Infiltration vs. Problumatic - INFILTRATION WINS

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Infiltration Problumatic

[Saint]

In. 8-10

[Problumatic]

Check

[Problumatic]

Yo ..

See, your TASK FOR WINNINGS BASIC, ya’ TACTICS WILL LIMIT GREATNESS/
ATTACKING FROM DISTANCE .. damn .. what a ‘PASSIVE INFILTRATION’/
got the MASK THAT FITTED JASON, get ‘wrecked’ ‘OVER PASSIN’ LIMITATION /(overpass)
So he ‘skipping the next drive’ like a MADDEN SIMULATION/
Claiming this SOWN UP, but you couldn’t leave ‘AERO WINDED’/
Ya not ‘dynamic’ don’t ‘BOW UP’ cause’ AERO DID IT’/(Arrow)
Soon as this CHUMP CALLED it’s ‘border’ death, its ‘civil hatred’/
cause I don’t need TRUMPS WALLS just to END INFILTRATION/
Get ya FLESH RIPPED WIDE like I’m a PETRIFIED ROTTY/
I don’t need FORENSIC FINDS, to IDENTIFY this BODY/
Get ELECTRIFIED and ya INTESTINES FRIED PROBABLY/
you the type to ‘steal lines’ .. thats a TECH DEVICE ROBBERY/
You a “King”? Nah a “Pawn” and tonight(KNIGHT) I might KICK IN HIS TOOTH/
His “Queen” get SLIPPED WIT the ‘ROOF’ like she was “BISHOP” IN JUICE/
I’m QUICK to INTRUDE, VICIOUS and I’m MISSIN’ A SCREW/
That’s why i’ll end his life chapter like RELIGIOUS DISPUTES/

[Saint]

THOSE ODD LINES STRETCHED, & the agreement was NOT QUITE MET/
Trollin this nerd, thx for the verse.. but I aint went THAT far back in the ARCHIVES YET/
P QUICKLY FAILS, begged to be ina newb tourney, lol I WISH EM WELL/
Die INA SPELL..& after you passport'll be what I give you on ya TRIP TO HELL/

Fuck that
I'm on a mission.. draw a piece for ya set; that's a composition
100 round thompson bangin til ya skin on the drum, shit's a conga session
Ya bae? had it wit her pal...my boys sandwich'd at the house
Bitch was being dugout between two bodies longer than the panama canal
We pissed on your slut, sticky as fuuuck, all over her ass
Since she had the mouth of a sailor we gave her a peacoat to match
Call it camp hazing fam, aim the can & you take flight son
For thinkin u an imaginary monster trustt this'll be no fake snipe hunt
Dont believe in gun violence? u see mine & turn ghost, faggot
It's soo tragic how livin in black & white got u dying from achromatic.
Influx in now Inf lucks out. dogg u show NO typa skill to me
Ya chances of winning is zero &&& chalk that up to low probability.

[Nick James]

Problumm.. I aint seen a verse in that format since long bar sites back in '08 lol. still tho.. for what its worth that trump wall/end infiltration shit was actually dope. problum is thats all I was rlly feelin..

Infiltrate u had sum good hits.. the panama line was nice, opener was cool.. n thats all u rlly needed for this one.

V/infiltrate

[Elemental P]

Prob,.liked the way you used your multis mixed with the punch lines, and using word play also. The Trump line was cool, the passive line was nice too,.decent name.flips thru out.

Infiltrate...talking about g.f lines are old as fuck. The composition line was ok. Not much popping with multis or anything that really caught my eye.

Punch's- prob
Multis-prob
Word play-prob
Personals - n/a
VOTE=Prob. His verse was.actually.geared toward his opponent without generic lines that can be used on anyone.

[Lyriscologist]

I’d actually agree with El, both sides were a lil meh, structure, flow, multis a lil shaky on both sides.. the panama canal line was I guess the best line out of the battle but the set up and content of the punch killed it, too generic.. Prob at least geared his verse to his opponent and had some decent nameflips, trump wall line was decent but could of been worded to rhyme better and flow smoother.. overall slight edge to Prob..

[Schadenfreude]

Fuck battle are you niggas reading?


