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Answer
01-02-2022, 12:10 PM
JaysonFresh evaD Quill Adverse

you've all signed in as reserves. I'm throwing this match together in hopes that you all will show. If everything goes well, I'll adjust the tourney brackets as necessary

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Verses due Thursday, 1/6/2022 at 11:59 p.m. EST (yes, Eastern)
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8 lines per team, no more & no less
If both teams agree to it, you can do more than 8 lines. 8 is the absolute minimum.
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If you complete your verse early, feel free to post it or send it to me via PM. I will only post verses once both teams have submitted.

Don't bitch about votes. If you have any complaints, PM me directly and I will assess the situation. Votes without explanations or that appear to be aliases will not be accepted

JaysonFresh
01-03-2022, 09:21 AM
i know yall..

yall wack af. one of u too corny, the other's punches come up short
couldnt connect to a live person if ya fist yelled 'representative' over customer support
plus fresh the type to shoot ya while sleepin at point blank
you lie motionless as i uncover the sheets like a magician's tablecloth yank
And your clever friend is a feathered pen, your tourney path is ending quick
Ironic how whenever Quill’s writing I just scratch my head n dip
This pair of losers collaborating in the lab is no threat
If I found you two holed up in the studio then Jayson’s already stabbed you to death

Quill
01-05-2022, 03:39 PM
Evad acts gangster til I drive thru then he's certainly friendly
The only way Dave'll square up when it comes to beef is burgers at wendys
You faggots think ya'll sick...but this test'll have ya halt..
Cuz this stick to your face? Gon' lead to a negative result
If I let the bucs fly? You should jet before they start mowin ya down
Yeah once the GOAT targets ya, you leaving topless like Antonio Brown
I throw the kind of combos that end up rocking ya life fools
Y'all are just a combination we'll never remember...lockers in high school

Answer
01-07-2022, 09:55 AM
adverse has not submitted a verse in time for the deadline. Given that a new line limit was not agreed upon as the rules state, this will be 8 lines vs 8 lines

voting is open

sral
01-07-2022, 01:45 PM
yall wack af. one of u too corny, the other's punches come up short
couldnt connect to a live person if ya fist yelled 'representative' over customer support

The idea here is nice conceptually, I think the wording of “live person” came off a bit unnatural sounding and clunky but I see how it was kind of necessary to tie-in the customer support angle also. It’s a tough one, general idea is good, but is difficult to really get down well in its delivery and make it hit without sounding overly wordy.

plus fresh the type to shoot ya while sleepin at point blank
you lie motionless as i uncover the sheets like a magician's tablecloth yank

I’m not such a fan of this one personally, I feel like it’s missing something, or I’m missing something, here. Doesn’t the magician usually cover the body then remove the tablecloth and POOF! the person beneath it is gone? I’m not entirely sure if that’s called a tablecloth yank or not but that’s what comes to mind, and I’m still not entirely sure what that has to do with anything else going on here in truth. I’m kind of at a loss on this one, tbh.

And your clever friend is a feathered pen, your tourney path is ending quick
Ironic how whenever Quill’s writing I just scratch my head n dip

Nice. I liked the name play tie in here, simple but effective. I’m sure Quill will have seen similar over a time but I don’t pay much attention to text battles and this is new to me at least and worded well enough for it to work.

This pair of losers collaborating in the lab is no threat
If I found you two holed up in the studio then Jayson’s already stabbed you to death

I liked this one too, maybe a little generic rather than getting at them personally like I would have preferred but it’s still a decent enough line to have some impact, maybe just needed something as a stronger closer ideally to really end on a high. Overall though not bad, I felt like you worked well together and had some good stuff in there but a couple misses too.

sral
01-07-2022, 01:53 PM
Evad acts gangster til I drive thru then he's certainly friendly
The only way Dave'll square up when it comes to beef is burgers at wendys

I wasn’t a huge fan of the beef/Wendy’s angle in truth, that’s been done forever, but the drive thru in the setup wasn’t missed by me either and was cleanly done. Nice wording to this also, it just felt a little i fresh conceptually really.

You faggots think ya'll sick...but this test'll have ya halt..
Cuz this stick to your face? Gon' lead to a negative result

I liked this better, nice and clean hit, short and sweet. This one was also worded well, payoff coming just at the right moment. More like this please.

If I let the bucs fly? You should jet before they start mowin ya down
Yeah once the GOAT targets ya, you leaving topless like Antonio Brown

I’m not sure who Antonio Brown is so maybe this one has gone over my head, I’m guessing he plays for the Bucaneer’s somehow from the setup alone but I don’t care to Google references personally. This one felt like a straight jab to me anyway, lacked the impact of the negative result line earlier for example

I throw the kind of combos that end up rocking ya life fools
Y'all are just a combination we'll never remember...lockers in high school

Nice idea conceptually but the execution wasn’t my favourite, I felt like this could have been worded better to pack more of a punch to it.

