The Engineer

[Concrete]

ascendancy absolutely corrupts
as life itself self-destructs

dwelling within a lifeless metropolis
debris from the citadel lay scattered
forsaken graves, behold the necropolis
glowing beings irradiate through the opaque haze
distorted silhuettes of diffuse humans
wandering spectres soul searching at a late stage
the air is depleted, dying breaths, it's not easy to tell
mutated fowls circle the red sky like starved demons
could this really be hell

all kinds of disfigured creatures suffering
by the hands of fate, their presence was forged
experiments, evolutionary codex, genetic codes malformed
the primordial cycle, survival, reproduction
laws of nature, extinction, inevitable repercussions
degenerate infants, natural cataclysms
mother nature aint cruel, merely an eyeless mechanism
replication of genes by all means
innumerable souls, condemned ghosts imposed into a machine

what am I really
besides something being
from undressed consciousness
imagine a costume then become it
totality according to plan
to know myself and expand
I had to inhabit them
circling back towards the end
releasing form
at the flick of a red button

[Adverse]

I like the vivid descriptiveness in this piece. You built an awesome atmosphere

The setting is cool but we’re no stranger to apocalyptic settings, anyone who has been in a league here has undoubtedly wrote about this same subject a few times but I just like the vision you laid out

“mutated fowls circle the red sky like starved demons
could this really be hell”

“ by the hands of fate, their presence was forged
experiments, evolutionary codex, genetic codes malformed
the primordial cycle, survival, reproduction
laws of nature, extinction, inevitable repercussions”

Good work man

[Concrete]

Thanks, I'll check out the league and perhaps sign up.

[Eŋg]

atypical. i liked it.

[JESODIST]

Your Dead cotton, Just another text Moron
About to get ripped in two by a head Gorgon
Mormon, I'm an Imminent threat to your last Breath
Bringin heat that Make anything living Sweat and freath
Fuck your wealth, I'll simply crush your Health
To perform like a witch doctor in set, when it's time to overa bet
Then frog leap over ya corpse thus promoting Stealth
Unworthy Puppy, part of the entropy pass, papa ghost, Me
I feed you a hall of fame medal and make you choke on a Trophy
All you fuckers are Corny, Adoring the Money, switching to suddenly Phony
Prancing online, where Only to unpromote a diss artist growing, its boring
Exploring With a structure and style thats lookin whorish and Bony
I'm just a gunless gunny, unsigned; Worthless to Sony
So if you fuck with my kind you gonna be Holly Workin alone with a Tony
Broken toe, kne., I'M pragmatic corroding lastly, slowly
With a Squad ready to mangle and turn your ass to Balony
Baal in a ballad Broski For the tata low key,
I'm Blasting Within the perilous law like a black Falcony
Falconry and sorcery from a Balcony for all to See
Burn Infront of God Like an Allah Degree
Me and me is the only one I know is as Mad as Me
I'm a catastrophic Blasphemy, Provoked Manually, onGoing Annually
High a Smoking Alchemy And all other chemicals Molten Actually
Im a torment Hunting Violently, ready to perform a Postmortem Radiclly
You're golden; Arguably

[Lucipher Howlz]

Yooo this the same Concrete from LA? If so what up its Exoduzt.

If this is the same Concrete I love the way you have expanded as a writer. The descriptiveness you portrayed on a bland topic was really dope. You took it to another level.

"the air is depleted, dying breaths, it's not easy to tell
mutated fowls circle the red sky like starved demons
could this really be hell"----this was dope

"he primordial cycle, survival, reproduction
laws of nature, extinction, inevitable repercussions
degenerate infants, natural cataclysms
mother nature aint cruel, merely an eyeless mechanism"--This is fucking beautiful. The flow is insane and damn I loved the way you described mother nature as an eyeless mechanism.

Really liked this drop

[Concrete]

Appricate that Exo and yeah it's none other than Concrete from LA.
Looking forward to see you in action in the tourney by the way.

[Pharaohs Army]

***new 2023 feed soon

[Pharaohs Army]

Concrete
I honestly don't think this needs feed.

Hardly any, I should say.
Probably a comma after the word "red", before the word "button", at the end.
flick of a red, button...
On initial read I did not see that's rhyming WAYYY up above...and it's good; just hard to spot at first.
I've just edited out my suggestion to cut the last two lines, and simply offered a comma. to keep them.

I REALLY ENJOYED THIS DROP AND THOUGHT IT WAS HIGH QUALITY...shows u r talented.

the skeletal structure/short line format is a nice cool changeup. nice&tightly constructed.