View Full Version : Week 10: DMS (4-2) vs. Viper (4-1) - VIPER WINS
For Battling
08-20-2018, 06:14 PM
COMPLETE RULE THREAD:
http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=128411
IMPORTANT RULES:
- No biting
- No swaying
- No recycling
- No feeding
MUST VOTE ON ATLEAST 4 BATTLES
PUNCHES DUE BY FRIDAY
VOTING ENDS SUNDAY
NEW MATCHUPS UP BY SUNDAY NIGHT
DMS Viper
Viper
08-21-2018, 06:36 AM
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I find him when he’s still asleep if he wanna beef at night, this man is dead
He’ll feel the heat then he gonna see the light, bitch I locked you in a tannin’ bed
Viper
08-22-2018, 07:17 PM
ur nothin less den wack. run up on u n I’m totin’ gats
forever strapped, then I’m lettin a 9 bang on ur hip like a spoiled brat
For Battling
08-23-2018, 12:20 PM
DMS - decent punch here, I like th concept but typically you’ll have your eyes closed or have some type of eye coverings over your eyes in a tanning bed so you won’t see the light...decent though
-viper - pretty cool punch here, more swag than anything but it was worded pretty good and did the job imo.
Vote Viper
DynamiCz
08-23-2018, 12:27 PM
I find him when he’s still asleep if he wanna beef at night, this man is dead
He’ll feel the heat then he gonna see the light, bitch I locked you in a tannin’ bed
Damn this is nice, the wording a little choppy and could be better! I think Flow had a tannin bed line or something similar that was dope. The concept still not that played in my eyes tho. Niceeee
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ur nothin less den wack. run up on u n I’m totin’ gats
forever strapped, then I’m lettin a 9 bang on ur hip like a spoiled brat
Lmao....Idk who under this alias, but this line was dope. Worded just right and it hit for me. Good shit!
Props, both came rather good here, but I got Viper...His bar was fresh to me and the execution was simple, but rather dope!
V-Viper
Have to say, Vipers bar is dope... DMS wasn't that bad but Viper's was just more effective. His simile provided nice imagery, man lol...
Props.
v/Viper
Ghost1
08-24-2018, 09:17 AM
why would u lock someone in a tanning bed
dms fucking idiot
v viper
For Battling
08-24-2018, 10:20 AM
8-0 Viper
Needs more votes.
Ghost1 Amen DynamiCz Plot Jabari Black BodySnatcher DMS Killing Spree Destroyer Chyeahhh!!! Cashius Big Bolo Dynomight Flow Blue Bayou Twodrop MMLP Ryno John Dillinger bleak Unfukwitable
Blue Bayou
08-24-2018, 10:49 AM
I truly feel like DMS would've won this with different wording, but the 'bitch I locked you in a tanning bed' ruined it ... even "like I locked you" could've worked as at that point it's a simile
Viper the concept is cool but the execution I'm not a fan off... bang of your hipe implies your shooting him in the hip & it's not very effective as an attack line imo... the idea was fresh tho
Overall I've got viper here
Tanning bed been done recently. Plus it didn't sting enough, wording issues. However I think you got talent. Keep that style an you'll go far, just work on wording for a harsher execution.
Viper was cool. Another creative gun bar. Had a few this week tbf.
Vote viper
Jabari Black
08-25-2018, 02:16 PM
DMS is very clever and can actually rap imo. Unfortunately, you came light here. Flow and rhyme scheme was good. Tanning bed was basic and heat/tanning bed flips have been done a good bit. ‘See the light’ made the punch better but still pretty light to me.
Lol Viper this was pretty good. 9 bang on hips /spoiled brat is pretty nice. Shooting him in the hip is a weird though and takes away a bit. There’s just no reason to be aiming at anyone’s hip. Personally think you should have changed the word to say bang off your own hip (like shooting from your hip) or something. Punch still landed though and I got your taking this one.
Mvgt viper
Witty
08-25-2018, 07:56 PM
Yeah I don't remember who said it but even saying 'like' instead of 'bitch' would have made this a significantly better punch. Wording is subtle and can make or break your bars. I kinda liked the concept but it was very poorly executed.
Vipers bar is ok to me...the imagery is what makes it work...the more you think about it, the less sense it makes...but it's ok.
Vote Viper.
For Battling
08-25-2018, 07:59 PM
Viper Wins 8-0
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