Incredible vs Ryno - RYNO WINS

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[Ryno]

Yayter...

I crew w/ shooters, raise the ruger, dawg we lettin’ off shots at this nerd
My teams unstoppable once I bring the 5th out like a fkn boogie cousins return
Hit ya block w/ the k, lil nigga ur the target but i'll hit ya team gladly
When the bullets ‘stray, cats’ in ya click'll scramble all throughout the alley
Wifey said ya stroke is horrid, im floored, ya skills in bed get no respect
Heard ya bitch can’t 'standpipe', but I’ve got an extension that’ll gladly get her wet
Picture this, for the cash ill hit ya team w/ the clip, dumpin’ at all foes
I’ll snap & spread ya faces in a flash... dawg this ain’t ur typical hood pose
Im sick when im bussin, say a word & ill end ya life like its nothin’
Start duckin’! Or get the arm raised to ya mouth like u were coughin in public

the writers block is over...

[Incredible]

Rynos fat ass loves fast food, save my bullets for another head
I'll just wait for the chik-fil-a owner to pouch ur ass instead
Fgt hiding under an alias hoping we all say nice raps man
You ain't ready for war of the past fam, I got troops ready &&& I'm not a clash fan
Saw you edited out two bars, hopefully I don't dq'd for feeding
I got two bars with the handle at the end, that how I make the score evened
Go ahead let out that aggression, Vent ur a la-who-s-er, ain't shit ur leading
A movie star, we saw you birthed a Ace, but u suck more than the tit ur squeezing
Come on man beat inc? Naw not this alias rookie, go sit down &&& eat a cookie
Ur Mahomes I'm Brady so if I'm doing my final stretch guess who gettin the lookey

[Sinacog]

Ryno -

I crew w/ shooters, raise the ruger, dawg we lettin’ off shots at this nerd
My teams unstoppable once I bring the 5th out like a fkn boogie cousins return

This was a okay bar..needs to a bit better in ways..but it's alright..

Hit ya block w/ the k, lil nigga ur the target but i'll hit ya team gladly
When the bullets ‘stray, cats’ in ya click'll scramble all throughout the alley

lmao, this was okay..was a good bar..niice..

Wifey said ya stroke is horrid, im floored, ya skills in bed get no respect
Heard ya bitch can’t 'standpipe', but I’ve got an extension that’ll gladly get her wet

lol..needs to better here..but its okay..i suppose..

Picture this, for the cash ill hit ya team w/ the clip, dumpin’ at all foes
I’ll snap & spread ya faces in a flash... dawg this ain’t ur typical hood pose

lol..this was okay..but really..it could be a bit better..

Im sick when im bussin, say a word & ill end ya life like its nothin’
Start duckin’! Or get the arm raised to ya mouth like u were coughin in public

lmao,,your best bar..okay..niice one..

Incredible -

Rynos fat ass loves fast food, save my bullets for another head
I'll just wait for the chik-fil-a owner to pouch ur ass instead

What in the world..this wasn't too good..i mean..lol..it was alright..

Fgt hiding under an alias hoping we all say nice raps man
You ain't ready for war of the past fam, I got troops ready &&& I'm not a clash fan

this reads too statement-ish..needs to be better in ways..

Saw you edited out two bars, hopefully I don't dq'd for feeding
I got two bars with the handle at the end, that how I make the score evened

lol..needs something more..i suppose..its okay..


Go ahead let out that aggression, Vent ur a la-who-s-er, ain't shit ur leading
A movie star, we saw you birthed a Ace, but u suck more than the tit ur squeezing

lol..i suppose..needs something more as-well..

Come on man beat inc? Naw not this alias rookie, go sit down &&& eat a cookie
Ur Mahomes I'm Brady so if I'm doing my final stretch guess who gettin the lookey

lol..what in the world..needs something better...

overall - this was a okay battle..but ryno clearly has the experience advantage here or something..lol..he gets the win..better punches..okay..lol..niice one..decent battle..

lol..

v/ ryno

[Jabari Black]

I crew w/ shooters, raise the ruger, dawg we lettin’ off shots at this nerd
My teams unstoppable once I bring the 5th out like a fkn boogie cousins return

(Yep I like this. Flowed well. Not a crazy flip but you crafted the punch well)

Hit ya block w/ the k, lil nigga ur the target but i'll hit ya team gladly
When the bullets ‘stray, cats’ in ya click'll scramble all throughout the alley

