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Orc
03-12-2018, 01:05 PM
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Profit Schadenfreude

Profit
03-12-2018, 02:41 PM
Check, how's 12-14 sound?

Schadenfreude
03-12-2018, 02:48 PM
S'getit.

Schadenfreude
03-14-2018, 05:32 PM
16 Look..

Swear yo verses straight hot fire, but they mild as shit,
only got L’s for putting that em together, thats an allen wrench.
Shove the pistol in your face to get yo bravado in check
a quick press’ll have ya switching type after the auto-correct.
I’ll simply state yo boring bars not worth quoting, tool..
only reason ppl even read yo battle's due to the voting rule.
Robotic bars won't get u far w/o style, swagger or pull,
a drunk white tavern slut.. you love riding that mechanical bull.
Through out the mag they tried to hype ya calm bombs
& could only show a couple love, you've been writing RomComs.
S’in my pocket, dubs a gimme, wasting rhymes, stop it,
guaranteed every last vote in this charity battle’s a non-Profit.
Bitch I’m up at a level you haven’t the chance to match
free parking - I will body u on the spot, this is your handicap.
Mfer my record clearly shows I put bodies into caskets,
it's an obvious loss Prophecy, he should’ve known this’d happen.

..BODY.

Profit
03-14-2018, 06:17 PM
I got luv fa every writer, but in battle u can trust I'll off um w/a ratchet
So s'no hate when I throw Schade, in war it's a must I toss him in a casket
U clowned Bar fa cryin, that's cool cos I ain't denyin the guys fits
But when U lose u stay quiet fa weeks.... pussy u do all ur cryin in private
This text shits a hobby tho, right? Well that makes 2 of us son
But when I body u bruh, think party pooper, Im here to ruin the fun
U show up to all ya battles & drop weak, landin a worthless percentage
S'like hiring a reliable idiot, all u got going for u is perfect attendance
To act wild is funny, ur name plays r trash & ur wack style is bummy
u'll be the only faggit flippin profit & still be assed out of money
Proof u ain't got chips is in ya thot pic, that slop trick is a life waisted
So fuck sayin ya knots thick, when u score hoes that's not thick in the right places
Cheap sluts, even the homeless hit ya crib when u leave cuz
To them ya spots the headquarters, cos s'only 25 cent to get ya meat sucked
Most don't believe in this stuff,but I tell the future, hammers out, piece to ya mug
Think that's absurd clown then S'Raptors 1st round.. either way u'll get the heat or the bucks

Barcotic
03-15-2018, 01:28 AM
Swear yo verses straight hot fire, but they mild as shit,
only got L’s for putting that em together, thats an allen wrench.

dont think u meant to put "that em"... check ya bars b4 u drop or be confident ur oppnt is a bitch n takes forever, so u have time to notice n fix. otherwise this would have ben fire

Shove the pistol in your face to get yo bravado in check
a quick press’ll have ya switching type after the auto-correct.

pretty gd

I’ll simply state yo boring bars not worth quoting, tool..
only reason ppl even read yo battle's due to the voting rule.

stale, but it sort of hit still

Robotic bars won't get u far w/o style, swagger or pull,
a drunk white tavern slut.. you love riding that mechanical bull.

cool enough

Through out the mag they tried to hype ya calm bombs
& could only show a couple love, you've been writing RomComs.

nahh

S’in my pocket, dubs a gimme, wasting rhymes, stop it,
guaranteed every last vote in this charity battle’s a non-Profit.

dope

Bitch I’m up at a level you haven’t the chance to match
free parking - I will body u on the spot, this is your handicap.

couple minor wording issues, but dope concept

Mfer my record clearly shows I put bodies into caskets,
it's an obvious loss Prophecy, he should’ve known this’d happen.

not a great np

vs

I got luv fa every writer, but in battle u can trust I'll off um w/a ratchet
So s'no hate when I throw Schade, in war it's a must I toss him in a casket

not only is it a played np, but it's also not how u pronounce the first part of his name.. similar to using a car np on karaoke

U clowned Bar fa cryin, that's cool cos I ain't denyin the guys fits
But when U lose u stay quiet fa weeks.... pussy u do all ur cryin in private

simple, but it hit. altho i had a hard time giving "guys fits" a pass, this was a light hit

