Guardian Angel

[Dragon]

I am miraculous, a christian at birth - with a vision of earth
A decision of worth, Wisdom of Solomon, dismissing a curse
Making submissive a fiend, with the gracious I gleam
I am sedated and sheik, turning the tables in every situation I be
I am a guardian Angel, securing my family with gleam and miracle
I take down every seer in my path, for I am spiritual
I have the Holy Spirit, and I will always be a protector
Taking down every bad entity, destroying the center
I am the son of two fathers, influenced by religious martyrs
I am a good spirit, using my blood to give water
I am a disciple, using the Bible's teachings for miraculous teaching's
I am a good person, admiring the Apple of Eden

[Eŋg]

post more pieces please

[veritas]

Post more. Excellent.

[Dragon]

Of course I'll post more, you post less. You're on a message board, and you troll. Go away.

[Eŋg]

i am yomi, nigga.

you're kuwabara.

jesus loves togashi!

[PancakeBrah]

Almost all of the lines/thought in your pieces start with I, my, me. Gets tiring.

[Pharaohs Army]

Making submissive a fiend, with the gracious I gleam


What the hell does this mean?

[dead man]

Almost all of the lines/thought in your pieces start with I, my, me. Gets tiring.
yeah, it's a lot. very redundant even if the subsequent content is interesting. that self-centric energy sort of loses the reader after a bit. structural variety. try playing with different "beats" and rhythms in your language. you'll find it will begin to sound a bit more musical, in an odd way. more textural.

thanks

[veritas]

Of course I'll post more, you post less. You're on a message board, and you troll. Go away.

Interesting response. I never troll. I will keep watching you. Carry on.