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Exis
09-30-2020, 04:08 PM
Ayo...

High plains drifter, with six shooters & a blood colored sash
Eyes remain fixed without a quiver as slugs hover past
Wind swept lined roads witnessin' vignettes of dyin' souls
Brutally executed in firin' squads with cigarettes & blindfolds
A murderin' menace, never burdened with penance
Filled with a death wish & remnants of bourbon I've finished
Once conspired for the type of life that some admire
Not a gun for hire, rather righteous like in the sun retired
Somewhere on a ranch raisin' livestock with chicken feed
Maybe rescue a chick in need, together raise up a gifted seed
A wish indeed, from a sinner on a course of profound wrong
'Cause in reality, I'd fuck you & the horse you rode into town on
No sight of good in this leader of a thousand hired hoods
Burnin' towns to the ground, usin' housin' as firewood
Breathin' an air of arrogance, with a rifle, a Terrorist
Pillagin' villages, takin' the 'the' out of Psychotherapist
Then harrow hits news of a new Sheriff in town
Hope he's fast on the draw 'cause if not, that's a perilous crown
No civilized talks just shots provokin' violence
Instead of pennies for thoughts, usin' pennies to cover up eyelids
Roamin' rollin' plains, bathed in the suns glowin' tint
Face provided shade under the shadow of a beard growin' in
Back in the saddle, the stranger with a smoulderin' voice
Sippin' insecticide from infected hives, my poison of choice
Drinkin' non stop until I vomit, needin' a pale or I'll drop
An alcoholic physician, I'll nurse whatever ale that you got
Death is certain & certainly for sale while demand is high
Wish I could stop it but with this bondage fetish my hands are tied.[

Universe
09-30-2020, 06:06 PM
Damn.

Might be the best I've seen from you. Are you sure you wrote this? lol...

John Dillinger
09-30-2020, 06:25 PM
Damn.

Might be the best I've seen from you. Are you sure you wrote this? lol...

corleone
09-30-2020, 08:25 PM
although, your a herb.. lol this shit was ill.. this is by far the dopest shit you've ever wrote.. I was impressed..

"High plains drifter, with six shooters & a blood colored sash
Eyes remain fixed without a quiver as slugs hover past
Wind swept lined roads witnessin' vignettes of dyin' souls
Brutally executed in firin' squads with cigarettes & blindfolds
A murderin' menace, never burdened with penance
Filled with a death wish & remnants of bourbon I've finished"


peace,



- Cor

Exis
10-02-2020, 04:23 AM
Damn.

Might be the best I've seen from you. Are you sure you wrote this? lol...

Fuck you lol...

Exis
10-02-2020, 04:23 AM
although, your a herb.. lol this shit was ill.. this is by far the dopest shit you've ever wrote.. I was impressed..

"High plains drifter, with six shooters & a blood colored sash
Eyes remain fixed without a quiver as slugs hover past
Wind swept lined roads witnessin' vignettes of dyin' souls
Brutally executed in firin' squads with cigarettes & blindfolds
A murderin' menace, never burdened with penance
Filled with a death wish & remnants of bourbon I've finished"


peace,



- Cor

Mmhmm...gracias.

Johnny 6 feet
10-07-2020, 08:10 PM
This read like you were setting up for a series man. You painted a picture of a western world filled with archetypal characters with well chosen words and some nice compounds which helped the flow along nicely. I can see you're really elevating. It left me wanting to see where the story goes if you got in mind. The scene is set and the characters are there. Nice imagery. Good work.

Inno
10-07-2020, 08:27 PM
no dog references? this shit ass juice

ACTIVATE SELF
10-08-2020, 01:33 AM
Fire

sral
10-10-2020, 03:57 AM
Exis could you kindly PM me when you see this message, please?

corleone
10-10-2020, 04:10 AM
you herb.. lmfao you made me a fan, now I look and feel like you when you read my dope verses and comment with positive criticism.. lol this shit was nasty.. I must of read this like 2-3 times.. lol

Hush
10-10-2020, 07:46 AM
Damn.

Might be the best I've seen from you. Are you sure you wrote this? lol...

Sharp
10-10-2020, 01:33 PM
Objective dead man Mr. J White Earl

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