, that ends with his guts on the ground
I was bread for this, one punch this mans deaded quick
The force'll project that body so far it trashes that last Jedi shit
Finger on the trigger, shit it's a breeze to take this dude
If he here off his own accordion idiot, one squeeze will change that tune
You used to pack some weight, now you look down trodden and famished
Back then you used to throw down, this gauntlet don't even offer a challenge

[Letterman]

I need the ext if it’s cool

[Enbombz]

Hurry da fuck up then.

[For Battling]

Letterman you have until midnight pst

[King Karaoke]

Hi...

You cookin flames? nah that stuff you say just dug ya grave
Since you wanna dialysis.. I'll be cleaning up that blood for days
this has probably been done before but i still liked it...
This ain't rb you ain't shit here, nothing changed it still remains a fact
Remember 'gainst Gillette, the man put the blade to ya face like a shaving add
dope...
Gun in ya face, u aint even worthy to face the don
This Boy at the bottom of the barrel..same place Orc scraped him from
not bad...
Dude ain't got the appetite for this, he act up i'm cutting this clown
I take him trying to bulimia's a joke, that ends with his guts on the ground
this was cool but couldve been worded better...
I was bread for this, one punch this mans deaded quick
The force'll project that body so far it trashes that last Jedi shit
This was another cool line that couldve had more sting...
Finger on the trigger, shit it's a breeze to take this dude
If he here off his own accordion idiot, one squeeze will change that tune
Nah stop forcing the wordplay...
You used to pack some weight, now you look down trodden and famished
Back then you used to throw down, this gauntlet don't even offer a challenge
this was kinda weak...

This was a good verse which probably wouldve won...
All your wordplays have to work both ways tho...
I like Letterman so I wouldve loved to see this battle...

Bye...

[Pinot Grij]

Seems like some stretched wp -- some that worked, some that didn't

Bulimia line is pretty dope cuz I've never seen it before -- but I thought the dialysis and accordion shit was too much of a stretch, even though the 'squeeze' and 'change that tune' connected, I guess you just need to reword it.

I wish Letterman showed -- look forward to reading what you got next week.

[For Battling]

You cookin flames? nah that stuff you say just dug ya grave
Since you wanna dialysis.. I'll be cleaning up that blood for days
pretty cool
This ain't rb you ain't shit here, nothing changed it still remains a fact
Remember 'gainst Gillette, the man put the blade to ya face like a shaving add
alright
Gun in ya face, u aint even worthy to face the don
This Boy at the bottom of the barrel..same place Orc scraped him from
too generic
Dude ain't got the appetite for this, he act up i'm cutting this clown
I take him trying to bulimia's a joke, that ends with his guts on the ground
bulimia bit forced but the bar was cool overall
I was bread for this, one punch this mans deaded quick
The force'll project that body so far it trashes that last Jedi shit
decent
Finger on the trigger, shit it's a breeze to take this dude
If he here off his own accordion idiot, one squeeze will change that tune
alright
You used to pack some weight, now you look down trodden and famished
Back then you used to throw down, this gauntlet don't even offer a challenge
alright not bad

[Flow]

Legit that orc scraping line was used last week i am sure.also whilst i liked the wording the star wars bar ive seen recently. Bulemia line was sick, i put creativity over forced sometimes its gotta be done an this was one of those times. Rest was solid. Nice work

[Schadenfreude]

You cookin flames? nah that stuff you say just dug ya grave
Since you wanna dialysis.. I'll be cleaning up that blood for days
Seems familiar, plus you could've said bodily fluids instead of just blood
This ain't rb you ain't shit here, nothing changed it still remains a fact
Remember 'gainst Gillette, the man put the blade to ya face like a shaving add
I have no idea who Gill is..lol, but this is nice regardless
Gun in ya face, u aint even worthy to face the don
This Boy at the bottom of the barrel..same place Orc scraped him from
DOPE
Dude ain't got the appetite for this, he act up i'm cutting this clown
I take him trying to bulimia's a joke, that ends with his guts on the ground
Forced wp
I was bread for this, one punch this mans deaded quick
The force'll project that body so far it trashes that last Jedi shit
Clever
Finger on the trigger, shit it's a breeze to take this dude
If he here off his own accordion idiot, one squeeze will change that tune
Maybe if his name start w/ D - 'accord D an idiot'
You used to pack some weight, now you look down trodden and famished
Back then you used to throw down, this gauntlet don't even offer a challenge
Personal, but super light

Overall good verse, no major problems.