10,000 P.C.E.

[ACTIVATE SELF]

There’s a ghost in the machine
It dwells inside the box
There’s “coding” on the screen
Of sigils and spells
A Ouija board of keys
Opens portals into Hell
Uploading entities
Think of H.P. with a Dell
Or Apple tempting Eve
“Please, take another byte”
Hissed a serpent named Steve
Who slithered through the leaf(s)
Of fiber optic trees
Corrupting ancient data
Deleting it with ease
Like “Generation Isis”
Computerized Eden
Generates a virus
(The “Genesis disease”)
Encrypted in the scripture
Encoded in a dream
The secret algorithm
The Oracle perceived

[Objective]

Dude, this was a fucking sick read. The metaphors and similies is unique and interesting, clever way of putting technology in perspective. This was definitely dope.

[ACTIVATE SELF]

Thanks bro. I appreciate that.

[Exis]

Raw as fuck...I've read this 12 times.

[Eŋg]

i liked this brother

[big baby]

sucked thx

[ACTIVATE SELF]

Glad everyone like it. Thanks for reading.

[NYCSPITZ]

This was nice. Bb is a troll. 10000 post computer era?

[big baby]

o haha

no bb rlly thanked it sucke thx?

no troll.


really fucka suck thx.


thx

[PancakeBrah]

Oh I get it it's puns about computers.

Deep.

[PancakeBrah]

Like when GZA did "Labels", released in 1995 (24 years ago), but with computers. Or when the 7th Grade teacher asks you to do alliteration. But, like, in a B+ term paper form. I dig it.

[Geno]

Fire my G. Foh shiggidy

[PancakeBrah]

All I do is write nonsensical non-rhyming paragraphs about vaguely remembered vaginas and Nicorette every 12 months when I'm drunk in the Open Mic Cypher then I delete them the next morning. This, is art. All of the lines are well measured, and pretty close to the same length in terms of Netcees message boards typeface. And there are double entendres. And its kind of like, computers vs. not-computers, in comparison WITHIN the double entendres. A serpent like Steve, is my favorite pun because it's just a descriptive bullshit line barely hanging onto the creative idea of the piece. And adding the (S) to leaf was a masterstroke. Instead of just saying leaf, which still rhymes (it's a more nuanced rhyme, I.M.O.) you let the reader know you know how plurality works (with a wink because its leaves but you know that haha!) but also let the reader know how the reader should read, which is necessary because you are smarter than the reader.

Let's break down a line

"The Oracle perceived"

The oracle is, like, a seer or something and was, like, revered, and what have you, during the old times.

Oracle is also a computer company.

Dope.

[ACTIVATE SELF]

This was nice. Bb is a troll. 10000 post computer era?

Personal Computer Era

Thanks for the read/feed ppl. Much appreciated.

[SCRYPT]

Fire. Nice Read

[HollaFrontOG]

Enjoyed the read. Like everyone else pointed out, the metaphors you kept up and stayed within your scheme, very nice and hard to do. Creative, each line had a purpose

[ACTIVATE SELF]

part II

…processing

[Alice]

part II

…processing

Self!! Hope you’re good. Great read of course. Looking forward to the continuation