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Dope girl
06-13-2020, 10:36 AM
She look in the mirror and see beauty,
Makeup or no Makeup she still pretty.
People amaze by her eyes,
Her personality so amazing.
She have you memorized,
She not afraid to show dark.
She proud of the color her skin,
She don't let nobody judge her.
She accept the way she is,
She has a gorgeous smile.
Bring joy to your heart,
Something about her sex appleace.
Everyone go crazy over style,

DMS
06-14-2020, 10:00 AM
I thought it was very well worded, great technique and whatnot, but I must say I disagree with the message of the poem.

Exis
06-14-2020, 03:07 PM
People amaze by her eyes,
Her personality so amazing.
She have you memorized,

^^Chea!...

Dope girl
06-14-2020, 04:51 PM
Thanks guys

Candy
06-14-2020, 05:31 PM
very very emotional piece i had someone passing a mirror as i read it out so i was like beautiful stencil of a person and then some dope work cutie

Pharaohs Army
06-14-2020, 08:31 PM
This is riddled with spelling and grammar errors.

Pakistani Hand Cannon
06-15-2020, 07:13 PM
this nicer than anything you ever dropped pharaoh...

except for the verse you named after one of mine

it had a good title

rest was dookie

She look in the mirror and see beauty,
Makeup or no Makeup she still pretty.

phenomenal.

Pharaohs Army
06-15-2020, 07:20 PM
this nicer than anything you ever dropped pharaoh...

except for the verse you named after one of mine

it had a good title

rest was dookie



phenomenal.

I'm giving her the truth, unlike the blind compliments she always gets. I.e. yours.

Witty
06-16-2020, 07:42 PM
Something about her sex appleace.

Pakistani Hand Cannon
06-16-2020, 08:21 PM
I'm giving her the truth, unlike the blind compliments she always gets. I.e. yours.

& thats the truth you have to offer? grammatical errors?

great contribution you spellcheckin dunce hoe ass nigga

& its not a "blind compliment" - its called sarcasm, genius.

Dope girl
06-17-2020, 02:33 PM
Thanks everyone

Johnny 6 feet
06-18-2020, 05:21 PM
Based on someone you know? It came off as a personal one. Nice, simple but heartfelt wording about a topic seldom touched upon. I felt you could've gone on longer with this but it was nice for what it was. If the subject is your crush you should show it to her. Nice work.

Ouch
06-20-2020, 04:05 AM
this was pretty good, I mean the thought and emotion behind it... it'd be way better if you took a little more time to write coherently though.

Dope girl
06-20-2020, 08:39 AM
John just a poem from off the top
Thanks for the feedback fellas