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dead man
10-01-2021, 08:42 PM
how's it going,
i asked quietly ..
the pause was profound
i shifted in my seat. you took a sip of your crown
royal cola, numb our mystery until it boils over
copper plate of slimy filet, side oily okra. you
make me write and make me post it
swim inside my safety ocean
lay me down a deep disposal, hang me
or i may get frozen. intercoastal
weapon holder, metamorphic headless horseman
ex-performer pencil in these memoirs
smoke and allegory
acid washed, receptors torched
amphetamine > melatonin
never slept in REM for more than
7 seconds in a row
kick sketcher soles down any road where
we could grab a pretzel roll for
less than Jersey traffic tolls
to get wherever legends go. i'm tethered to
a sense of hopeless, socialize my fellow dosers
weather change my testimony. hella phony, empty hole
museum campus megaphone. we feigned as intellectuals
pedestal the senate thrones
they'd bathe in blood for twenty votes
stem cells in my breakfast bowl
i'll live to see our bubble blow
subsidized our public and we privatized the money flow
double-wide abundance
all tongue-tied inside our bungalows
polyester comfort zone. sun lamp / artificial snow
then wonder where our "somethings" go.
forget them while we butter toast
and dry erase our fantasies on fridges every month or so
ice dispenser. sprite and seltzer.
leave me to my nightly bender
DUI my license plate expired in 1997
high as heaven. set a fire to everything. the dead occultist
breaking down like ethanol
anxiety, i'm sweating Bulleits
sellers market, plague of locusts
bear attacks, forever bullish
derivatives and leverage open, trojan horse your credit quotient
megachurch and crypto tokens
digitize our disco potions
syrup blend the rum and rose til
gardens grow from brick and mortar
boneyard man, slow striding knowing death is a promise
we're threads inside a universal energy harvest
take me back to Everything. i've wandered too long
hoping one day Thunderclap would ring the alarm
leading us to symbol and psalm. lipid dissolve
so far from any answer now the questions are wrong
curious and calm unsettled spirit at heart
stare at mirrors in the dark, so finally i can hear myself talk
what a nightmare

Incredible
10-01-2021, 08:55 PM
What a nightmare is right. Dope stuff and not too long your flow and word choices make for a easy read. Good stuff

emurgencee
10-02-2021, 12:03 AM
This was cool

"and dry erase our fantasies on fridges every month or so" nice

PancakeBrah
10-02-2021, 12:51 AM
Imagine reading this and being like 'this was cool' I would rather die than say something like that.
If Aero posted it for you? Maybe.

Silly good.

dead man
10-02-2021, 04:41 PM
Youre still cool cake

Geno
10-02-2021, 07:54 PM
I fucking love you man. Fuck. Your skillset is everything i always wanted mine to be.

Your biggest fan..
-Geno

veritas
10-02-2021, 10:00 PM
Dude when I got to the 7 seconds of rem and was heck yeah. You are my favorite besides myself

veritas
10-02-2021, 10:02 PM
Just read this again and want to quote the whole stock market and lipid part. Sheesh.

brokenhal0
10-03-2021, 05:38 AM
mc's at work folks great wordplay

dead man
10-03-2021, 02:05 PM
Very nice replies. Thank you guys sincerely.

Rough week so it’s appreciated

Soule
10-03-2021, 02:08 PM
This would be dope af over a RZA type beat. Good shit man.

dead man
10-03-2021, 02:09 PM
Thx. How’s it going Dagel?

Soule
10-03-2021, 02:10 PM
Just living man. Relaxing during the weekend. Yourself?

dead man
10-03-2021, 04:33 PM
still typing this bullshit into a green square so that should tell you something

Geno
10-04-2021, 02:28 AM
anxiety, i'm sweating Bulleits
sellers market, plague of locusts
bear attacks, forever bullish
derivatives and leverage open, trojan horse your credit quotient
megachurch and crypto tokens
digitize our disco potions


Loved the coin references here man. Checking back in for a second go here. This thing really picks up steam as you read it and its like a good book. The more you read the more you want to continue reading at a faster pace to absorb as much as possible before you fall asleep with the book in your hand and lose your place. This is that book, but i finished mine twice lol

UPN Zuch
10-04-2021, 01:50 PM
I’ve been around 20 years and I’m not sure I’ve seen it done better.

dead man
10-06-2021, 03:27 PM
I’ve been around 20 years and I’m not sure I’ve seen it done better.
Peace king

Wise Wiggles
10-07-2021, 05:20 PM
Your text is liquid still I see. Nice.
Glad I found my way back and was able to catch this piece from you. Didn't think it was too long lol... I have some things to show everyone.. hehe Couple years ago I started writing heavily and only posted to my fb so I have some words I will grace the open mic with for a bit. Hope you staying dead, man lol. Felt this heat up toward the end. Fellow dosers 1997 energy harvest month or so.. key points for me. Stay up black

Pharaohs Army
12-07-2021, 02:41 AM
I started quoting highlights then I stopped cuz I think the whole piece is fucking dope.
I'll have to echo what Zuch said.

This might even read better in paragraph format. Just my opinion.

Anyway, keep it up.

Spoken
12-17-2021, 12:04 AM
This whole thing is quatable because it fed off each line if even one line is removed the whole composition is screwed. Tbh. Loved the content as per usual my dear friend blacketh... The grammar surprising hiccups but i believe it happens time to time buuuut it didnt take away of how grrat this read was and the style switched tbh since the last time i was on and read the dead mans work. None the less neat clean and dope sauce.

dull boy
12-23-2021, 10:31 PM
creepyjack.gif

oats
02-17-2022, 07:25 PM
still typing this bullshit into a green square so that should tell you something

Selfishly, I'm glad you are. Please keep doing it. Reading one of your verses is creatively regenerative for me.

NYCSPITZ
05-11-2022, 02:39 AM
I enjoy biting deadman’s style sometimes

dead man
08-06-2022, 03:44 PM
Selfishly, I'm glad you are. Please keep doing it. Reading one of your verses is creatively regenerative for me.
oats wya

oats
08-31-2022, 05:03 AM
oats wya

still lurking