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Lyriscologist
02-21-2018, 02:02 PM
yo,
where these kats at to Match my Last Moves,
Smash the Wack Crews..
Hand me Daps Too or go Back to Rap School..
i aint Grabbing my Pants to Flash some Dance Moves,
..with hands on my nuts like a Pack of Cashews..
my Ink is an Art like I'm Branding Tattoos,
I'll Rip you Apart going Track for Track Dude!
if you dont Have the Haps? well, ..you Can Advance Too,
just Have a Plan..
Master That and Pass the Bad News,
That's a Fact..!
..the Bads we Have Entraps our Past in Back Rooms,
but the Tracks we Have Exactly Mapped a Path Through..
(..And we Have Proof!)
my Aftermath'll make the Planet Crack in Half Too!
while I'm Packing up some Hash then Blasting Past the Half Moon,
That's True!
you'd never Beat the Bone, See me Fold or Speak a Flow Wack,
I'mma Beast who Grows to Peaks Unknown, I've Reached the Snow Caps..
got the Deepest Poems, Reaping Souls.. you People Know That..!
start Receiving Blows, then Retreat and Hope to Keep a Close Stance,
No Chance!
to Compete with Bone.. Believe in Hope and See your Own Path,
but Keep it Dope.. I'm Defeating Hoes with Free's or Note Pads,
Completely Though.. you'd Need to Clone Emcees with Pro Stats
cuz I'm not an Easy Foe.. Speech Explodes to Eat your Whole Camp!
just Know THAT!
y'all Rhyming Poor!
while I was Born Rapping,
either Try to Form your Mind some More or Find the Door Slamming!
I'll, Slide a Sword Inside your Corpse til I get Bored At It...
you'll, Find the Floor when I get Your, Spinal cord Crackin'!
(Bitch!)
..I am Lord..!
Disguised a Normal Guy Reborn Frantic,
to Guide this Sport!
so Write and Score your Final Four Brackets!
..I've Explored the Lines you Force..
no Time for Your Antics..!
cuz I can ..
Lighten Your Status with the Slightest War Tactics!
eezee

Darker Ego
02-21-2018, 09:12 PM
Damn son Al write you a cheque cause you deserve the money
The way we connected lyrically got me thinking that you more than honey
Here with you every step of the way come rescue me in the depths where I lay
To the Devils I pray and try to hear what they say
They are here to stay and stare those there astray
Melting under the heat like they made of clay
There existing but not in this form
Bit as a gnome standing on the giant horn
Legions of Angels dangle from the tail
Its not a fairy tale says the voice
Of a sibling that play with toys
That possess Magical powers present in the grandest of tower
Awaiting armageddon to come in the darkest of hour
Growing on the land like a flower
Now growing feet and making the course
It was made for the worse and its so Sacred its cirse
Not just taking the purse but the lifeforce that escape from the pores
Of a blazing core, The beast unleashes the strangest of roar
A trail for the bore come play in the floor
All types of vanities decorating for sure
The price you pay for not taking the poor
Into your hands to take whats there and make it some more
Speak in the language of the people in anguish
That are trying to cause tbe Spirit to vanish
Into a plane of existence completely outlandish
A dream that is lavish now becoming reality
Don`t complain we all know its insanity
Overblown profanity a cloned abnormality
Incrementing in size to the point its unstoppable
A win against it is highly improbable when there is no obstacle
The stage is phenomenal in all ways its Demonical
Mourning all the fallen entities that awaken to slaughter enemies
In Godly premises silenty building momentum for the spectace
The felon is detestable but a touch in the heart
Can cause a pulse in the ark where they worship the dark
Reviving the thirst you invoked it atlast now transport to the past
Your soul and reverse the present time
Coming from a peasant mind that faced battles of several kind
Complex with rhyme is the mental patient on eternal displacement
Nice raps brother you are like no other

Lyriscologist
02-21-2018, 09:37 PM
nice imagery eeg..
but yoyo,
the Age of Delusion has,
Made us Illucid, and the,
State of the Union is a..
Stage of Illusion..!
its a Game that their Using just to Sway our Influence,
and Playing us Music that's Making us Stupid.. !
HAARP Rays'll be Shooting and they've Made some Improvements
so our Brains have been Ruined With the Way that they've Tuned It!
their, Spraying Pollutants that Stay Undiluted and..
Planes will Exclude It in a Way thats Confusing, they’re..!
Making our Foods With the Dangers Included..
..Creations from Using the Strains of a Mutant!
were, Facing a Movement of a Nation's Intrusion, cuz,
“Change" was a "Tool", obama's Made to Re-Use It,
yo! Pain is a Nuisance so lets Pray that we Lose It,
but were made to be slaves to the Bank Institutions!
and..
Invasions are Useless, its just Endangering Units, but..
....A Revolution is the Blatant Solution!!

eezee

ACTIVATE SELF
02-24-2018, 07:13 PM
yo,
where these kats at to Match my Last Moves,
Smash the Wack Crews..
Hand me Daps Too or go Back to Rap School..

Man, L, that shit sounds old school as fuck, bruh. But, it's also kind of funny and perfectly worded. I dig it.

i aint Grabbing my Pants to Flash some Dance Moves,
..with hands on my nuts like a Pack of Cashews..

