Week 2: Jabari Black (1-0) vs. Suthaveli (1-0) - JB WINS

[Zaddy]

Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday and will be open until Sunday.
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours


Line Limit:

Minimum of 10, maximum of 16
If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first.

Check ins are encouraged but not mandatory. Also, swaying/biting/recycling is a DQ

FAILURE TO VOTE ON A MINIMUM OF 4 BATTLES WILL RESULT IN A DEDUCTION OF 2 VOTES IN YOUR BATTLE. NO MATTER WHO YOU ARE!!! VOTE ON 4 BATTLES MINIMUM OR YOU PAY THE PRICE. SIMPLE!


COMPLETE RULE THREAD:

http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=140091


Jabari Black Suthaveli

[Suthaveli]

Got 16 ready for ya, young bull

[Suthaveli]

Ard kid, you got heart & all.. but you know, business.


Knock ur noggin into ya gut. Admitting u're top tier, it hurts ta think it..
Hell, I couldn't even stomach da thought- While u're doin a full fledge Krang impersonation
Look. I'ma bout this money &'ll put in work on u for about a dime
Hold down my shift while pressin f'in Jabari'll see I'm makin dem $$$$$$$ signs
Playing gun-ho on da net'll leave ya real life crippled & bleedin often
Keep doin all dat computer talk from ur chair nerd & end up just like Steven Hawkins
Cuz I pack a gauge, fam that'll splat ya brains. BLAM!
Raisin this huge stick in da air at u has me lookin da hero. Captain Caveman
& I'm Toni from Girlfriends when bein disrespectful w. this big weapon
^ Meaning: I'ma have Jabari's name incorrect after Iettin off da cannon in his midsection
Trust da pump'll give ur body a workout. When I attack it hurts, b...
Target ur core until ya pop up & drop to da ground my guy.. Thas a burpee
He'll not b spared. In fact, think Mortal Kombat when I flare da gat:
Pairin claps Finish Him w. bullets w. his name on it. They'll whistle through da Erron Black
If the machine spit out my paper, I'll have u & stick clique easily laid out
When someone says da secret word, everybody screams on some Pee-Wee's Playhouse

16 gl.

[Jabari Black]

Ima need that extendo

[Jabari Black]

This rifle tucked in the pants like a dress shirt - so let ya men rush/
Soon as they see the arm, they get folded under the blazer like a French cuff/
You the clown type! My crew’ll be camped outside ya crib lettin rounds fly/
Shootin off the tripods...it wave from the stands like the crowd hype/
You denied Dregs’ extension for ya last win...You think that slick shit fine?/
Well i got a beam and a ladder on a big 9...the Inf gon’ have the extension this time/
My shooters made a career of killing. For a couple Gs they’ll have the thing sparkin/
Ex-military cats...I’ll have patriots dumpin the barrel in ya waves like the Boston Tea Party/
Chest shot! I’ll have his heart rate skippin when this 9 go hit em/
The way it clap make the beat sound wrong...it got white boy rhythm/
It was ‘No Smoke’....but he was ‘Alarmed’ when he opened his front door and I appeared/
I ‘enter calm’ wit it ringing- lighting queers. Even line up the kids in the building like a fire drill/
The 30 hanging outta the 9...see what this extendo bout/
It bend back- and put him under the pole...his life in limbo now/
That first shot leave ya smokin, bro. I’ll finish the job when I approach you, hoe/
Then stand over ya wit the fourty-four...n let the nose extend while he lyin like Pinocchio/

[Maximus]

Since y'all are being pussies
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Sutha
Knock ur noggin into ya gut. Admitting u're top tier, it hurts ta think it..
Hell, I couldn't even stomach da thought- While u're doin a full fledge Krang impersonation
DOPE
Look. I'ma bout this money &'ll put in work on u for about a dime
Hold down my shift while pressin f'in Jabari'll see I'm makin dem $$$$$$$ signs
NOT REALLY FEELING THIS
Playing gun-ho on da net'll leave ya real life crippled & bleedin often
Keep doin all dat computer talk from ur chair nerd & end up just like Steven Hawkins
HMM, THIS FEELS PLAYED BUT HAVENT SEEN IT THO, OK
Cuz I pack a gauge, fam that'll splat ya brains. BLAM!
Raisin this huge stick in da air at u has me lookin da hero. Captain Caveman
COOL
& I'm Toni from Girlfriends when bein disrespectful w. this big weapon
^ Meaning: I'ma have Jabari's name incorrect after Iettin off da cannon in his midsection
WORDING WAS OFF HERE
Trust da pump'll give ur body a workout. When I attack it hurts, b...
Target ur core until ya pop up & drop to da ground my guy.. Thas a burpee
COOL
He'll not b spared. In fact, think Mortal Kombat when I flare da gat:
Pairin claps Finish Him w. bullets w. his name on it. They'll whistle through da Erron Black
HMM, OK, NOT REALLY FEELING THO
If the machine spit out my paper, I'll have u & stick clique easily laid out
When someone says da secret word, everybody screams on some Pee-Wee's Playhouse
THIS DIDN'T WORK FOR ME PAL

