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Bodey
08-29-2013, 02:53 AM
dear slim, havent wrote you, let me be honest
my life was swell, fell, and roasted to the bottom
your cd comes out late autumn, everyone'll cop 'em
probly cuz you'd gotten us through emotional dysfunction
sometimes i sink in my stresses when i got 'em
like the 8th grade days of fuck it, boiling water
had a sedative or 2, my self-control had faltered
if i was your daughter, guess what you'd've called me?
probably rob zombie
defeated by bacardi, "flus", and roxies
wishin i had killed myself cuz i always thought i'd want 'em
hated you until the very day; recovery rippled the van
the van that drove us around while we lived away from fam
it was weird to me then, my head would flicker in the sand
first cd that didnt punish you with whats wack from the few last
anyways, i hope you get a chance to make it smash
light a match, november 4th, is my birth, thought i'd mention that

YDK
08-29-2013, 03:11 AM
This was tight forreal some reason the last bar gave me cold chills but it could be the fan blowing on me lol honestly tho I liked this, the flow was cool an I just listened to stan earlier so the beats still fresh in my head so that helped. Content was real an I can't ask for more than that. Good to see you droppin again, keep. It up

Bodey
08-29-2013, 12:42 PM
thank you ydk, i appreciate it. i probly shoulda took my time and did the entire song. that woulda been kinda cool. who knows, maybe i'll do it. but this was more for a writing exercise, and cuz i know the hype is up with him lately. thanks for the read

YDK
08-29-2013, 01:12 PM
Yeah the full song woulda been cool as hell lol but either way its a solid drop

Mr. J
08-29-2013, 02:47 PM
This was nice. deep in its own right
The vibe was on point and kept the piece in line
should have been longer nice drop thpugh

Brain Thief
08-30-2013, 01:22 AM
I can't support this in any way shape or form.

How do you "Roast to the bottom"?
Unless your cooking an ass on a spit

I absolutely detest when people do these poorly orchestrated remixes.
Put your time and effort into doing something original.
Stan has been redone a thousand times, it wasn't dope when canibus did it and it isn't now.

Not to say that it's completely shit, I guess the rhymes aren't bad.
My only problem is derived from the fact that something like this requires no skill whatsoever

I apologize if this comes off as harsh, but you aren't going to get better at writing by catting a style (and poorly)

Wise Wiggles
08-30-2013, 01:58 AM
Cheer up Bodey! You are a good person. Don't let nonsense blind you.

Vulgar
09-10-2013, 09:32 PM
^lol

This was cool-ish. I'm not really an Eminem fan so I can't relate, though I can tell you were writing a piece with some enthusiasm towards one of your favorite rappers. So overall, cool.