~ Individually, we are one drop. Together, we are an ocean. ~ Ryunosuke Satoro

[Hush]

In a time way before recognition two lovers stirred
Way Before the simplest colors merged or man discovered words
these endless entities since the days of young conferred
beyond space and times curves, they lay where none disturb
as raindrops became torrents then shrunk into fountains
an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain
observing forests tower from the seeds of a flower
still they held fast with all strength an there power
gripping tighter as roots grew to trunks at there bower
to a love the minutes seconds an hours sought to devour
when summers was hottest an winters were colder
hope hung on un cowered shoulders as days made them older
volcanoes grew from boulders an hellfire burnt out to smolder
when all other wonders were over he still gasped to behold her
still holding as the world advanced at no more than a prance
forever entranced…
stuck in the bitterest curse if it isn’t romance

[Split]

slick verse... I'll feed this tonight

[Nice]

Even though you're a faggot and spelled their wrong this was pretty dope. Props

[Dope girl]

Dope piece Hush, Fix errors.

[NYCSPITZ]

HelloKitty approves of this title and now has psychoanalyzed Hush: we can assume that Hush is inclined towards monogamy and he will marry for life when he does. Although he will yell at his wife to take out the garbage every Thursday, it's only out of love. He is a philosopher at heart and has taken to heart much of the glib advice offered by sagacious OG's rolling blunts at the park. When Hush goes to KFC, he uses the sauce in the green packets but after he has his fourth child he will switch to the mild habernero. You have been evaluated.

[Split]

,bower" was strange word choice. I thought the multis felt natural and unforced.

The opening was strong, an abstract/ thought-provoking statement to set the mood. the effects of time were a big focus, the uncertainty that comes with it was nicely portrayed.

an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain
observing forests tower from the seeds of a flower

That imagery stood out to me, pretty vivid over all. Nice read

[Allen Knight]

this was dope, i usually never peep om but this was def a good read

as raindrops became torrents then shrunk into fountains
an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain
^^^
that was slick as fuck imo

props on this vic

[Flow]

Great Title - Enjoyed the topic choice.

as raindrops became torrents then shrunk into fountains
an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain
Love the imagary here

Very impressive with keeping the multis going throughout, topic on point and great imagery.

Agree with Split though on the Bower part. Seemed forced. Didnt work fo me.