vs

Jabari
This rifle tucked in the pants like a dress shirt - so let ya men rush/
Soon as they see the arm, they get folded under the blazer like a French cuff/
NICELY WORDED AND SOLID
You the clown type! My crew’ll be camped outside ya crib lettin rounds fly/
Shootin off the tripods...it wave from the stands like the crowd hype/
HAHA, DOPE.. HAD SOMETHING LIKE THIS ON MY MIND THIS WEEK, JUST COULDN'T
MAKE THE RIGHT CONNECTION AS YOU DID. LOLZ
You denied Dregs’ extension for ya last win...You think that slick shit fine?/
Well i got a beam and a ladder on a big 9...the Inf gon’ have the extension this time/
HMM I GET, THE 'INF' PART OF THIS IS KIND OF A REACH FOR ME THO
My shooters made a career of killing. For a couple Gs they’ll have the thing sparkin/
Ex-military cats...I’ll have patriots dumpin the barrel in ya waves like the Boston Tea Party/
COOL
Chest shot! I’ll have his heart rate skippin when this 9 go hit em/
The way it clap make the beat sound wrong...it got white boy rhythm/
LOLZZ
It was ‘No Smoke’....but he was ‘Alarmed’ when he opened his front door and I appeared/
I ‘enter calm’ wit it ringing- lighting queers. Even line up the kids in the building like a fire drill/
DOPE
The 30 hanging outta the 9...see what this extendo bout/
It bend back- and put him under the pole...his life in limbo now/
OK
That first shot leave ya smokin, bro. I’ll finish the job when I approach you, hoe/
Then stand over ya wit the fourty-four...n let the nose extend while he lyin like Pinocchio/
I'VE SEEN BETTER NOSE/PINOCCHIO CONNECTION BUT OK THO

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My verdict: dope match, i got Jabari with the W here, sutha was good but still some wording issues hurt him and most of his concepts coulda been executed better imo, while jabari on the other hand had overall better execution and less misses

[Zaddy]

Knock ur noggin into ya gut. Admitting u're top tier, it hurts ta think it..
Hell, I couldn't even stomach da thought- While u're doin a full fledge Krang impersonation
i had to look this up, thought this was dope
Look. I'ma bout this money &'ll put in work on u for about a dime
Hold down my shift while pressin f'in Jabari'll see I'm makin dem $$$$$$$ signs
nahhh
Playing gun-ho on da net'll leave ya real life crippled & bleedin often
Keep doin all dat computer talk from ur chair nerd & end up just like Steven Hawkins
pretty played angle and you lose points cause it’s Stephen hawking and not Hawkins, coulda been dope but it’s a decent line as is
Cuz I pack a gauge, fam that'll splat ya brains. BLAM!
Raisin this huge stick in da air at u has me lookin da hero. Captain Caveman
alright
& I'm Toni from Girlfriends when bein disrespectful w. this big weapon
^ Meaning: I'ma have Jabari's name incorrect after Iettin off da cannon in his midsection
nah pretty wordy, not sure what you were going for
Trust da pump'll give ur body a workout. When I attack it hurts, b...
Target ur core until ya pop up & drop to da ground my guy.. Thas a burpee
ok here
He'll not b spared. In fact, think Mortal Kombat when I flare da gat:
Pairin claps Finish Him w. bullets w. his name on it. They'll whistle through da Erron Black
nice
If the machine spit out my paper, I'll have u & stick clique easily laid out
When someone says da secret word, everybody screams on some Pee-Wee's Playhouse
nah


2 nice
2 ok
1 Decent
3 misses


Vs



This rifle tucked in the pants like a dress shirt - so let ya men rush/
Soon as they see the arm, they get folded under the blazer like a French cuff/
cool opener
You the clown type! My crew’ll be camped outside ya crib lettin rounds fly/
Shootin off the tripods...it wave from the stands like the crowd hype/
bit of a played angle and the flip wasn’t anything outrageous. Decent
You denied Dregs’ extension for ya last win...You think that slick shit fine?/
Well i got a beam and a ladder on a big 9...the Inf gon’ have the extension this time/
wassnt feelin this one
My shooters made a career of killing. For a couple Gs they’ll have the thing sparkin/
Ex-military cats...I’ll have patriots dumpin the barrel in ya waves like the Boston Tea Party/
lmao yooo this is fire af
Chest shot! I’ll have his heart rate skippin when this 9 go hit em/
The way it clap make the beat sound wrong...it got white boy rhythm/
lol alright
It was ‘No Smoke’....but he was ‘Alarmed’ when he opened his front door and I appeared/
I ‘enter calm’ wit it ringing- lighting queers. Even line up the kids in the building like a fire drill/
oh nah man this one was way too wordy
The 30 hanging outta the 9...see what this extendo bout/
It bend back- and put him under the pole...his life in limbo now/
its decent, the concept is a bit of a stretch and to make it really work I feel like it needed a bit more
That first shot leave ya smokin, bro. I’ll finish the job when I approach you, hoe/
Then stand over ya wit the fourty-four...n let the nose extend while he lyin like Pinocchio/
pretty played concept here, wasn’t feelin