See, your TASK FOR WINNINGS BASIC, ya’ TACTICS WILL LIMIT GREATNESS/
ATTACKING FROM DISTANCE .. damn .. what a ‘PASSIVE INFILTRATION’/
'Passive' could have been dope had you developed the idea further
got the MASK THAT FITTED JASON, get ‘wrecked’ ‘OVER PASSIN’ LIMITATION /(overpass)
So he ‘skipping the next drive’ like a MADDEN SIMULATION/
Never explain lines within the verse, let alone something that simple. And Madden concepts been played since '96
Claiming this SOWN UP, but you couldn’t leave ‘AERO WINDED’/
Ya not ‘dynamic’ don’t ‘BOW UP’ cause’ AERO DID IT’/(Arrow)
Wow, bow & Aero plays are dead, even if not being use against Aero
Soon as this CHUMP CALLED it’s ‘border’ death, its ‘civil hatred’/
cause I don’t need TRUMPS WALLS just to END INFILTRATION/
Again you could have developed Trump's Wall into something great, but you left it simple as fuck
Get ya FLESH RIPPED WIDE like I’m a PETRIFIED ROTTY/
I don’t need FORENSIC FINDS, to IDENTIFY this BODY/
Nooooo, super played. And "BODY" is my signature, but Ion't put it in my verses..lol
Get ELECTRIFIED and ya INTESTINES FRIED PROBABLY/
you the type to ‘steal lines’ .. thats a TECH DEVICE ROBBERY/
*exhales deeply*
You a “King”? Nah a “Pawn” and tonight(KNIGHT) I might KICK IN HIS TOOTH/
His “Queen” get SLIPPED WIT the ‘ROOF’ like she was “BISHOP” IN JUICE/
Seriously how many times have you heard somebody use a Juice or chess concept? Combining them doesn't make them fresh/original concepts fool
I’m QUICK to INTRUDE, VICIOUS and I’m MISSIN’ A SCREW/
That’s why i’ll end his life chapter like RELIGIOUS DISPUTES/
NOW YOU HAVE ME YELLING! Wtf is the point of capitalizing the rhyming syllables?


THOSE ODD LINES STRETCHED, & the agreement was NOT QUITE MET/
Trollin this nerd, thx for the verse.. but I aint went THAT far back in the ARCHIVES YET/
Lmao..good opener
P QUICKLY FAILS, begged to be ina newb tourney, lol I WISH EM WELL/
Die INA SPELL..& after you passport'll be what I give you on ya TRIP TO HELL/
Naaaw, should've just did the opener like that..lol
I'm on a mission.. draw a piece for ya set; that's a composition
100 round thompson bangin til ya skin on the drum, shit's a conga session
Nasty, ya know I luv these type bars
Ya bae? had it wit her pal...my boys sandwich'd at the house
Bitch was being dugout between two bodies longer than the panama canal
CRAZY!
We pissed on your slut, sticky as fuuuck, all over her ass
Since she had the mouth of a sailor we gave her a peacoat to match
Lmaoooo
Call it camp hazing fam, aim the can & you take flight son
For thinkin u an imaginary monster trustt this'll be no fake snipe hunt
Decent
Dont believe in gun violence? u see mine & turn ghost, faggot
It's soo tragic how livin in black & white got u dying from achromatic.
Light
Influx in now Inf lucks out. dogg u show NO typa skill to me
Ya chances of winning is zero &&& chalk that up to low probability.
Decent

INFILTRATION even w/ Inf being sarcasm & bullshitting he took this comfortably. Problum you really need to update yo style & yo concepts & yo wording, that was some early 2000's ezboard, before I left grammar school shit. Just read the verse from everyone in the league's top 10 & study how dudes use the set-up/punchline formula, yet still all have different styles.

[Pinot Grij]

Prob

All this capitalization and slashes and shit is just a distraction from your verse.. if your rhymes are solid, then you shouldn't need to caps them to point them out -- it'll have more effect on your reader if the rhyme comes together naturally as they read it. On the same note -- explaining your wordplay in brackets at the end of the line shows that the wordplay ain't good in the first place. The wordplay should speak for itself -- it be more effective as I read it and see how you constructed it. You never see battle rappers wshipering their wordplay into the mic after they spit their bar. It's just amateur.

As far as content goes, your passive infiltration line doesn't make sense. Madden line sounds cool but I don't get how "skipping the next drive" is a diss to your opponent. Arrow line.. I mean, I get that a bow and arrow go together, but I don't follow the context. Trump's Wall line was actually really cool. I don't like the identify body line, seems like a throwaway. Steal lines is played. Bishop line is cool. Closer is a throwaway.

