Week 10: Witty (2-0) vs. Dynomight (1-0) - WITTY WINS VIA NS

[For Battling]

COMPLETE RULE THREAD:
http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=128411


IMPORTANT RULES:
- No biting
- No swaying
- No recycling
- No feeding


MUST VOTE ON ATLEAST 4 BATTLES


PUNCHES DUE BY FRIDAY
VOTING ENDS SUNDAY
NEW MATCHUPS UP BY SUNDAY NIGHT

Witty Dynomight

[Witty]

Hi.

[Witty]

It's movie time.

This pistol a Predator, it separates flesh from bone...leave ur skeletal mesh exposed
Nah fuck that it's an Alien...n these babies inside'll make your faggot lil chest explode

[For Battling]

Witty Wins via no show

OPEN FOR FEED

[Flow]

Set up made this. Without this would of been been a miss. However the set up here worked the angle in well an this was a fresh gun bar. Props. An glad to see your actively battling again foxy

[For Battling]

Witty that setup was fresh af, excellent wording, flow, and execution. However I think you kinda cagged it with your second line. Felt rushed and incomplete or not done to its full potential.

[Cashius]

Loved the scheme and the imagery. Wasn’t a whole lot going on as far as the actual concept for me. I would’ve tried to find a different tie in than “babies”. I know what you’re referring to, I just think you could’ve taken a different route with the concept. Still, given all that it was a well written bar.

[Plot]

Nice bar Witty the flow and rhymes were great, subject matter was a little played and the 'babies' word felt a little off. It didnt quite work like that either, the eggs had the face-huggers that impregated the aliens so... still it was cool