This text shits a hobby tho, right? Well that makes 2 of us son
But when I body u bruh, think party pooper, Im here to ruin the fun

ehh, lacked impact. felt like the concept needed something else

U show up to all ya battles & drop weak, landin a worthless percentage
S'like hiring a reliable idiot, all u got going for u is perfect attendance

decent

To act wild is funny, ur name plays r trash & ur wack style is bummy
u'll be the only faggit flippin profit & still be assed out of money

now this was fire, gd shit. more of this plz

Proof u ain't got chips is in ya thot pic, that slop trick is a life waisted
So fuck sayin ya knots thick, when u score hoes that's not thick in the right places

this was OK, couldve used some polishing to make better

Cheap sluts, even the homeless hit ya crib when u leave cuz
To them ya spots the headquarters, cos s'only 25 cent to get ya meat sucked

lolll nice

Most don't believe in this stuff,but I tell the future, hammers out, piece to ya mug
Think that's absurd clown then S'Raptors 1st round.. either way u'll get the heat or the bucks

whats weird is this concept is both mad played out annnd fresh at the same time. i can dig the current angle on it

so schad had
3 gd punches
3 jabs
& 2 misses

profit had
3 gd punches
3 jabs
& 2 misses

ffs, that didnt help
this is cloooooose

ima have to come back to it

hate to do it but ill have to re-read the battle a couple x and im tryna watch a show rn
dope match tho fellas, ill be back 100

EDIT
v/Schadenfreude
after few reads back, im soley basing this decision on oveall creativity & substance
this could def go either way, style preference IMO
matter of fact im shocked that the votes are so leaned to either 1 way or the other... i think its a lot closer than other battles this week, excluding bb & destro's
props to both, n congrats to whoever earns the shot

Saint
03-16-2018, 11:13 AM
I got luv fa every writer, but in battle u can trust I'll off um w/a ratchet
So s'no hate when I throw Schade, in war it's a must I toss him in a casket

-wording & pronounciation off

U clowned Bar fa cryin, that's cool cos I ain't denyin the guys fits
But when U lose u stay quiet fa weeks.... pussy u do all ur cryin in private

- eh barely imo.

This text shits a hobby tho, right? Well that makes 2 of us son
But when I body u bruh, think party pooper, Im here to ruin the fun

- eh wording again.

U show up to all ya battles & drop weak, landin a worthless percentage
S'like hiring a reliable idiot, all u got going for u is perfect attendance

- this was better

To act wild is funny, ur name plays r trash & ur wack style is bummy
u'll be the only faggit flippin profit & still be assed out of money

- Cool but self np.

Proof u ain't got chips is in ya thot pic, that slop trick is a life waisted
So fuck sayin ya knots thick, when u score hoes that's not thick in the right places

- ok observation but not clever.

Cheap sluts, even the homeless hit ya crib when u leave cuz
To them ya spots the headquarters, cos s'only 25 cent to get ya meat sucked

- this played but eh ok

Most don't believe in this stuff,but I tell the future, hammers out, piece to ya mug
Think that's absurd clown then S'Raptors 1st round.. either way u'll get the heat or the
bucks

- two older concepts...using both made it decent




Swear yo verses straight hot fire, but they mild as shit,
only got L’s for putting that em together, thats an allen wrench.

- ive seen u do this lol, it's coo

Shove the pistol in your face to get yo bravado in check
a quick press’ll have ya switching type after the auto-correct.

slick...wording gd

I’ll simply state yo boring bars not worth quoting, tool..
only reason ppl even read yo battle's due to the voting rule.

a lil bland imo, but relevant i guess.

Robotic bars won't get u far w/o style, swagger or pull,
a drunk white tavern slut.. you love riding that mechanical bull.

seen this b4....ok flip.

Through out the mag they tried to hype ya calm bombs
& could only show a couple love, you've been writing RomComs.

didnt feel it.

S’in my pocket, dubs a gimme, wasting rhymes, stop it,
guaranteed every last vote in this charity battle’s a non-Profit.

pretty good, lotb thus far imo

Bitch I’m up at a level you haven’t the chance to match
free parking - I will body u on the spot, this is your handicap.

Cool concept, not crazy bout the execution

Mfer my record clearly shows I put bodies into caskets,
it's an obvious loss Prophecy, he should’ve known this’d happen.

- decent np


V -- Schade. thought he got it w. better wrding & fresher lines, profit was aight but missed more imo.

Enbombz
03-16-2018, 11:24 AM
Shad- auto correct was okay, mechanical bull was an okay, closer was okay too. No real misses just no stand outs either this verse. Pretty clean as usual but seen better from you.