2 nice
1 ok
2 Decent
3 misses


Good battle here and props for going the full 16 with good quality bars. Suth had a few weird concepts in this one but also a few unexpected nice concepts as well, which made for some nice hits. Jabari had LOTB with the Boston tea party bar but I feel he also had some filler joints that didn’t have too much impact for me such as the Inf bar, and the Pinocchio line. The fire drill bar definitely had potential cause I had one in the words too but could never figure out how to execute it. I feel like that’s what happened here, considering it was your wordiest bar. Close battle that can go either way but I have suth edging it.


Vote Suthaveli

[White LGI]

The krang line is fire....caveman line was really good...burpee line dope.... really good verse suth

French cuff was dope....white boy rhythm n the closer were fire...good verse bro

I liked both verses but I think JB gets the edge.....just a more polished verse

[Sinacog]

Suth -

Pretty nice verse, good work on this. You're gifted with wordplay, and have a knack for nice wording. Good work.

Jabari Black - Good work on this one man. That closer was fierce. Very nice work here.

Overall -

Dope battle you two but I'm going with Jabari Black...

V/ Jabari Black

[Aero]

Suth:

Knock ur noggin into ya gut. Admitting u're top tier, it hurts ta think it..
Hell, I couldn't even stomach da thought- While u're doin a full fledge Krang impersonation
I've seen other Krang plays done similarly or better. Not your fault.
Look. I'ma bout this money &'ll put in work on u for about a dime
Hold down my shift while pressin f'in Jabari'll see I'm makin dem $$$$$$$ signs
this could've been dope but you butchered it
Playing gun-ho on da net'll leave ya real life crippled & bleedin often
Keep doin all dat computer talk from ur chair nerd & end up just like Steven Hawkins
nice
Cuz I pack a gauge, fam that'll splat ya brains. BLAM!
Raisin this huge stick in da air at u has me lookin da hero. Captain Caveman
alright but it's a lazy concept
& I'm Toni from Girlfriends when bein disrespectful w. this big weapon
^ Meaning: I'ma have Jabari's name incorrect after Iettin off da cannon in his midsection
You can't start a bar saying you're Toni from Girlfriends lol.. Punch is a no for me
Trust da pump'll give ur body a workout. When I attack it hurts, b...
Target ur core until ya pop up & drop to da ground my guy.. Thas a burpee
alright
He'll not b spared. In fact, think Mortal Kombat when I flare da gat:
Pairin claps Finish Him w. bullets w. his name on it. They'll whistle through da Erron Black
You did a lot of references in this verse. Gotta switch it up this was decent.
If the machine spit out my paper, I'll have u & stick clique easily laid out
When someone says da secret word, everybody screams on some Pee-Wee's Playhouse
No way.


JB:

This rifle tucked in the pants like a dress shirt - so let ya men rush/
Soon as they see the arm, they get folded under the blazer like a French cuff/
lol nice
You the clown type! My crew’ll be camped outside ya crib lettin rounds fly/
Shootin off the tripods...it wave from the stands like the crowd hype/
no
You denied Dregs’ extension for ya last win...You think that slick shit fine?/
Well i got a beam and a ladder on a big 9...the Inf gon’ have the extension this time/
I dont get the Inf part.
My shooters made a career of killing. For a couple Gs they’ll have the thing sparkin/
Ex-military cats...I’ll have patriots dumpin the barrel in ya waves like the Boston Tea Party/
good imagery here this is dope
Chest shot! I’ll have his heart rate skippin when this 9 go hit em/
The way it clap make the beat sound wrong...it got white boy rhythm/
lol aiiiight
It was ‘No Smoke’....but he was ‘Alarmed’ when he opened his front door and I appeared/
I ‘enter calm’ wit it ringing- lighting queers. Even line up the kids in the building like a fire drill/
nope
The 30 hanging outta the 9...see what this extendo bout/
It bend back- and put him under the pole...his life in limbo now/
Too many gun bars at this point good grief diss your opponent
That first shot leave ya smokin, bro. I’ll finish the job when I approach you, hoe/
Then stand over ya wit the fourty-four...n let the nose extend while he lyin like Pinocchio/
played concepts mixed together


Cool battle but neither showed any versatility. I enjoyed a couple of JB's bars more so he gets the dub.

[Saint]

very close here. I had trouble pickin a winner... (references vs gun bars)

I think JB delivered a couple here
french cuffs, boston tea party
tripods was ooook
last 3 missed imo & inf line was eh to me lol

suth: hold down shift could've been.fire but underwhelming execution. opener played idea but ok wording - same w Steven hawkings
i actually liked the caveman & burpee concepts
error black was coo

I've got v.Suth but toss up here...

[Zaddy]

JABARI BLACK WINS