Couple cool lines, but overdone execution and a lot of filler.

Inf

The opener clowning on his style coulda been a lot funnier -- could've really got outlandish and made it look stupid.

Conga session is a cool opener -- a lot at work in it.
Panama Canal is dope.
Peacoat is sickening lol but cool.
Fake snipe hunt -- not hitting for me, I loved the setup though and was expecting a harsh punch and it was a bit of a letdown for me.
Achromatic is cool wp.
Low Probability is a dope name flip

Vote -- Inf

[ill nik-A]

Who the fuck.

Yo are we in the ez board days again?

That format. Jesus Christ. That verse was horrid. It reads old it’s hard to read. It’s played. Wow this is 2018

Inf. Opener and Panama Canal were nice. Panama Canal was sickkkk

Vote inf easy

[Orc]

Problumatic I can tell you've got skill as that verse was well crafted in the style that it's in. If you want to make the transition into short bar effectively then just have a set up and punch in each couplet. Replace the carried on schemes with internals and have the set up relate to the punch. Drop the caps and explaining. You'll be winning here in no time. Hit me up if you want any help transitioning. Skipping the next drive was a clever twist and the trump line was cool -- needs to be worded harder. Make the most out of your concepts.

Inf, conga line was nice. Pea coat line was funny as fuck. Closer was cool. Panama canal made me do the screw face. Overall pretty damn fire verse. Well done.

Overall Inf wins

[Flow]

Trump wall was good.

Vote inf

[For Battling]

Trump wall was good.

Vote inf

This won’t fly

[Flow]

For Battling

Yo ..

See, your TASK FOR WINNINGS BASIC, ya’ TACTICS WILL LIMIT GREATNESS/
ATTACKING FROM DISTANCE .. damn .. what a ‘PASSIVE INFILTRATION’/

Miss - better then zelphs best though
got the MASK THAT FITTED JASON, get ‘wrecked’ ‘OVER PASSIN’ LIMITATION /(overpass)
So he ‘skipping the next drive’ like a MADDEN SIMULATION/
Claiming this SOWN UP, but you couldn’t leave ‘AERO WINDED’/
miss - better then zelphs though

Ya not ‘dynamic’ don’t ‘BOW UP’ cause’ AERO DID IT’/(Arrow)
Soon as this CHUMP CALLED it’s ‘border’ death, its ‘civil hatred’/
cause I don’t need TRUMPS WALLS just to END INFILTRATION/
more of these... tad better wording next time. Bette rthen zelphs best though
Get ya FLESH RIPPED WIDE like I’m a PETRIFIED ROTTY/
I don’t need FORENSIC FINDS, to IDENTIFY this BODY/
Get ELECTRIFIED and ya INTESTINES FRIED PROBABLY/
you the type to ‘steal lines’ .. thats a TECH DEVICE ROBBERY/
miss - even zelph hits better then this. Jokes. Miss though
You a “King”? Nah a “Pawn” and tonight(KNIGHT) I might KICK IN HIS TOOTH/
His “Queen” get SLIPPED WIT the ‘ROOF’ like she was “BISHOP” IN JUICE/
miss - zelph blah blah
I’m QUICK to INTRUDE, VICIOUS and I’m MISSIN’ A SCREW/
That’s why i’ll end his life chapter like RELIGIOUS DISPUTES/
miss

liked the wall line. Dont caps in future. You have it just need to adjust a bit like zelphs lip

THOSE ODD LINES STRETCHED, & the agreement was NOT QUITE MET/
Trollin this nerd, thx for the verse.. but I aint went THAT far back in the ARCHIVES YET/
funny
P QUICKLY FAILS, begged to be ina newb tourney, lol I WISH EM WELL/
Die INA SPELL..& after you passport'll be what I give you on ya TRIP TO HELL/
meh didnt enjoy this tbh
Fuck that
I'm on a mission.. draw a piece for ya set; that's a composition
100 round thompson bangin til ya skin on the drum, shit's a conga session
ok. 2 hits has won this.
Ya bae? had it wit her pal...my boys sandwich'd at the house
Bitch was being dugout between two bodies longer than the panama canal
We pissed on your slut, sticky as fuuuck, all over her ass
Since she had the mouth of a sailor we gave her a peacoat to match
Call it camp hazing fam, aim the can & you take flight son
For thinkin u an imaginary monster trustt this'll be no fake snipe hunt
Dont believe in gun violence? u see mine & turn ghost, faggot
It's soo tragic how livin in black & white got u dying from achromatic.
Influx in now Inf lucks out. dogg u show NO typa skill to me
Ya chances of winning is zero &&& chalk that up to low probability.

