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big baby
04-11-2018, 05:06 PM
it's up for existential debate. whether or nots
we're here for a reason, or stranded here just to rot
leisurely lonesomes, sunrise kingdom unfolding
delicate flower, nuclei destined forever in forest
do or die sentiments. sediment ready to rise
blood pact suicide, toes in the sand in the tide
were only in focus when we start to succeed
congratulations/shaking hands to hands shaking in sleep
panic attack, borderline personality disorder
solace in silence. everyday a soldier is dying
PTSD from maturing too fast. i've been told to collide
with my demons. flashback, detachment paranoia. decide
what do with yourself, paranormal dishevelment
clash encounter to delusion like an asteroid belt
entering earth, atmospheric phenomena avoided like hell
poised to no end, with no end to foretell
such a pity. holy shit. shame we all have stories to tell
100 ears. nobody listens. pouring whiskey in wells
swirl it in the glass, little tornado cyclone, perhaps
we tell it with such hope, rehearsed, to speak it with ease
oh how we change for others -sleep with our demons for free
beelzebub pedigree. honeybee to a wasp
fur elise. Elysium waits with alyssum in her palm
this suggests to me, what i've known all along
kiss of death, pain is strength, literally everyy song
diet plan. exercise, what's your secret to looking your best?
don't eat for days, ha-ha. pause. i said it in jest
capricorn, libra, maelstrom pathogen, fetal position
battle ballistic, garrison mission. administer oil in my cannabis christen
cataclysmic mushroom smoke. cultured difference aside
there's more to living, so to speak, than living to die
unambiguous chameleon, dressed in camo fatigue
in his pavilion, that the big wolf blows at til he can barely breathe
grow in a melting pot, petri dish human experiment
give him truancies, periods of time where truth is empirical
hold me a second. let's grow apart, don't second guess it
stare at me like a tornado looks at tulsa and edmond
then

Candy
04-12-2018, 02:15 AM
stare at me was nice,
in rhymes out in connection was tight good alround piece..

"nuclei" nice
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stride/strive ins/ide sleep

d-ee-mona

succeed
congratulations/shaking hands to hands shaking in sleep

pretty impressive keep it up..

Ghost1
04-12-2018, 01:19 PM
say one more thing u bootleg robranda ONE MORE THING

Exis
04-17-2018, 09:45 AM
kiss of death, pain is strength, literally everyy song
diet plan. exercise, what's your secret to looking your best?
don't eat for days, ha-ha. pause. i said it in jest
capricorn, libra, maelstrom pathogen, fetal position
battle ballistic, garrison mission. administer oil in my cannabis christen

Lol...Dope.

Saint
04-17-2018, 11:59 AM
I liked this.

NYCSPITZ
04-20-2018, 08:15 PM
Very good writing here

ACTIVATE SELF
04-21-2018, 01:39 AM
Tight work.

2tripple0
04-26-2018, 07:02 PM
Roight this wasnt going anywhere you didnt actually make sense of anything..... you need to focus more on what your trying to write instead of trying to impress people like you could rhyme... or have sumn interesting to say which you presented i guess but i didnt get half of it... try coming back to reality whats actually happening in the story but whatever your just a twerp your not actually doing anything different to anyone else reading the story like people reading aint actually writing the story its ypur decision your just writing it....

Eŋg
05-20-2018, 05:55 PM
those first 8 lines are kind of brilliant. i didn't enjoy the rest as much, because you set me, as a reader, up for a sheer drop, but that's one way of being victim to your own success. alyssum in her palms was pretty.

big baby
05-21-2018, 07:44 PM
those first 8 lines are kind of brilliant. i didn't enjoy the rest as much, because you set me, as a reader, up for a sheer drop, but that's one way of being victim to your own success. alyssum in her palms was pretty.

i enjoy eng feed, most of the time. these are one of those times. i apologize for not living up to a standard i set. i'll definitely revisit this comment later and not be so selfish in my laziness. toodles

big baby
05-21-2018, 07:44 PM
nonsarcasm

Pharaohs Army
06-08-2018, 12:52 AM
capricorn, libra, maelstrom pathogen, fetal position
battle ballistic, garrison mission. administer oil in my cannabis christen
cataclysmic mushroom smoke. cultured difference aside
there's more to living, so to speak, than living to die
unambiguous chameleon, dressed in camo fatigue
in his pavilion, that the big wolf blows at til he can barely breathe
grow in a melting pot, petri dish human experiment
give him truancies, periods of time where truth is empirical
hold me a second. let's grow apart, don't second guess it
stare at me like a tornado looks at tulsa and edmond
then

I'm sorry to ask you this BB but what in the actual fuck does this stuff mean?

big baby
06-09-2018, 09:03 AM
idk

veritas
06-09-2018, 02:04 PM
Enjoyable. Thank you.

Lenox
06-09-2018, 03:37 PM
Dope

Mediocrity
06-13-2018, 12:03 AM
I’ve admittedly went and lurked on some of your past pieces because your style is interesting to me and I can’t figure it out, there’s a select few other boarders who’s writing style intrigues me as well. Anyways, I really wish I could hear this instead of reading it because I can never catch a flow, or maybe there isn’t one? Idk but I enjoy your content a lot

Vapeo
06-16-2018, 07:07 PM
"don't eat for days, ha-ha. pause. i said it in jest
capricorn, libra, maelstrom pathogen, fetal position
battle ballistic, garrison mission. administer oil in my cannabis christen
cataclysmic mushroom smoke. cultured difference aside
there's more to living, so to speak, than living to die "

insane,,,,,

Vapeo
06-19-2018, 08:21 PM
oh how we charge?(change) for others- sleep with our demons for free?

or is the change there intentional?