Hotdogvendorman vs Destroyer - {HDVM wins}

[Orc]

NBL
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Destroyer hotdogvendorman

[Destroyer]

sup D?
12 good?

[hotdogvendorman]

check...12 is good

[hotdogvendorman]

lets go..

happy birthday pussy. .kill yaself,
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yea jus start ya tomb .. cuz the talk of pulling heat causes doom
if its beef n 'stroganoff...it entered his mouth, n blew his noodle 'cross the room
its gotta suck being a coward but you got them clown components
see dime hoes hit the club ,he shits bricks, builds a wall n becomes the flower on it
but i got ur girl face down son, its such a great outcome
she fucked me n said Nothing Was The Same, U just whined all over it like Drakes album
this lame spent 40 yrs breathing and nc is still featured on his homepage
des lived long enough to answer age old questions ...but THAT just makes us question old age
im fire rapping, a hotdog drop brings that pyro factor
im working the kinks out now, this old fuck gets his done by a chiropractor
niks dope but u dont compare so im telling gramps quit
des ur truly a man amongst boys... living out ur fantasies on some neverland shit

[Destroyer]

u won't be happy at the finish, cuz I'm on a mission to put hoes to rest
the only 'Ven elation' we'll see is when des puts holes in his fucking chest
des walks with three glocks, & u can see just how this desert e pops
& when I drop the V, I'll leave him on endor man with the fucking ewoks
ur in a legend text crew which by definition means that now ur not running shit
most black men are dead by 25, props on being one to put a 3 in front of it
I'm old but ur old news, I stay ballin while u try to catch breath
u like 2chainz... cuz that's how many it takes to fit round ur fat neck
like the joke about fat chicks, & the trick to spot the bitch's pussy
this cat has to roll his head in flour to find the wet spot to stick the cookie
not a good look, D, it's such a waist... It's time to stop, kid.
I heard when that bitch from ur work spit in ur face, u said, 'mmmmm.... sausage...'

[StarFaggot]

Deon:

yea jus start ya tomb .. cuz the talk of pulling heat causes doom
if its beef n 'stroganoff...it entered his mouth, n blew his noodle 'cross the room
the creativity here was great. the wp in stro gun off works. I would've worded it better technically but that's picky.. nice bar
its gotta suck being a coward but you got them clown components
see dime hoes hit the club ,he shits bricks, builds a wall n becomes the flower on it
that's one colloquialism and three cliché sayings in one line... overboard and didn't sting
but i got ur girl face down son, its such a great outcome
she fucked me n said Nothing Was The Same, U just whined all over it like Drakes album
lol @ its such a great outcome.. this bar is coolish
this lame spent 40 yrs breathing and nc is still featured on his homepage
des lived long enough to answer age old questions ...but THAT just makes us question old age
eh aiiiight, delivery is better here
im fire rapping, a hotdog drop brings that pyro factor
im working the kinks out now, this old fuck gets his done by a chiropractor
a bit simple
niks dope but u dont compare so im telling gramps quit
des ur truly a man amongst boys... living out ur fantasies on some neverland shit
eh ok, another old joke didn't really hit though

Overall: Good to see you back. I like the creativity here but you can tell you didn't much effort wording it. Good concepts wording needed work.


Destroyer

u won't be happy at the finish, cuz I'm on a mission to put hoes to rest
the only 'Ven elation' we'll see is when des puts holes in his fucking chest
hmm, ok nameplay but the T in ventilation isn't silent buuut a lot of people make it silent so I'll go with it
des walks with three glocks, & u can see just how this desert e pops
& when I drop the V, I'll leave him on endor man with the fucking ewoks
eh ok the creativity is there.. not a fan of these type of nameplays.. endor ewoks connection cool but not really hittin
ur in a legend text crew which by definition means that now ur not running shit
most black men are dead by 25, props on being one to put a 3 in front of it
uhhhhm, what so he's 35? and now he's dead? if there's more to it then I'm sure its still not grea
I'm old but ur old news, I stay ballin while u try to catch breath
u like 2chainz... cuz that's how many it takes to fit round ur fat neck
lol this is nice
like the joke about fat chicks, & the trick to spot the bitch's pussy
this cat has to roll his head in flour to find the wet spot to stick the cookie
again the creativitys there but ehh no effect
not a good look, D, it's such a waist... It's time to stop, kid.
I heard when that bitch from ur work spit in ur face, u said, 'mmmmm.... sausage...'
negative lulz

Overall: It was a decent verse. All jabs.


Rationale: Deon edges this with less misses.