Seen better from inf but hes done what he needed an that was probably his mindset. P you got the tslent just need to adapt to a different style. No doubt in my mind youll be there in a few more battles.

Zelph does this meet your nazi fucking criteria. (I like you really you big pudding pop lets direct message more often)

[Suthaveli]

Probl has alot of potiental. Alot of what your doing is outdated in ref to image. we will catch your multis w.out having to Cap them. the slashes at the end for people can be a breaker as well. U had a few decent punches, but many were not passable tho. very outdated. Read some verses & take some advice, u'll get it. trust.

Infil panama canal line was fiya. I usually don't quote too many bish violation bars but u & bar dropped 2 that made me not dred so much reading them now & days.

mvgt- Infiltration

[WRATH]

Yo ..

See, your TASK FOR WINNINGS BASIC, ya’ TACTICS WILL LIMIT GREATNESS/
ATTACKING FROM DISTANCE .. damn .. what a ‘PASSIVE INFILTRATION’/
got the MASK THAT FITTED JASON, get ‘wrecked’ ‘OVER PASSIN’ LIMITATION /(overpass)
So he ‘skipping the next drive’ like a MADDEN SIMULATION/

Overpass wordplay does not work, aside from that this section is okay

Claiming this SOWN UP, but you couldn’t leave ‘AERO WINDED’/
Ya not ‘dynamic’ don’t ‘BOW UP’ cause’ AERO DID IT’/(Arrow)

Worded clumsily but i like it

Soon as this CHUMP CALLED it’s ‘border’ death, its ‘civil hatred’/
cause I don’t need TRUMPS WALLS just to END INFILTRATION/

Border death? Ur pushing it buddy.

Get ya FLESH RIPPED WIDE like I’m a PETRIFIED ROTTY/
I don’t need FORENSIC FINDS, to IDENTIFY this BODY/
Get ELECTRIFIED and ya INTESTINES FRIED PROBABLY/
you the type to ‘steal lines’ .. thats a TECH DEVICE ROBBERY/

Starting to reach cuh

You a “King”? Nah a “Pawn” and tonight(KNIGHT) I might KICK IN HIS TOOTH/
His “Queen” get SLIPPED WIT the ‘ROOF’ like she was “BISHOP” IN JUICE/

I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and say this is okay.

I’m QUICK to INTRUDE, VICIOUS and I’m MISSIN’ A SCREW/
That’s why i’ll end his life chapter like RELIGIOUS DISPUTES/

Nah




THOSE ODD LINES STRETCHED, & the agreement was NOT QUITE MET/
Trollin this nerd, thx for the verse.. but I aint went THAT far back in the ARCHIVES YET/
P QUICKLY FAILS, begged to be ina newb tourney, lol I WISH EM WELL/
Die INA SPELL..& after you passport'll be what I give you on ya TRIP TO HELL/

Parody so i'll say its cool

Fuck that
I'm on a mission.. draw a piece for ya set; that's a composition
100 round thompson bangin til ya skin on the drum, shit's a conga session

Graphic

Ya bae? had it wit her pal...my boys sandwich'd at the house
Bitch was being dugout between two bodies longer than the panama canal

Leave this nigga alone inf

We pissed on your slut, sticky as fuuuck, all over her ass
Since she had the mouth of a sailor we gave her a peacoat to match

Lol

Call it camp hazing fam, aim the can & you take flight son
For thinkin u an imaginary monster trustt this'll be no fake snipe hunt

Eh

Dont believe in gun violence? u see mine & turn ghost, faggot
It's soo tragic how livin in black & white got u dying from achromatic.

Eh

Influx in now Inf lucks out. dogg u show NO typa skill to me
Ya chances of winning is zero &&& chalk that up to low probability.

Solid


V bitch ass infiltration

Your not trash prob but some of it was reaching.

[For Battling]

Infiltration Wins 8-2