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Camp Bell
01-30-2013, 09:59 PM
my flow is pearl harbor nonsense with nonstop progress
you wanted to see the content in these odd jobs, fresh?
then tell hiroshima, it's a god send this bomb not next..
i'm addicted to illiterate, if you tell me my homi's not read?
tsunami spins, a few bodies mixed, kamikaze's shot dead
if split's opinion was a quiet threat to entice my best..
i'll wright in text that's fly to death wit vicious twin engines
my tightened threads and ignorant rhythms, enlighten heads
a tyrant in the building, tyson's intuition, biting is for bitches
i'm fighting for my right to vibe in vents at lined event billings
blowing lime that hit ya mind then shits silly, pine in sin city
vice in my grip, its not in likeness of chris, i'm into gift giving
take these rhymes as they meant to be, fine intricate keys..
divine as da vinci unleashed, derived from the sickest of inks
cries from my inner beast that survives off an iron centerpiece
supply my victories or instantly be denied the lives you sinners lead.

voidformula
01-30-2013, 10:51 PM
Favorite part was;

take these rhymes as they meant to be, fine intricate keys..
divine as da vinci unleashed, derived from the sickest of inks

Thought that was pretty smooth.

It got a bit hard to flow around 2/3rds of the way through but picked back up in the end. I think it was mainly the engines line that threw me off. I'm sure if I re-read it a few times I could understand your scheme a bit better for that part, I'm just basing off first read-through.

Camp Bell
01-30-2013, 10:58 PM
Favorite part was;

take these rhymes as they meant to be, fine intricate keys..
divine as da vinci unleashed, derived from the sickest of inks

Thought that was pretty smooth.

It got a bit hard to flow around 2/3rds of the way through but picked back up in the end. I think it was mainly the engines line that threw me off. I'm sure if I re-read it a few times I could understand your scheme a bit better for that part, I'm just basing off first read-through.

word, you may have lost the flow, cuz thats the end of the "addicted to illiterate" line, and it almost makes you wanna read it fast up to that point, then it slows you down then speeds you back up again wit the "tyson" line..lol thanks for checking me out tho fam

Darth Yoda
01-30-2013, 11:32 PM
Cool

Split
01-31-2013, 07:09 AM
Haha this was nasty yoooo
Hw long you been writing? Your scheming falls together so nicely, almost reminds me of Dull Boy.

a tyrant in the building, tyson's intuition, biting is for bitches
i'm fighting for my right to vibe in vents at lined event billings

FUCKING awesome. When you kept that scheme running at the end, evisceration. Damn dude. Lol'd at some of the member references as well. Nice flex.

take these rhymes as they meant to be, fine intricate keys..
divine as da vinci unleashed, derived from the sickest of inks
cries from my inner beast that survives off an iron centerpiece
supply my victories or instantly be denied the lives you sinners lead.

Cool, I feel you.


Content was fresh. Mechanics were ill. Don't forget the message, but yo if you like rhyming for rhyming's sake I can see you pulling that off... You should hop in the cypher. Keep keyin