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Fig
01-22-2013, 12:29 AM
Brain scattered as a haitian house of cards, trajectory
out of entropy's shooting him to the target...
...Hands burn from firearm that he's armed with, down the street
he's scheming a robbery on the market...
Losing grip, but never when it comes to Wesson he's flexin
Sweating bullets, releasing tension in head and in weapon
Rushes counter like adrenaline when ending impends
Facing the witnesses, as they, face an imminent end
Tells em toss it in the burlap or look last in dirt nap
the workers moving skirmish frantic searching for a firm stack
Takes it then he spurts, fast, out of the premises
Hides the evidence through fire. Puts to ashes his "work" mask.
he learned fast, after many years and identities
the fire of his motive will blind him to all the penalties.
Binds him to idle specialties; aquire money stealthily.
Doesn't bite morality, fuck it, he has a mouth to feed
His own devoured seed. A man, driven to shambles
tryna link his son to freedom through societies shackles
There's a hunger in his kid, so he's willing to mad steal,
and act real, past the starving vision he can't fill...
To reach his sky of dreams, he's gotta tell em put em up
Inspirirations in his child's eyes; he doesn't look enough.
Makes a crooked run, tryna put his on a straight path
So weigh the situation, who's the criminal this case...Class?

Bodey
01-22-2013, 01:16 AM
he learned fast, after many years and identities
the fire of his motive will blind him to all the penalties.
Binds him to idle specialties; aquire money stealthily.
Doesn't bite morality, fuck it, he has a mouth to feed
His own devoured seed. A man, driven to shambles
tryna link his son to freedom through societies shackles
There's a hunger in his kid, so he's willing to mad steal,
and act real, past the starving vision he can't fill...
To reach his sky of dreams, he's gotta tell em put em up
Inspirirations in his child's eyes; he doesn't look enough.
Makes a crooked run, tryna put his on a straight path
So weigh the situation, who's the criminal this case...Class?

damn that whole section captivated me for some reason. you have a way of creating an image with the story so i enjoyed that. guess this wasnt about the main guy after all. interesting point of view too. nice read

Camp Bell
01-22-2013, 05:15 AM
this was very interesting due to the fact, it just seemed like an ordinary piece until the end when the question is posed to the "class"....which made this extra dope. Its a bit different from the usual, rhyme/flow heavy verses associated with OM. Good Shit.

Split
01-22-2013, 07:12 PM
Makes a crooked run, tryna put his on a straight path
So weigh the situation, who's the criminal this case...Class?

thought that bar was cool. pretty okay story. scheming was all kinds of weird, like especially the one word comma breaks. keep up