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ACTIVATE SELF
04-28-2018, 11:30 AM
I woke up
stuck inside a construct.
Dumbfounded
by my surroundings
and awestruck.
What the fuck was going on?
Why was I so conscious and self-aware?
The answer?
It wasn't clear.
The logic?
Just wasn't there.
But honest
I didn't care.
I promise
I wasn't scared.
No cautions
or mental fears.
My problems
throughout the years?
My spirit was unprepared.
My ego was in control.
A product of social code
to mold me into a drone.

Since Moses's holy stones
and Romulus founded Rome
as old as the catacombs
that keep the scattered bones
of priest whom mattered most
hide secrets they never told.
Like keys to free my soul.
The reason that I exist?
My piece completes the whole.
Can teach me how to think
but wisdom is what I know.

Instinctively from the go
like water my knowledge flows.
It's khemistry can explode.
Seducing my temporal lobe
so memories will unclothe.
Exposing the bitter ghosts
of misery in the folds.

"remember me when I'm gone..."

If mentally I elope
and enter the Astral Zone
to spiritually just atone
for hoping their theories hold.
Neglecting my kundalini
accepting their isotopes.
Investing in modern homes
while skippin the rabbit holes.
If Alice is still alive
the Hatter is not alone.
...nope.

Sammy
04-28-2018, 12:01 PM
dope.

technically sound. i fucks with the approach, tho. got the vibe of a flex piece while treading the self-consciousness theme that's so prevalent in much of your work.

the ending was the highlight to me. keep scribing, pawtna.

ACTIVATE SELF
08-26-2018, 11:46 PM
1x

Exis
08-27-2018, 01:12 AM
I got you breathren, I'll hit you up with some comments when I get a moment fam...word is bond.

ACTIVATE SELF
08-27-2018, 11:49 AM
No worries, Ex. I'm in the mist of revamping it.

Exis
08-27-2018, 11:18 PM
Really came back & shit vanished lol...

ACTIVATE SELF
08-28-2018, 12:34 AM
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Exis
08-28-2018, 01:04 AM
Lol...I love the openin' stanza, really painted a picture there.Imagery as a whole is dope (as with all your pieces) & really like how your so Witty but ain't Witty...Idk what you actually edited as it disappeared, but I like what I just read fam...that Moses section was raw imo.

Stay droppin' bombs my friend.