Gamble 2-3 vs Jabari Black 1-0 - GAMBLE WINS

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[Jabari Black]

Check

[Lyfzaa Gamble]

Check gl

[Jabari Black]

So we got Jae Borne aka Lyfzaa Gamble....

I’m wild for real. I’ll go to NY kick his door down, pointin a few sticks at em/
Wont even kill the nigga - just make him log on and vote on my 2trip battle/
Since y’all say I’m Nick James I’ll take Nick Carraway and whatever guns that lame has/
Then ride on Jae. Gatsby killin em. Cops won’t know who did it...they only found James’ Gats/
Ya bae’ll get smashed. I put a fist in her for Black Power after she sat on the wood/
Once she gag and lick the sack she take Black kids like defax in the hood/
Nigga you look like K-Fed - what the hell this clown gon’ do to me?/
Shotty and a 9 - I’ll air both n give u bucks after the mill...thats gratuity/
Mac-10 in the JACKet turn em Queen. Gun line King but u’ll scrap thinking ya boys’ll rush/
But a nasty hook’ll be my Ace in the hole cus my hands the best - royal flush/

[Lyfzaa Gamble]

Vs Jabari Black

I move sleek, ask Balor and The Bullet Club, my punch Too Sweet......
Im Fabolous with the hands, only it wont take me 7 swings to knock out your front 2 teeth!
I Buck Shots like Giannis, if u mention the best?......
I tell this bitch Jabari Parker ass in the back..with the other scrubs.. At the end of the bench.
With the hands I'm clever with sets, never the less always connect wit a left......
Facin me? Jabbin a tough position to get dropped in seconds...im like the McGregor of text!
Hes destine to feel the wrath of a God...Your trash immediatly have to just stop....
Blacklisted a bunch of unworthy attempts....just to suffer the same fate by the Admin after he dropped.

[Schadenfreude]

I’m wild for real. I’ll go to NY kick his door down, pointin a few sticks at em/
Wont even kill the nigga - just make him log on and vote on my 2trip battle/
Funny, but not an effective punch
Since y’all say I’m Nick James I’ll take Nick Carraway and whatever guns that lame has/
Then ride on Jae. Gatsby killin em. Cops won’t know who did it...they only found James’ Gats/
Too predictable & overly worded
Ya bae’ll get smashed. I put a fist in her for Black Power after she sat on the wood/
Once she gag and lick the sack she take Black kids like defax in the hood/
Similiar concepts have been done before. I remember having a DCFS bar a while ago
Nigga you look like K-Fed - what the hell this clown gon’ do to me?/
Shotty and a 9 - I’ll air both n give u bucks after the mill...thats gratuity/
Again decent, but it's been done before
Mac-10 in the JACKet turn em Queen. Gun line King but u’ll scrap thinking ya boys’ll rush/
But a nasty hook’ll be my Ace in the hole cus my hands the best - royal flush/
Poker card concepts most def have been done to death

versus


I move sleek, ask Balor and The Bullet Club, my punch Too Sweet......
Im Fabolous with the hands, only it wont take me 7 swings to knock out your front 2 teeth!
Good, but clean up your wording
I Buck Shots like Giannis, if u mention the best?......
I tell this bitch Jabari Parker ass in the back..with the other scrubs.. At the end of the bench.
Same as above, it's cool, but could've been crazy w/ more concise wording
With the hands I'm clever with sets, never the less always connect wit a left......
Facin me? Jabbin a tough position to get dropped in seconds...im like the McGregor of text!
Clever concept, but not quite harsh enough
Hes destine to feel the wrath of a God...Your trash immediatly have to just stop....
Blacklisted a bunch of unworthy attempts....just to suffer the same fate by the Admin after he dropped.
Naw subpar closer

Overall JB has to focus on fresher concepts, got to keep in mind that text has been around for 20+ years innumerable amount of bars, therefore you're not saying shit new lol. As for Gambe I liked your concept a lot, but that wording prattles on too much & takes away from the impact of potential dope punches. Comparing the two, even w/ the unpolished wording & one less bar, Gamble had more working for him, VOTE GAMBLE.

[Blue Bayou]

I’m wild for real. I’ll go to NY kick his door down, pointin a few sticks at em/
Wont even kill the nigga - just make him log on and vote on my 2trip battle/
nah, mehh puncha dn the multi is way off
Since y’all say I’m Nick James I’ll take Nick Carraway and whatever guns that lame has/
Then ride on Jae. Gatsby killin em. Cops won’t know who did it...they only found James’ Gats/
I did Gatsby w/p over 10 yrs ago so wasn't digging this personally
Ya bae’ll get smashed. I put a fist in her for Black Power after she sat on the wood/
Once she gag and lick the sack she take Black kids like defax in the hood/
mehh
Nigga you look like K-Fed - what the hell this clown gon’ do to me?/
Shotty and a 9 - I’ll air both n give u bucks after the mill...thats gratuity/
lol at k-fed, mill/meal def a bit of a stretch... this was okay
Mac-10 in the JACKet turn em Queen. Gun line King but u’ll scrap thinking ya boys’ll rush/
But a nasty hook’ll be my Ace in the hole cus my hands the best - royal flush/
played, even with the boxing reference

vs,

I move sleek, ask Balor and The Bullet Club, my punch Too Sweet......
Im Fabolous with the hands, only it wont take me 7 swings to knock out your front 2 teeth!
pretty dece
I Buck Shots like Giannis, if u mention the best?......
I tell this bitch Jabari Parker ass in the back..with the other scrubs.. At the end of the bench.
nice, like this nameplay
With the hands I'm clever with sets, never the less always connect wit a left......
Facin me? Jabbin a tough position to get dropped in seconds...im like the McGregor of
decent at best imo
Hes destine to feel the wrath of a God...Your trash immediatly have to just stop....
Blacklisted a bunch of unworthy attempts....just to suffer the same fate by the Admin after he dropped.
decent enough

Even with one less bar Gamble took this imo, less played material and Jabari Parker was lotb

Vote - Gamble

[Destroyer]

I got gamble here. Wasn’t feeling much at all from jabari black, closer probably read the best, but still been done.
Jabari Parker was dope from gamble and was enough to get him the win

V/gamble

[Concrete]

JB; 1, I dont get this at all, is voting in a 2trip battle considered a punishment or something?
2, okayish. 3, a dope idea that should have been directed more directly at your opponent. 4, Im clueless here :(. 5, decent tho ace in hole aint exactly fresh material.

Gamble; 1, ok opener. 2, decent. 3, given recent events I think you could have come up with a more relevant Connor line. 4, basically a long statement.


Both players have some neat concepts but shoulda worded em tighter, not a fan of
these stretched lines. Anyways, gamble got this with his 2 first bars.

[ill nik-A]

Gamble had the better verse. First two took it. JB work on your concepts