Profit- crying in private was cool, added out of money was okay, head quarters was meh to okay needed setting up better. Other than that wasn't feeling what was left over. Excution was up and down in this verse.

V/shad slightly more consistent.

DynamiCz
03-16-2018, 11:39 AM
Swear yo verses straight hot fire, but they mild as shit,
only got L’s for putting that em together, thats an allen wrench.

Nice

Shove the pistol in your face to get yo bravado in check
a quick press’ll have ya switching type after the auto-correct

Dope here

Robotic bars won't get u far w/o style, swagger or pull,
a drunk white tavern slut.. you love riding that mechanical bull

Lol funny, but nice

S’in my pocket, dubs a gimme, wasting rhymes, stop it,
guaranteed every last vote in this charity battle’s a non-Profit

Fiyaaaa!

Bitch I’m up at a level you haven’t the chance to match
free parking - I will body u on the spot, this is your handicap

Ok

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U clowned Bar fa cryin, that's cool cos I ain't denyin the guys fits
But when U lose u stay quiet fa weeks.... pussy u do all ur cryin in private

Nice personal

U show up to all ya battles & drop weak, landin a worthless percentage
S'like hiring a reliable idiot, all u got going for u is perfect attendance

Lol this was nice

To act wild is funny, ur name plays r trash & ur wack style is bummy
u'll be the only faggit flippin profit & still be assed out of money

Coo

Most don't believe in this stuff,but I tell the future, hammers out, piece to ya mug
Think that's absurd clown then S'Raptors 1st round.. either way u'll get the heat or the bucks

ok


Nice read from both of you! Good shit, I'm going with Schad on this one though. His punches were a little more well put together and less misses, none the less still a good read from both!

Vote-Schad

Alvin Karpis
03-17-2018, 01:08 AM
No..
Schad-boring verse, I expect at least some clever lines, but wtf?
Proft - I was feelin a few lines and you had the consistency, caught my attention
V/Profit

Cred
03-17-2018, 08:01 AM
Swear yo verses straight hot fire, but they mild as shit,
only got L’s for putting that em together, thats an allen wrench.
Seen u drop something similar before but cool
I’ll simply state yo boring bars not worth quoting, tool..
only reason ppl even read yo battle's due to the voting rule.
This was good
S’in my pocket, dubs a gimme, wasting rhymes, stop it,
guaranteed every last vote in this charity battle’s a non-Profit
Nice

vs

U show up to all ya battles & drop weak, landin a worthless percentage
S'like hiring a reliable idiot, all u got going for u is perfect attendance
Lol ok
To act wild is funny, ur name plays r trash & ur wack style is bummy
u'll be the only faggit flippin profit & still be assed out of money
Nice flip
Proof u ain't got chips is in ya thot pic, that slop trick is a life waisted
So fuck sayin ya knots thick, when u score hoes that's not thick in the right places
I liked this personally
Most don't believe in this stuff,but I tell the future, hammers out, piece to ya mug
Think that's absurd clown then S'Raptors 1st round.. either way u'll get the heat or the bucks
I fuck wit this closer


This battle was surprisingly good, especially not have reading a profit verse before I thought shad would for sure take it. Idk this jus wasn’t one of those shad verses that banged like they usually do, maybe took him light? anyways I was fuckin wit profits verse tbh, even that headquarters and crying in private were almost quotables. Good shit y’all but

Vote / Profit

Concrete
03-18-2018, 08:34 AM
Vote Schaden.

His verse way better worded and more effective as a whole, more direct attacks and overall a more entertaining read.
Profit had several potetential good ideas but was too wordy in most instances, I'm not a fan of long lines to get to some point. The 'flippin profit' was probably his best.

Letterman
03-18-2018, 12:27 PM
Shove the pistol in your face to get yo bravado in check
a quick press’ll have ya switching type after the auto-correct.
S’in my pocket, dubs a gimme, wasting rhymes, stop it,
guaranteed every last vote in this charity battle’s a non-Profit.
Mfer my record clearly shows I put bodies into caskets,
it's an obvious loss Prophecy, he should’ve known this’d happen.

Vs

If I had to be generous.. knot thick? Better wording could’ve helped but it was ok. I was feeling anything else really, like you had some cool concepts there but the execution on em weren’t great. I got Schad winning clearly

v/Schad

Destroyer
03-18-2018, 04:28 PM
This wasn’t close to me
Profit needs a lot of work on the delivery of concepts
Schad was ok obv not his best but he did enough
Prophecy, charity battle were dope
Profit’s bet was his self-name play, which I frown upon

V/schade