[Decibel]

yea jus start ya tomb .. cuz the talk of pulling heat causes doom
if its beef n 'stroganoff...it entered his mouth, n blew his noodle 'cross the room
Dig the creativity here.. Nice opener
its gotta suck being a coward but you got them clown components
see dime hoes hit the club ,he shits bricks, builds a wall n becomes the flower on it
Not really feeling here..
but i got ur girl face down son, its such a great outcome
she fucked me n said Nothing Was The Same, U just whined all over it like Drakes album
Good shot here...
this lame spent 40 yrs breathing and nc is still featured on his homepage
des lived long enough to answer age old questions ...but THAT just makes us question old age
Good bar. Setup was better here than some of your others.
im fire rapping, a hotdog drop brings that pyro factor
im working the kinks out now, this old fuck gets his done by a chiropractor
Same concept different way... feeling the bar above this better
niks dope but u dont compare so im telling gramps quit
des ur truly a man amongst boys... living out ur fantasies on some neverland shit
I seen to many neverland bars in the days... it better be fire to land... and this didnt




Overall: Your opener was a great start but then you seem to slack throughout the rest. This verse was pretty good highlighted by opener.. the first old age bar... Good stuff




u won't be happy at the finish, cuz I'm on a mission to put hoes to rest
the only 'Ven elation' we'll see is when des puts holes in his fucking chest
I sense many people saying this is forced WP/NP. I usually put the T, herd with the T silent as well... I'll give you a decent opener
des walks with three glocks, & u can see just how this desert e pops
& when I drop the V, I'll leave him on endor man with the fucking ewoks
Not digging this to much
ur in a legend text crew which by definition means that now ur not running shit
most black men are dead by 25, props on being one to put a 3 in front of it
Seems vague.. IDK where the 35 comes into play?
I'm old but ur old news, I stay ballin while u try to catch breath
u like 2chainz... cuz that's how many it takes to fit round ur fat neck
I like the creativity here, and its nice
like the joke about fat chicks, & the trick to spot the bitch's pussy
this cat has to roll his head in flour to find the wet spot to stick the cookie
I give this an okay jab here.. creative, not strongest but decent
not a good look, D, it's such a waist... It's time to stop, kid.
I heard when that bitch from ur work spit in ur face, u said, 'mmmmm.... sausage...'
Seems a rushed bar to finish to me



Overall: Opener was decent, 2chains line was nice, and the cookie line was a decent jab. Your creativity is great, however, it seems like your lacking that sting. Your closer was rushed as well it seems... careful with the WP and it may being forced...





Overall Vote: This was a hard one to edge out but Im giving it to Hotdog for a little bit more consistency/stronger hits. This could go either way from judgment on style.

[Brian Bryan]

Deon was lazy. I liked the stroganoff line, though it didn't completely hit for me, the wallflower line was okay. The shit bricks thing has been done, but he actually didn't go for the obvious and tried something different with it, so I appreciate that. The Drake line is current, but I saw it coming, he shouldn't have capitalised the album name. It made it too obvious. I always have a problem with lines like that, I can read where they're going before the end of the line 75% of the time. There's no misdirection. The age old questions was okay, again I felt it could have been done better, decent recall to it. I didn't like the kinks line, didn't like the closer.

Destro had a decent opening nameplay, not great, endor man I didn't like, not the 25-25 line really. LOL @ 2Chains line, the head rolled in flour thing just wasn't funny to me, but the closer was roflzzz in my opinion and I give it Destro off the strength of that.

Weak battle.

[Geno]

Yo. This was an ill battle

At work and can't really break down
Thought deon came out funny as fuck lmao
Des had some good lines, but just not enough to overshadow the lol's from deon

Good battle
V-deon

[Diode]

I thought Deon half-assed the shit out of this and/or is just rusty. Nothing clever from a usually clever guy.

Des forced a bunch of crap (vent-elation was terrible) but at least he played with his punches.

Des by a tiny asshair.

