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Orc
09-24-2013, 07:30 AM
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Arch. hotdogvendorman

Arch.
09-24-2013, 08:29 AM
Aiming for 12... good luck...

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=20146
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=20133
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=20144
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=20139

hotdogvendorman
09-29-2013, 05:40 AM
bang.

you'll get kicked in the dirt, then sent to a hurst
Arch ill dominate beyond belief like they worshiped at the same temple or church
make me come to your crib for popping that stupid shit
smash ur face into a case of stairs n watch ya fam give me that look for doing it
i carve kids up. its levels to this shit so act hard n get struck
bitch mickey ds 86'd a burger cuz it sounds stupid sayin Arch Deluxe
while ur girl thinks of ur sex n gets left w/ empty regrets
she combed over the facts but left her comb over my house the minute she left
idk if its love or lust but you shouldn't trust the slut
when the same game had dudes packed inside her for a ride like a shuttle bus
i flex first, get fresh sir, just to pick up the next skirt
while deportes in clothes you sport would make espn discontinue the network

bang.

Arch.
09-29-2013, 10:27 AM
Well...

I don't know what drugs Swerve ingests but you winning ain't how this ends
If you're considered the favorite's a girl taking your fat ass out for a friend
You're wack as fuck lately. I'm not lying. I hope you haven't been trying
D's been on such a steep slope his verses need to be marked w/ black diamonds
Orc said you're Reuben and I agree, but not in how your queer face is
You're like the sandwich... sloppy as fuck with meat hanging in weird places
Bitches flock to you to fuck them? I'm calling it horse shit
Any broad trying to turn Deon... will need a license to operate forklifts
Deon da Gawd? Pfft... no one worships this fat swine
Shit... you could barely God, Des cuz all your shit is as awful as THAT line
Shoot kid in a crowd. You're delusional if you think my aim needs work
I'll have D's face on his man's chest like "In Memory Of" t-shirts


...blah...

Unfukwitable
09-29-2013, 01:26 PM
one had a strong start then had a sorta decline and the other was more consistent .

v/ Arch

Allen Knight
09-29-2013, 09:02 PM
i carve kids up. its levels to this shit so act hard n get struck
bitch mickey ds 86'd a burger cuz it sounds stupid sayin Arch Deluxe
while ur girl thinks of ur sex n gets left w/ empty regrets
she combed over the facts but left her comb over my house the minute she left
idk if its love or lust but you shouldn't trust the slut
when the same game had dudes packed inside her for a ride like a shuttle bus

vs

You're wack as fuck lately. I'm not lying. I hope you haven't been trying
D's been on such a steep slope his verses need to be marked w/ black diamonds
Orc said you're Reuben and I agree, but not in how your queer face is
You're like the sandwich... sloppy as fuck with meat hanging in weird places


v/deon, cool little battle here, but i thought hot was more consistent in his verse both dropped some good shit but deon had the lotb
and his verse overall was solid

StarFaggot
09-30-2013, 07:20 PM
hotdog:

you'll get kicked in the dirt, then sent to a hurst
Arch ill dominate beyond belief like they worshiped at the same temple or church
could've been good but too random
make me come to your crib for popping that stupid shit
smash ur face into a case of stairs n watch ya fam give me that look for doing it
uhhhhm no?
i carve kids up. its levels to this shit so act hard n get struck
bitch mickey ds 86'd a burger cuz it sounds stupid sayin Arch Deluxe
multis off, bar was aiiight...
while ur girl thinks of ur sex n gets left w/ empty regrets
she combed over the facts but left her comb over my house the minute she left
coolish, could've been better
idk if its love or lust but you shouldn't trust the slut
when the same game had dudes packed inside her for a ride like a shuttle bus
better set up needed here, liked the same game concept
i flex first, get fresh sir, just to pick up the next skirt
while deportes in clothes you sport would make espn discontinue the network
Dee poor taste... lol cant let that slide at all.. deportez


Arch

I don't know what drugs Swerve ingests but you winning ain't how this ends
If you're considered the favorite's a girl taking your fat ass out for a friend
no
You're wack as fuck lately. I'm not lying. I hope you haven't been trying
D's been on such a steep slope his verses need to be marked w/ black diamonds
I like how you have a straight forward talk to him style.. but this bar is just ok
Orc said you're Reuben and I agree, but not in how your queer face is
You're like the sandwich... sloppy as fuck with meat hanging in weird places
decent but could've been way better
Bitches flock to you to fuck them? I'm calling it horse shit
Any broad trying to turn Deon... will need a license to operate forklifts
nah
Deon da Gawd? Pfft... no one worships this fat swine
Shit... you could barely God, Des cuz all your shit is as awful as THAT line
could barely God? makes no sense.. liked the reference to that horrible wp though
Shoot kid in a crowd. You're delusional if you think my aim needs work
I'll have D's face on his man's chest like "In Memory Of" t-shirts
NO



Both of you are way better than this... Neither tried which doesn't make me want to take time out n vote. Luckily I gave you two the benefit of the doubt. I've got Deon here based on polish

Blue Bayou
09-30-2013, 10:35 PM
i carve kids up. its levels to this shit so act hard n get struck
bitch mickey ds 86'd a burger cuz it sounds stupid sayin Arch Deluxe
idk if its love or lust but you shouldn't trust the slut
when the same game had dudes packed inside her for a ride like a shuttle bus

vs.