(The stray cats flip was cool but it’s light. You needed more to tie in to this for it to really land. Overall okay)

Wifey said ya stroke is horrid, im floored, ya skills in bed get no respect
Heard ya bitch can’t 'standpipe', but I’ve got an extension that’ll gladly get her wet

(This is dope. I like the stand pipe flip. Good wording in the set up - set this punch up well. The punch was worded even better. Extensions get her wet is clever and the double meaning is perfect. Only critique is you prob coulda did something small in the set up to let folks know you were bout to transition the punch to a gun bar cus it took a second for this to click. This is very nice though)

Picture this, for the cash ill hit ya team w/ the clip, dumpin’ at all foes
I’ll snap & spread ya faces in a flash... dawg this ain’t ur typical hood pose

(This one was somewhere between a miss and okay to me. The pic/flash concept is overused and pretty elementary imo. I might be missing the punch but spread your faces in a flash is an awkward phrase. Your writing is polished though and makes this enjoyable even though the punch didn’t land)

Im sick when im bussin, say a word & ill end ya life like its nothin’
Start duckin’! Or get the arm raised to ya mouth like u were coughin in public

(Haha I’m surprised I haven’t heard this before. I like it. Worded crisp. Sick when I’m bussing a good tie in. Nice)



Rynos fat ass loves fast food, save my bullets for another head
I'll just wait for the chik-fil-a owner to pouch ur ass instead

(Lol here we go. Come on bruh)

Fgt hiding under an alias hoping we all say nice raps man
You ain't ready for war of the past fam, I got troops ready &&& I'm not a clash fan

(This woulda been good if his name was Clash. From my knowledge it isn’t though so this was pretty much a statement bar. I think it’s the right angle to take but you didn’t do anything with it)

Saw you edited out two bars, hopefully I don't dq'd for feeding
I got two bars with the handle at the end, that how I make the score evened

(This was almost good. Not a bad concept but the execution wasn’t there. Not sure where you were trying to go with “bars” but you needed something that works for the double meaning. You’d have to paint that picture in the set up but you coulda flipped it like a crowbar with a taped handle or something but it doesn’t work with how you used it. Good attempt but this missed)

Go ahead let out that aggression, Vent ur a la-who-s-er, ain't shit ur leading
A movie star, we saw you birthed a Ace, but u suck more than the tit ur squeezing

(This was another good attempt but the execution is really bad. Not sure why you stretched out loser like that - it just doesn’t help the punch at all. I see what you were going for with the word play but this was really just a mess from start to finish. Not a bad concept though)

Come on man beat inc? Naw not this alias rookie, go sit down &&& eat a cookie
Ur Mahomes I'm Brady so if I'm doing my final stretch guess who gettin the lookey

(Lol you started and ended on the same note. This was bad)


Rhyno takes this easily and this is borderline a body if we being honest. Not to be an asshole by Rhyno’s standpipe line was better than Inc’s whole verse.

Rhyno is good and his verses are getting stronger every week. You’re a few adjustments and a few concepts away from having verse of the week material.

Inc you’re progress moving in the wrong direction my guy. You’ve dropped much better material in the BAL. Gotta take your time with your verses and concept. We all expecting better material from you since you not balancing mod duties.

Anyways Rhyno took this clear as day.

Mvgt Rhyno

[SHECK WES]

I crew w/ shooters, raise the ruger, dawg we lettin’ off shots at this nerd
My teams unstoppable once I bring the 5th out like a fkn boogie cousins return
lol this was fire, solid opener
Hit ya block w/ the k, lil nigga ur the target but i'll hit ya team gladly
When the bullets ‘stray, cats’ in ya click'll scramble all throughout the alley
good again
Wifey said ya stroke is horrid, im floored, ya skills in bed get no respect
Heard ya bitch can’t 'standpipe', but I’ve got an extension that’ll gladly get her wet
wording wasn’t the best imo but the bar was cool as a whole
Picture this, for the cash ill hit ya team w/ the clip, dumpin’ at all foes
I’ll snap & spread ya faces in a flash... dawg this ain’t ur typical hood pose
nah not feelin
Im sick when im bussin, say a word & ill end ya life like its nothin’
Start duckin’! Or get the arm raised to ya mouth like u were coughin in public
love the first line, Flow was on point here. The punch itself was decent but this bar def has swag


