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Natural
08-24-2013, 03:18 AM
These Internet geeks like to dishonor my literary piece
They try to run it into the obituary, I'm invincible freaks
My verses have purpose at least, all of ya worship me
Subliminal message? Most certainly i'm converting ya
Your becoming a fan with every damn word I'm serving ya
Any previous preconceived plan was just murdered brah
You obviously have heard of me asserting my skills verbally
Herdaling syllables at terminal speeds, I germinate steeze
Divert the hate, turn it into hurt and aim it at your knees
Cuz if your coming at me your playing jaws in merky waters
Why bother? If you've seen the movie you'd know I slaughter
Choppin emcees into mince meat, ending careers quickly
I'll be the goat to live on forever, I boast my flow is sickly
Oh? This bragadocio ish isn't a perfect fit to your standards?
Where are my manners? Fuck you. I think I can manage
Half of you giving advice and can't even use a mic to advantage

Defy Gravity
08-24-2013, 08:01 PM
These Internet geeks like to dishonor
my literary piece
They try to run it into the obituary,
I'm invincible freaks



good flow. are you speaking on certain people?



My verses have purpose at least, all
of ya worship me
Subliminal message? Most certainly
i'm converting ya
Your becoming a fan with every damn
word I'm serving ya



worship doesnt go with this and makes the previous line stretched. the rest is average



Any previous preconceived plan was
just murdered brah


I see you flowing every three lines



You obviously have heard of me
asserting my skills verbally
Herdaling syllables at terminal
speeds, I germinate steeze
Divert the hate, turn it into hurt and
aim it at your knees



cool flow the lines wasn't all that





Cuz if your coming at me your playing
jaws in merky waters
Why bother? If you've seen the movie
you'd know I slaughter


average





Choppin emcees into mince meat,
ending careers quickly
I'll be the goat to live on forever, I
boast my flow is sickly



back to two line flowing




Oh? This bragadocio ish isn't a
perfect fit to your standards?
Where are my manners? Fuck you. I
think I can manage
Half of you giving advice and can't
even use a mic to advantage




average drop. not bad but not horrible

YDK
08-26-2013, 04:17 AM
This was cool man not the best I've seen from you but had some killer flow at times. The punches were decent but could have been worded a little better for more impact, other than that though I liked it, had a fuck you if you ain't feeling me vibe which I always appreciate lol good shit my dude

Geno
08-26-2013, 09:15 PM
ive seen better from you.
for a bragadocio piece, wasnt very awwing
im not convinced. start writing more, you were better before the nomads dissapeared