BLUE BAYOU vs BLAS

[sral]

Due next Wednesday

16-24 lines (agree with opponent)

TOPIC: https://consciousreminder.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/10/22-Thought-Provoking-Illustrations-Depict-How-The-World-Would-Be-Like-If-Animals-Treated-Humans-The-Way-We-Treat-Them-4.jpg
Blue Bayou Blas

[Blas]

sounds good, he can pick how many lines idc

[sral]

You don't have to agree on a line limit if I'm honest, I'm quite lenient, I just know that's what you text battle guys like to do so I tried to keep that going in here for you both. I didn't post an agreed upon limit in every battle if you notice lol

[Blas]

oh ok, never done this b4. ill post b4 wednesday

[Blue Bayou]

a world on it's axis, but not in the way you'd imagine
the human plague, doomed ashamed, this was begging to happen
waited for word to break, this whole thing is in a circus state
time standing still is now walking with a nervous pace
regurgitate morality but that's the definition of a broken path
tunnel vision can't be 20/20 wearing a cloak n' mask
Is there hope you ask? now that the structure is faded
stuck in a shape-shift i tell ya this is fuckin amazing
we stared right & wrong in the face and spit in it
sid vicious no longer has to dance for his critics
what's the power of a dollar if the buck is a wish
a straw can't break the camel's back if it's stuck in a fish


My phones gunna die will edit

[Blas]

forgot about this completely,

lifes such a circus act.. find myself asking where's the purpose at
first you're in control then you've even lost control of that
not a day goes by where i'm not trying to hold a stack
money has my soul it feels like my souls been owned, in-fact
greed & wealth is taking over and i need some help
enslaved these animals when they should really just be themselves
but i got what was coming to me when i took it too far
i was overpowered & put in my place now im the new star
everybody laughing & cheering, i'm hearing my blessings end
but this is what i deserved, a just taste of my own medicine
when you don't give respect you won't get it, seeing this level end
use my story as an example, so you can all be better men

[Adonis]

This is a tough vote, fairly even in terms of enjoyablity (is that even a word?) You both utilized the topic well although Blas was a bit more direct, which worked in this case IMO. On the other hand I liked BB's flow slightly more, but if I'm honest, the fish ending left me scratching my head. It seemed like both were penned on the fly, which isn't bad if done right, and I think you both have some actual topical talents. But, when all is said and done, because these two verses are nearly identical in terms of mechanics and production in my eyes, the slightest mistake truly can, and did tip the scales.

v/ Blas

BB's fish ending was sort of a cliff hanger, I'm not sure why it stopped like that, it didn't really fit into the rest of the verse IMO. Otherwise, two good reads, keep posting boys.

[Cereal]

blue:
dope the straw stuck in a fish was a hot line, all in all real tight.. structure was clean but what shone was your vocab, very nice use of metaphores and real life narative.. dope piece dude flow hot to.. keep it up

blas:
very emotionally driven, it has alot of heart, really dug this piece.. structure tight but still loose to move around in.. very clean with a bit of a punchy outcome.. seems like a through and through verse with a personal element to it..

vote = blue bayou

for more constructed vocab, higher usage.. dope battle guys g/l

[Master Rock]

I was a surprise by this occurring, especially since I was under the assumption that this was going to be a no show battle and on top of that I believe that Blue thought the same. Based on my gut instinct, I believe Blue drop a quick no-show verse for the integrity of the league and felt that he would be able to edit it at a later time. Meanwhile, Blas took advantage of this opportunity and drop his take.

Besides that lets focus on the topic, Blue dropped extremely tight verse with a pattern that hit at every bar. Blue's opener was refreshingly creative as well as unexpected, which I appreciated. When I was reviewing the his verse and relating it to the topic I felt it had some components that related but in other areas I felt his verse fell off course. Blue's flow was also very on point. Now in regards to Blas's verse, the opener was not quite strong but it still was enough to peak one's interest. Now that the interest level is there, Blas's verse went into matters where the connection is made to what people are willing do for money and related that to animals (which I thought was quite clever). Then placed himself into back the situation of the topic nicely and ended it with a lesson to be learned. I enjoyed both verses.

However, If my vote was based on tightness of a verse it would definitely go to Blue. However, in regards to the topic at hand, Blas has this hands down.

[Cereal]

blue bayou wins