[namesake]

this lame spent 40 yrs breathing and nc is still featured on his homepage
des lived long enough to answer age old questions ...but THAT just makes us question old age
im fire rapping, a hotdog drop brings that pyro factor
im working the kinks out now, this old fuck gets his done by a chiropractor
liked these 2, rest were meh.

vs

I'm old but ur old news, I stay ballin while u try to catch breath
u like 2chainz... cuz that's how many it takes to fit round ur fat neck
simple but your best bar


I got deon taking this quite easily tbh... Dunno if both half assed but this weren't up to much kop... saw better from both... V- Sausage

[Cakedout]

This battle was ok,

3 of Hotdog bars caught my eye..

but i got ur girl face down son, its such a great outcome
she fucked me n said Nothing Was The Same, U just whined all over it like Drakes album,
this lame spent 40 yrs breathing and nc is still featured on his homepage
des lived long enough to answer age old questions ...but THAT just makes us question old age,
its gotta suck being a coward but you got them clown components
see dime hoes hit the club ,he shits bricks, builds a wall n becomes the flower on it


Wasn't really feeling destroyer shit but I digged this bar..
I'm old but ur old news, I stay ballin while u try to catch breath
u like 2chainz... cuz that's how many it takes to fit round ur fat neck

V goes to hot dog for having the more efficient verse.. & decent punches

[Destroyer]

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[DLB]

stroganoff

vs

none

v/deon. this battle was trash to me tbh, nothing was funny or good besides the stroganoff bar imo. des wasnt funny or witty to me & deon came off played af but he got it for having the lotb

[Destroyer]

who's this nigga?

[DLB]

dlb

[Destroyer]

oh word?
fuck you lil nigga
14 year old ass nigga
too young to buy grand theft auto ass nigga

[Defiant]

yea jus start ya tomb .. cuz the talk of pulling heat causes doom
if its beef n 'stroganoff...it entered his mouth, n blew his noodle 'cross the room
this lame spent 40 yrs breathing and nc is still featured on his homepage
des lived long enough to answer age old questions ...but THAT just makes us question old age

vs


ur in a legend text crew which by definition means that now ur not running shit
most black men are dead by 25, props on being one to put a 3 in front of it
I'm old but ur old news, I stay ballin while u try to catch breath
u like 2chainz... cuz that's how many it takes to fit round ur fat neck


close as fuck, i liked the 325 line, most seemed to not get it probably lotb, i got des here didnt think deon was at his best
nameplays were awful tho

vote - destroyer

[DLB]

im 18

[Blue Bayou]

yea jus start ya tomb .. cuz the talk of pulling heat causes doom
if its beef n 'stroganoff...it entered his mouth, n blew his noodle 'cross the room
this lame spent 40 yrs breathing and nc is still featured on his homepage
des lived long enough to answer age old questions ...but THAT just makes us question old age

vs.

ur in a legend text crew which by definition means that now ur not running shit
most black men are dead by 25, props on being one to put a 3 in front of it
I'm old but ur old news, I stay ballin while u try to catch breath
u like 2chainz... cuz that's how many it takes to fit round ur fat neck


Really hard battle to judge because both had a couple pretty cool bars with some lazy misses... I'm gunna say Des edged it because i thought his misses were a tad more enjoyable, and altho deon's stroganoff wordplay was cool it was a bit of a reach in the first place... truly a toss up but im giving the edge to Destroyer ... cool battle


Vote - Destroyer

[hotdogvendorman]

voted on ak, snoop n arch... only ones left open

[Boredom]

but i got ur girl face down son, its such a great outcome
she fucked me n said Nothing Was The Same, U just whined all over it like Drakes album,
yea jus start ya tomb .. cuz the talk of pulling heat causes doom
if its beef n 'stroganoff...it entered his mouth, n blew his noodle 'cross the room
this lame spent 40 yrs breathing and nc is still featured on his homepage
des lived long enough to answer age old questions ...but THAT just makes us question old age

vs.

ur in a legend text crew which by definition means that now ur not running shit
most black men are dead by 25, props on being one to put a 3 in front of it
I'm old but ur old news, I stay ballin while u try to catch breath
u like 2chainz... cuz that's how many it takes to fit round ur fat neck


all in all i got hdvd with the more direct approach and having 1+ quotable, des just didn't have the same impact with his bars.

[Neighbor]

yea jus start ya tomb .. cuz the talk of pulling heat causes doom
if its beef n 'stroganoff...it entered his mouth, n blew his noodle 'cross the room
its gotta suck being a coward but you got them clown components
see dime hoes hit the club ,he shits bricks, builds a wall n becomes the flower on it

vs.

u won't be happy at the finish, cuz I'm on a mission to put hoes to rest
the only 'Ven elation' we'll see is when des puts holes in his fucking chest
I'm old but ur old news, I stay ballin while u try to catch breath
u like 2chainz... cuz that's how many it takes to fit round ur fat neck

Close battle, good shit from both.. felt like y'all were even in quotes, but Deon's punches were more direct, while Des' were a little obscure.. I think D had less misses, while Des has LOTB w/ the 2 Chainz bar, that shit was lulz.. overall, I gotta go w/ Hot Dog for consistency & being a little more crisp

v/ HDVM