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Cereal
05-29-2019, 10:27 PM
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" I am haunted by humans" - a book theif

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topic:
"And all these birds sing to my rhythms" - Xavier rudd
Mr. J brokenhal0

Cereal
05-29-2019, 10:27 PM
MR. J:

topic:
" I am haunted by humans" - a book theif

Mellow tidings, I hide in an attic where no light enters
my time surrendered, to nonsense in the air, I remember...
case closed, time flies on the web but do I cry? never!
I was climbing, now Im riding & feasting, each tie severs
enjoy my dinner while I think of my strings, my weather
my creation, my etc., all that I crush under my pressure
its been my pleasure as I wander on within my sector.
where some want to be men but are only mice measured
envision what life could be, imagine what you might censor.
our vision aligned never, no foresight, no foresight.
one must admit that no interaction is a boring life
blinded by aspirations, overexposure to more light
collapsing under the pressure, leading to a sore side,
our vision aligned never, no foresight, no foresight.
what a tangled web we weave, I lie under the Sports side
haunted by your laughter with your feet high on the porch like...

Cereal
05-29-2019, 10:28 PM
BROKENHAL0:

topic:
"And all these birds sing to my rhythms" - Xavier rudd

And all these birds sing to my rhythms until the rivers end
as you enter the ocean all becomes one significant blend
see the significance is one drop from that ocean
contains all systems that live and thats one example that rhythm exist

now heres a sample that rhythm is bliss being born in ipsissimus lifts
precision of 6 the flower of 5 with out lifting a pen link in the blend
let that sink in for a thinking with gem before you sink you can swim
your life is pretend like psyches in the pen michael myers how im fighting the end

handicraft consignment street artisans on alignment line up im buying
sharp conscious bargain basement i became money after the days end
third eye iso bionic relay switch competitive teams moonwalk for a profit
roast beef slices looking gamey like gr ch pit fighters itching mites off midas

right so much i got arthritis temporary sympathetic pathetic at times its kinetic
disasters came delivered with a plastic finish scratch the surface yea thats wicked
business picked up for a loseing team cook up this new cuisine pathwork
until i traveled threw ya screen ...

Cereal
05-31-2019, 01:43 AM
Mr J:

a very sleek style in structure with open bars which shift along in a very appropriate manor.. story wise developed very cleanly.. an easy read all in all smooth and no vocab harshly standing out but saying that it was a little too open but still cool which is just my flavor.. still was a cool piece..

BH:
Dope the structure wasn't as tight as MJ but the style of it was more original and more fluid in some parts.. with the climax of the story was what really made it.. it was very poetic and the whole sea thing of its creation and how it travels did it for me.. dope piece..

Vote = brokenhal0

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