Orc said you're Reuben and I agree, but not in how your queer face is
You're like the sandwich... sloppy as fuck with meat hanging in weird places


Okay battle, i've seen you both drop a lot better but it's obvious both were pretty quick drops... Deon won this, more styandouts and the comb over flip was pretty dece as well... thought Arch had a lot of pretty average and meh lines in this one... props to both


Vote - Deon

Beyond
09-30-2013, 10:52 PM
you'll get kicked in the dirt, then sent to a hurst
Arch ill dominate beyond belief like they worshiped at the same temple or church
while ur girl thinks of ur sex n gets left w/ empty regrets
she combed over the facts but left her comb over my house the minute she left
idk if its love or lust but you shouldn't trust the slut
when the same game had dudes packed inside her for a ride like a shuttle bus

vs

I don't know what drugs Swerve ingests but you winning ain't how this ends
If you're considered the favorite's a girl taking your fat ass out for a friend
Bitches flock to you to fuck them? I'm calling it horse shit
Any broad trying to turn Deon... will need a license to operate forklifts
Shoot kid in a crowd. You're delusional if you think my aim needs work
I'll have D's face on his man's chest like "In Memory Of" t-shirts


Cool battle. Dominate Beyond belief wasn't that bad of a 'Beyond' flip. Seen worse. Stairs/stares? I'm not entirely sure if that's what you meant, but if so, verrry played. Not really feeling the McDonald's line. See you got food on your mind, though. Multies just distracted me. They were off. I like combover. That's good. Shuttle bus was good, too. Wasn't feeling Deportes at all. Favor it's was a good opener. Steep slope was alright. Something of a throwaway line, IMO. Reuben was decent. Not my type of punch. Or perhaps just needed a stronger connection. Idk. Forklift is funny. Wasn't feeling God, Des. Thought the original play was fine and Bags was being a faggot, tbh. This flip was much worse than the actual line, IMO. Closer was good, though. Clever. Overall close battle. Deon had stairs and Arch had Goddess. Those cancel eachother out as worst lines. The other two I quoted from Deon I wasn't feeling as much as Arch's. Arch's nonquotes were just personal taste and still borderline while Deon's I genuinely didn't like. Could go either way, obviously, but I got Arch taking it. Props to both.

/v arch.

Sn00p
10-01-2013, 06:29 PM
you'll get kicked in the dirt, then sent to a hurst
Arch ill dominate beyond belief like they worshiped at the same temple or church
while ur girl thinks of ur sex n gets left w/ empty regrets
she combed over the facts but left her comb over my house the minute she left

vs.

I don't know what drugs Swerve ingests but you winning ain't how this ends
If you're considered the favorite's a girl taking your fat ass out for a friend
You're wack as fuck lately. I'm not lying. I hope you haven't been trying
D's been on such a steep slope his verses need to be marked w/ black diamonds
Orc said you're Reuben and I agree, but not in how your queer face is
You're like the sandwich... sloppy as fuck with meat hanging in weird places

hmm. so idk. y'all didn't try too hard it seems. but since both of y'all didn't, this is pretty close. i got deon at 2 quotes and arch at 3. ur misses were about even. so it comes down to the standouts. and arch's got more. that's why i gotta vote for him. could see it going either way tho.
v/arch

DLB
10-02-2013, 12:26 AM
More votes plz

its 3-3

Tic
10-02-2013, 12:54 AM
I have Arch taking this by a slim margin. I think he worded his punches better so that they landed more effectively. Not a bad battle, but I didn't feel like you guys were really swinging at each other. Both of you had decent ones and terrible ones. Best advice to both is work on wording your punches so they land with more ferocity.

DLB
10-02-2013, 02:26 AM
i carve kids up. its levels to this shit so act hard n get struck
bitch mickey ds 86'd a burger cuz it sounds stupid sayin Arch Deluxe

vs

You're wack as fuck lately. I'm not lying. I hope you haven't been trying
D's been on such a steep slope his verses need to be marked w/ black diamonds

v/ arch. yo real talk, for some vets, this battle was trash. no zingers here, ya'll might be rusty or just falling off into a steady decline but from the stuff i quoted, arch had the better quote and had another bar that could've been quoted but didn't cause of the horrible wording here. it was just horrible tbh how this battle turned out

Boredom
10-02-2013, 02:47 AM
idk if its love or lust but you shouldn't trust the slut
when the same game had dudes packed inside her for a ride like a shuttle bus

vs


Bitches flock to you to fuck them? I'm calling it horse shit
Any broad trying to turn Deon... will need a license to operate forklifts
Orc said you're Reuben and I agree, but not in how your queer face is
You're like the sandwich... sloppy as fuck with meat hanging in weird places

v/ arch for having +1 in quotables the lotb w/ the reuben line shit was funny as fuck, deon just didn't have anything that really was on point super solid imo.. could be style preference but i got arch taking this.

Dominate
10-02-2013, 02:54 AM
i carve kids up. its levels to this shit so act hard n get struck
bitch mickey ds 86'd a burger cuz it sounds stupid sayin Arch Deluxe
while ur girl thinks of ur sex n gets left w/ empty regrets
she combed over the facts but left her comb over my house the minute she left

vs

Orc said you're Reuben and I agree, but not in how your queer face is
You're like the sandwich... sloppy as fuck with meat hanging in weird places
Bitches flock to you to fuck them? I'm calling it horse shit
Any broad trying to turn Deon... will need a license to operate forklifts


Even on quotes...

Wasn't feeling the stair/stare line or the closer from Deon. Downward slope/black diamond I've seen before and I didn't like the goddess line either from Arch... lol even on misses as well

Close battle


Of the OK bars... I dug favour its & face on mans shirt a little more than dominate beyond belief and shuttle bus, just a little more creative IMO and the favour its hit better as a punch than the ur moms a slut line... so edge to Arch here


v/ Arch