Vs


Rynos fat ass loves fast food, save my bullets for another head
I'll just wait for the chik-fil-a owner to pouch ur ass instead
lol what? What does this mean
Fgt hiding under an alias hoping we all say nice raps man
You ain't ready for war of the past fam, I got troops ready &&& I'm not a clash fan
ok this is a lot better than the last bar, pretty cool here
Saw you edited out two bars, hopefully I don't dq'd for feeding
I got two bars with the handle at the end, that how I make the score evened
had potential but you didn’t execute it correctly
Go ahead let out that aggression, Vent ur a la-who-s-er, ain't shit ur leading
A movie star, we saw you birthed a Ace, but u suck more than the tit ur squeezing
lol nah man
Come on man beat inc? Naw not this alias rookie, go sit down &&& eat a cookie
Ur Mahomes I'm Brady so if I'm doing my final stretch guess who gettin the lookey
this isn’t ok


Ryno had a cool verse here, some dope punches here and only 1 miss. First two bars were my favorites. Inc you have some cool ideas but you need to work on executing them into actual battle bars. I can tell you don’t really take the time to prepare for your opponent. This was one sided.


Vote Ryno

[Cynic]

I crew w/ shooters, raise the ruger, dawg we lettin’ off shots at this nerd
My teams unstoppable once I bring the 5th out like a fkn boogie cousins return
Wifey said ya stroke is horrid, im floored, ya skills in bed get no respect
Heard ya bitch can’t 'standpipe', but I’ve got an extension that’ll gladly get her wet
Im sick when im bussin, say a word & ill end ya life like its nothin’
Start duckin’! Or get the arm raised to ya mouth like u were coughin in public



Fgt hiding under an alias hoping we all say nice raps man
You ain't ready for war of the past fam, I got troops ready &&& I'm not a clash fan



hadda google that one from incredible but its like a game? Ryno just had more bars that hit for me

ryno

[veritas]

Rhino verse was better in my humble opinion as similarly stated by those who voted before me.

[Flow]

Vote ryno

Incred, your half way there but your execution is off in both wording and direct brutal fucking harshness. Like what I mean by that is I wanna read a bar and be left with an emotion. I want to be one of the following

Haha funny
Ohhh nasty
AHH that was clever

Etc. Your concepts are in there you just need to develop how your going to then word them to get me as the reader to one of those responses. Even just one or two bars like that an it changes the entire read of your verse.

Anyway Vote ry

[DynamiCz]

I crew w/ shooters, raise the ruger, dawg we lettin’ off shots at this nerd
My teams unstoppable once I bring the 5th out like a fkn boogie cousins return

Coo opener!

Hit ya block w/ the k, lil nigga ur the target but i'll hit ya team gladly
When the bullets ‘stray, cats’ in ya click'll scramble all throughout the alley

This is ok, wording made it better

Wifey said ya stroke is horrid, im floored, ya skills in bed get no respect
Heard ya bitch can’t 'standpipe', but I’ve got an extension that’ll gladly get her wet

Pipe/Extension lines kinda ehhh…miss here

Picture this, for the cash ill hit ya team w/ the clip, dumpin’ at all foes
I’ll snap & spread ya faces in a flash... dawg this ain’t ur typical hood pose

Lol funny! Simple hit for me here

Im sick when im bussin, say a word & ill end ya life like its nothin’
Start duckin’! Or get the arm raised to ya mouth like u were coughin in public

Lmao arm lines! I love them in a way, but you kno people hate these lmao. Coughin in public covered this up. Nice closer!

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Rynos fat ass loves fast food, save my bullets for another head
I'll just wait for the chik-fil-a owner to pouch ur ass instead

Nahhhh b

Fgt hiding under an alias hoping we all say nice raps man
You ain't ready for war of the past fam, I got troops ready &&& I'm not a clash fan

Ok here! Very light tho

Saw you edited out two bars, hopefully I don't dq'd for feeding
I got two bars with the handle at the end, that how I make the score evened

Nice

Go ahead let out that aggression, Vent ur a la-who-s-er, ain't shit ur leading
A movie star, we saw you birthed a Ace, but u suck more than the tit ur squeezing

Basic punch/ tit ur squeezing? Lol come on Incred

Come on man beat inc? Naw not this alias rookie, go sit down &&& eat a cookie
Ur Mahomes I'm Brady so if I'm doing my final stretch guess who gettin the lookey

Nahhhh, wording is horrible ending this here! Miss for me


Overall this was a coo matchup, but obviously Ryno took this here and ran with it. His lines overall hit way harder then Increds to get him the win here. Props to both tho

V-Ryno