2tripple0 (0-0) vs. Wun Hunnid (0-0) - 2TRIPPLE0 WINS

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Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday Feb 15th and will be open until Sunday.
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours



Line Limit:

Minimum of 8, maximum of 16
If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first.


Check ins are encouraged but not mandatory. Also, swaying/biting/recycling is a DQ

FAILURE TO VOTE ON 3 BATTLES IS A DQ. NO MATTER WHO YOU ARE!!! YOU WILL BE DISQUALIFIED. VOTE ON 3 BATTLES OR YOU LOSE. SIMPLE!
THERE’S BEEN A LOT OF COMPLAINTS ABOUT VOTING RECENTLY, IF THERE IS SOMEONE WHO YOU DON’T WANT TO VOTE IN YOUR BATTLE YOU MUST STATE THEIR NAME IN YOUR CHECK IN. IF IT’S A CRAZY AMOUNT OF PEOPLE THEN SORRY YOU’RE JUST A BITCH AND ALL VOTES WILL COUNT. AS PER ORC

2tripple0 Wun Hunnid

[Wun Hunnid]

check

[2tripple0]

here

[2tripple0]

Right

this cat Hunnid signing in the NBL for the first time
he just joined so i'll introduce him by kicking him straight off the lime
everythings been done before hunnid and text battling is getting old
you got no previous battles so I don't sweat it way it must be getting cold
for real shit you post no one is interested in reading ya fool
ya bars make no sense i guess hunnid forgot to learn English at school
for real keep writing lines but in a battle you never go for a dudes throat
hunnid in the nbl when he couldn't put a bar together if it was a fuckin joke
he aint got no skill to add to the talent pool since its his first time online
for real this netcee a virgin if he ever gets puss it wouldn't happen in real life

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Wun Hunnid due tonight

[Wun Hunnid]

can i still post a verse? apologies for being late also.

[2tripple0]

go for it I guess...

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can i still post a verse? apologies for being late also.

Hurry up stupid nigga

[Flow]

In terms of feedback, id be surprised if you had won if your opponent showed. Your sort of writing a diss verse where you should be sort of doing set up and punch. Think about a stand up comic, specifically one like Jimmy Carr. He will send you one way with something innocent enough (the set up) then its flipped it into an insult or joke an taken a different way then you expected (the punchline). Once you have that format you want to look at how you flip, usually a turn of phrase or wordplay, but be creative an dont lose your style. Finally content, the sting comes from something personal, research who your facing. Anyway best advice i can give.

Id advise looking at karaoke destroyer and Orc for clean clear cut set up and punches as a guide