A few misses, one that really stood out for me, a few more generic insults but overall not too bad. If I missed the Antonio Brown reference entirely I apologise.

I’ve got Fresh and Dave winning here.

Aero
01-08-2022, 08:55 AM
Jay Fresh

Connect to live person was lol / shoot ya while sleeping? So are you laying in bed with the nigga? You needed to say I'll shoot ya while you're sleeping / Quill was jokes / holed up meh...

Quill

Dave square up beef. Dave the founder of Wendy's hope yall dont miss this.. coo set up punch coo / stick to face needed more information / Antonio Brown bar was cool / combination was aight.. light


Jayson wins but this was close

Sharp
01-08-2022, 12:35 PM
yall wack af. one of u too corny, the other's punches come up short
couldnt connect to a live person if ya fist yelled 'representative' over customer support
funny but light, I fw it
plus fresh the type to shoot ya while sleepin at point blank
you lie motionless as i uncover the sheets like a magician's tablecloth yank
not crazy about this one. I think it's the wording in the punch
And your clever friend is a feathered pen, your tourney path is ending quick
Ironic how whenever Quill’s writing I just scratch my head n dip
fuck with this
This pair of losers collaborating in the lab is no threat
If I found you two holed up in the studio then Jayson’s already stabbed you to death
'holed up' works but I can't put my finger on why I don't love this bar. Not a big miss, will come back and be thorough if it's close



Evad acts gangster til I drive thru then he's certainly friendly
The only way Dave'll square up when it comes to beef is burgers at wendys
the beef thing by itself would be a miss, but square and Dave makes this work for me. Kind of risky cause you're counting on people make the connection that the CEO of Wendy's is named Dave
You faggots think ya'll sick...but this test'll have ya halt..
Cuz this stick to your face? Gon' lead to a negative result
simple but effective
If I let the bucs fly? You should jet before they start mowin ya down
Yeah once the GOAT targets ya, you leaving topless like Antonio Brown
cool
I throw the kind of combos that end up rocking ya life fools
Y'all are just a combination we'll never remember...lockers in high school
clever, I like it

I have Quill with being slightly more consistent. Jay/Dave had some better worded punches (opener and dip were dope) but I thought all of Quills bars hit, where the tablecloth and holed up didn't do it for me. Good read though

V/Quill

Dominate
01-09-2022, 12:13 AM
yall wack af. one of u too corny, the other's punches come up short
couldnt connect to a live person if ya fist yelled 'representative' over customer support
The flip concept is really funny. Wording is a little clunky - 'your punches never connect to a live person' is a weird thing to say. I still like it because of the humour.
plus fresh the type to shoot ya while sleepin at point blank
you lie motionless as i uncover the sheets like a magician's tablecloth yank
Not bad. Creative flip.
And your clever friend is a feathered pen, your tourney path is ending quick
Ironic how whenever Quill’s writing I just scratch my head n dip
This is almost fire. The wp/punch is great, I just think it needed a bit better of a conceptual set up to be its best rather than just throwing rhymes around. Still bar of the battle though.
This pair of losers collaborating in the lab is no threat
If I found you two holed up in the studio then Jayson’s already stabbed you to death
Cool, not a big hit but I like it

Evad acts gangster til I drive thru then he's certainly friendly
The only way Dave'll square up when it comes to beef is burgers at wends
Cool. Not a big punch but lots of wp tie ins that do work
You faggots think ya'll sick...but this test'll have ya halt..
Cuz this stick to your face? Gon' lead to a negative result
Pretty cool
If I let the bucs fly? You should jet before they start mowin ya down
Yeah once the GOAT targets ya, you leaving topless like Antonio Brown
Eh it's OK. Lots of wp tie ins again but the sum of them didn't impress me like the previous bars. I had to google the reference which took from the impact I guess. Some reference to taking his head off or something to flip the 'topless' thing would've helped maybe
I throw the kind of combos that end up rocking ya life fools
Y'all are just a combination we'll never remember...lockers in high school
haha. I like this. Simple but the punch is there and the flip is relatable and funny

Close but I'll give it to Fresh. Quill was more technically sound but the humour and creativity in Fresh's verse scores more points for me, and he had the bar of the battle.