LOL You a fool, bro. But, your timing is on point. Your wording … your flow … both in the pocket.

my Ink is an Art like I'm Branding Tattoos,
I'll Rip you Apart going Track for Track Dude!
if you dont Have the Haps? well, ..you Can Advance Too,
just Have a Plan..
Master That and Pass the Bad News,
That's a Fact..!
..the Bads we Have Entraps our Past in Back Rooms,
but the Tracks we Have Exactly Mapped a Path Through..
(..And we Have Proof!)

Eh, the scheme (as always) was solid. But this section was all flow. There wasn't much substance or food for thought to digest. The tattoo line was cool. The rest was filler. I was hoping the "have a plan … master that" part was going to lead to something profound. Like a life gem or jewel. But it didn't. Which kind of disappointed me.

my Aftermath'll make the Planet Crack in Half Too!
while I'm Packing up some Hash then Blasting Past the Half Moon,

Dope.

That's True!
you'd never Beat the Bone, See me Fold or Speak a Flow Wack,

That's a clever play on the whole BTNH and Wack 100 beef. I doubt most will catch the references or understand the context in which they were used; but (not so) ironically I was watching something on YouTube about it just the other day.

I'mma Beast who Grows to Peaks Unknown, I've Reached the Snow Caps..
got the Deepest Poems, Reaping Souls.. you People Know That..!
start Receiving Blows, then Retreat and Hope to Keep a Close Stance,
No Chance!
to Compete with Bone.. Believe in Hope and See your Own Path,
but Keep it Dope.. I'm Defeating Hoes with Free's or Note Pads,
Completely Though.. you'd Need to Clone Emcees with Pro Stats
cuz I'm not an Easy Foe.. Speech Explodes to Eat your Whole Camp!

The flow is crazy. The swagger is evident. I dig the self hype and the shit talk. However, I think you might have missed a golden opportunity to throw in an Easy E pun. Especially considering his connection to Bone and the West Coast. I say that because you threw the word "Easy" in the scheme, but I'm not sure if it's suppose to be an entendre or not, Nonetheless, this section is still tight.

just Know THAT!
y'all Rhyming Poor!
while I was Born Rapping,
either Try to Form your Mind some More or Find the Door Slamming!
I'll, Slide a Sword Inside your Corpse til I get Bored At It...
you'll, Find the Floor when I get Your, Spinal cord Crackin'!
(Bitch!)
..I am Lord..!
Disguised a Normal Guy Reborn Frantic,
to Guide this Sport!
so Write and Score your Final Four Brackets!
..I've Explored the Lines you Force..
no Time for Your Antics..!
cuz I can ..
Lighten Your Status with the Slightest War Tactics!
eezee

Well, at this point, I don't think anyone should be questioning you multi stacking ability. You're dope with the flex. We might need to do a sparing session/collab sometime in the near future. With that said, this was another really fun and entertaining read from you.

OAN. Check this link whenever you can (Crack The Mic! (http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=126399)), I think you might dig it.

Stay solid, L. Peace.

CopyPat
02-25-2018, 02:28 AM
Your style is interesting to me..i like it but i kinda don't... it's weird. I can definitely appreciate what you're doing. It seems like you came from a battling background?? At least that's how your style comes across anyways. Your multi syllable scheming is really great. And trust me i like that shit big time. But as complex as that is, the actual vocab you use is honestly pretty weak man. I Think at this point you obviously have a great grasp of flowing etc, but it would be infinitely better if you could start incorporating some better words in your material man. Yes you're rhyming like 8 syllables or whatever but it's kinda just boring and really not THAT complex.. all the words you used are like preschool when you have a degree in scheming.. feel me?? Not saying now you gotta turn around and start pulling random obscure words from the dictionary but you need to challenge yourself man. It would be sooo much more enjoyable for your audience. Use turns of phrase, figures of speech etc, use proper names of people places and things. It'll be way more fun for you too!!

Eŋg
03-04-2018, 09:54 PM
you remind me of me when i was about 17 and learned multis but tbh, back then, i never wrote something as clever as 'hands on my nuts like a pack of cashews' - you also probably rhyme more consistently than i did 10 years ago, too.

some throwbacks should get thrown back, though.

Lyriscologist
05-19-2018, 03:06 PM
appreciate the time and feedback fellas, copy, I def feel you bro, will keep that in mind for sure, thanks for your honesty

Eŋg
05-20-2018, 05:45 PM
i was being flippant, i think. sorry.

Exis
05-24-2018, 10:41 PM
I liked it...think your content is kinda basic, but havin' said that so is mine lol.It def does have an ol' school vibe to it...which was great imo...it's refreshin' to read different styles of text, I guess that's what makes printed out verses so appealin' to me.

Stay doin' you fam.

Mr. J
06-04-2018, 02:39 AM
Darker Ego, one more outburst & Im slapping a fine on your head bruh.
I dont know how to do it yet, but Ill figure it out you cornball...


Hey man, the guy that wrote this

I thought this was dope...you got some smooth flows son.
the wording was on point and the back & forth transitioning was slick
overall this was a great piece to just enjoy imo.
random indeed but worth the read.

Pharaohs Army
06-08-2018, 07:07 PM
Your good at rhyming multi's. But I agree with CopyPat you need some better words.

Some of your phrasing is very basic and just trying to complete a rhyme without making sense.

That being said you can continue a scheme for quite a while so I can see your talents.