Mac
01-09-2022, 01:04 PM
yall wack af. one of u too corny, the other's punches come up short
couldnt connect to a live person if ya fist yelled 'representative' over customer support
plus fresh the type to shoot ya while sleepin at point blank
you lie motionless as i uncover the sheets like a magician's tablecloth yank
And your clever friend is a feathered pen, your tourney path is ending quick
Ironic how whenever Quill’s writing I just scratch my head n dip
This pair of losers collaborating in the lab is no threat
If I found you two holed up in the studio then Jayson’s already stabbed you to death

vs.

You faggots think ya'll sick...but this test'll have ya halt..
Cuz this stick to your face? Gon' lead to a negative result
If I let the bucs fly? You should jet before they start mowin ya down
Yeah once the GOAT targets ya, you leaving topless like Antonio Brown
I throw the kind of combos that end up rocking ya life fools
Y'all are just a combination we'll never remember...lockers in high school

shit.. I really wanted Quill to win here but he had that opener which was a miss .. idk I didnt really like it and the beef thing was predictable.. I got fresh here with the consistency.. too bad Quill teamed up with suicide watch man might be hanging on a rope in the basement right now.. jk ad sry

v/ fresh with more consistency.. even though that representative is borderline miss

bare ryu
01-10-2022, 04:10 AM
jayson/evad

yall wack af. one of u too corny, the other's punches come up short
couldnt connect to a live person if ya fist yelled 'representative' over customer support
not bad, good angle but could have worked on the wording a bit.
plus fresh the type to shoot ya while sleepin at point blank
you lie motionless as i uncover the sheets like a magician's tablecloth yank
i actually really liked this bar. smooth wording
And your clever friend is a feathered pen, your tourney path is ending quick
Ironic how whenever Quill’s writing I just scratch my head n dip
i feel like this angle is a bit played but its not a bad approach. a little weak though
This pair of losers collaborating in the lab is no threat
If I found you two holed up in the studio then Jayson’s already stabbed you to death
kind of a miss for me. not terrible but maybe wasnt that impacted by the wording

quill / adverse
Evad acts gangster til I drive thru then he's certainly friendly
The only way Dave'll square up when it comes to beef is burgers at wendys
pretty funny angle. always wondered why their shit is like that. a little light for me though
You faggots think ya'll sick...but this test'll have ya halt..
Cuz this stick to your face? Gon' lead to a negative result
heater. love it
If I let the bucs fly? You should jet before they start mowin ya down
Yeah once the GOAT targets ya, you leaving topless like Antonio Brown
this one is tough as well
I throw the kind of combos that end up rocking ya life fools
Y'all are just a combination we'll never remember...lockers in high school
ehhh this one didnt hit as much for me. alright closer i guess

my vote goes to quill /adverse for this one. close battle though. a lot of jaysonfresh's bars were good but i think quill was a bit more consistent. good stuff

UPN Zuch
01-12-2022, 11:42 AM
Evad acts gangster til I drive thru then he's certainly friendly
The only way Dave'll square up when it comes to beef is burgers at wendys

Ugh, a beef/fast food flip. No thanks
You faggots think ya'll sick...but this test'll have ya halt..
Cuz this stick to your face? Gon' lead to a negative result

I mean, it’s not bad

If I let the bucs fly? You should jet before they start mowin ya down
Yeah once the GOAT targets ya, you leaving topless like Antonio Brown

Hmmm, okay

I throw the kind of combos that end up rocking ya life fools
Y'all are just a combination we'll never remember...lockers in high school

Come on



yall wack af. one of u too corny, the other's punches come up short
couldnt connect to a live person if ya fist yelled 'representative' over customer support

Not a fan of the wording, concept was cool

plus fresh the type to shoot ya while sleepin at point blank
you lie motionless as i uncover the sheets like a magician's tablecloth yank

It’s okay

And your clever friend is a feathered pen, your tourney path is ending quick
Ironic how whenever Quill’s writing I just scratch my head n dip

Lol I dig

This pair of losers collaborating in the lab is no threat
If I found you two holed up in the studio then Jayson’s already stabbed you to death

Ehh


Underwhelming battle, team Dave had less corniness and LOTB so they get my vote.


EDIT: had the verses backwards

Fracture
01-12-2022, 11:50 AM
dave and jayson-- I liked the opener, a little long winded, but pretty clever. Also felt the Head n dip quill line was pretty solid. the other two bars didnt do it for me

quill & adverse--- burger at wendys was nicely worded but such an old concept. antonio brown was a nice recent event but out of all the angles that could of been done this one was pretty vanilla. really only line i cared for was the high school combo closer


with that said, I gotta go with dave and jayson by like half a line. quill and adverse had mostly great wording but lacked in real creativity

Answer
01-12-2022, 02:10 PM
fresh/evad advance at 6 - 2